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Reviews for Blood Soaked Heir

By : RaneAria
  • From ANON - _sigil on November 19, 2004
    "Make mental note: Read previous reviews before babbling away on your own, Sigil."

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  • From ANON - _sigil on November 19, 2004
    The beginning wasn't bad. It was short, but not bad at all. This early in the story it's more than a little difficult to tell, but be careful so Tyler doesn't turn into yet another Gary-Stu. No one wants that.

    However, your story could Really use spell-check, there are far too many spelling errors in it. Some of them are slightly amusing as well. And you should use paragraphs, that bunch of text was too packed in to be easy for the eyes. Wouldn't hurt if you had a beta-reader to point out the parts where you went repetitive.

    I know all this is terribly vaguely put, but I don't like to give comments based on one chapter alone. Then again, perhaps it is better if you check your English Before you write the any more. Good luck with the writing!
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  • From ANON - JadeTokier on September 30, 2004
    Still take into consideration everything else I said, but scratch the beta part. Starting my junior year and I didn't realize it was going to be this hectic!:)
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  • From ANON - JadeTokier on September 09, 2004
    I like it so far. The only thing I can say is you should go through and proofread and if you don't want to, no problem. Just send it to me and I will beta it for you. Also, and I have been the victim of this too, the site sometimes puts one chapter ione one long big paragraph, so if that is what happened then I'm sorry. If not then one thing: paragraphs are your best friends. Other than that, keep up the good work!^^
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