Reviews for Star Ocean - At the crack of dawn

BY : VGSS


  • From Alcaloid on March 24, 2003

    Ah, the stamina of youth... There was a time when I...sorry, I digress, back to the fic: I liked the way you kept sight of the romantic component in this chapter, and described their lovemaking in a convincing, passionate way. I mostly liked that part where Rena used her magic, I just hate it when people write about a girl's first time and the guy gingerly breaks her hymen up, she suffers underscribable pain, and then has 100 orgasms. After you've read a couple of fics with clueless scenes like that, they cease to be even remotely funny, but the way you wrote it makes sense in the frame of the game, and is pctlyctly acceptable. I commend you for taking care with details like that, it makes the story that much more enjoyable.

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  • From Alcaloid on March 10, 2003

    Good work on keeping the story in accordance with the game's script. For a moment there I was wondering what was going on with her virginity, you did great with the whole situation, using well the fact that she is ignorant. Do you intend to explore the whole game? I'll be reading for sure ;)

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  • From Alcaloid on March 10, 2003

    hot hot hot! An hour in the shower though? I'd like to have such an efficient water-heater lol. Seriously, another great scene, and you avoided exxagerations as is too often seen when dealing with 'first times'. Good work.

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  • From Alcaloid on March 10, 2003

    Well written, and realistic enough while still appropriately kinky :)
    Nice ending btw, I just love when a fic ends by a little detail like that.

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