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By : maiafay376
  • From Drowning on February 06, 2007
    It is a brilliant story. I think the characterization was pretty much spot on. We only get a few cut scenes to see how everyone acts anyway.

    As for Leon being a canon sue...that never really crossed my mind. If he turned into a creature that IS sensual and alluring as a characteristic, then everybody should want him. Anyway, it's not as if he wants most of them back, (which I think is a shame in Saddler's case- but that's just me :D) that would make the story a kinda pointless fuck-fest.

    I'm a bit disappointed you cut out most of the Thomas bit...that made me laugh.

    Anyway, good job! ^^
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  • From Minwax on February 06, 2007
    Well, it's well written. I'll give you that. Frankly, I think the characterizations are inaccurate to say the least. But then again, this is fanfiction. It's all about the sex anyway.
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  • From Syrra on February 06, 2007
    Your writing style is gorgeous. You give enough detail (without having too much!) and flesh out your characters fairly well considering the ah, subject matter. While there could still be more depth to your character development, one must pause to consider if such development would just get in the way? The final scene with the Sovereign and Leon was very good, the interaction between them was very interesting, and the Leon vs. Self conflict was very well portrayed. However, the movement of the characters was often confusing. I'm not asking for a picture, but a semi-thorough redescription of everyone's orientation every few paragraphs or so would be greatly appreciated.
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  • From MegFallow on January 25, 2007
    Oh my god you did it! This is way better the second time here than in FF.net (no offence) you are such a good writer! Yay! :D
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  • From sam1 on January 24, 2007
    That BITCH! I can truly say I hate Ada and her cold and violent behavior towards Ashley and Leon. The best thing is that at least Leon now knows just how low Ada is willing to go to achieve her whims. Excellent revision, Maiafay. TBH, I did see a couple of typos but nothing that detracted from the story or the flow of the story. Looking forward to the next revision.
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  • From ANON - Eme C on January 22, 2007
    One of the few fanfics I have ever read and the most well-written of them. Could use some minor editing, especially for repeated words and grammatical tweaks, but overall admirable.

    One example of a revision-
    Original: "Cables ran thick and serpent-like toward the middle of the room, where a large oversize chair sat like a forgotten grotesque toy."
    Revision: "Serpentine cables ran thick to the center of the room where an oversized chair sat like a grotesque forgotten toy."

    I hate fan fiction, so for me to enjoy reading this is quite an accomplishment.
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  • From ANON - Almighty Mo on January 20, 2007
    I really am enjoying this series of fic, especially the rewrites. The first time around was well done, but the changes that you have made work for me so much better. Keep up the great work!
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  • From sam1 on January 18, 2007
    Okay, I finally managed to log on to review. First of all, I've read your RE stories and love them. I applaud your desire to go back chapter by chapter and revise. That shows a dedication that many don't bother with. Secondly, Saddler is indeed a clever being and I could envision each part of the story as I read it. For me to get so pulled into a story means that the author has to have a way with writing in a perfectly descriptive way.

    I'm looking forward to your next revised chapter as well as the next chapter of DAOP even if Leon isn't in it until the end.
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  • From ANON - Anon on January 10, 2007
    HORRRIBLE..........just kidding.im constantly checking your LJ for upates, im hooked to your writing.
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  • From ANON - Tygrrlyli on January 08, 2007
    Hi, for once I will review on this site. Even though we (the site and I) hate each other. Anyway, love the fic (this is my....third read through?) uhmm but I kind of noticed a repeated spelling error. It's nothing big but you constantly have "secrete" as opposed to "secret." In some cases "secrete" might be the word you wanted, but I think you want "secret." That's all, sorry for bringing in spelling cause I honestly don't really like when people do that in reviews, so yeah. Can't wait for whenever the next DAOP comes out ^_^
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  • From ANON - Starshine on November 18, 2006
    I've been reading both Rare and Ashes over and over again, each time I notice more details that contribute to the story. I think it really has to be read several times to be fully absorbed. Which kind of adds to the page hits but not review hits. But I will make more of an effort to review in the future ^^ The one memorable line that stood out in my mind was, "In Leon's land, the fun never stops." how true, poor Leon XD
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  • From ANON - sad mofo on November 15, 2006
    “Well, it is my aura; I think I should have a right to know what color it was before you started eating it!”

    That line made me CRACK UP for some reason. I actually woke my dog...
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  • From ANON - anon2 on October 14, 2006
    How mature. Yeah, lets go and flame a story just because *our* story was flamed; and of course all because Maia gave a decent (it wasn't that bad guys...seriously) critique, that means she must have made the ANON one too. Really, give it a rest. This flame war is highschool crap, and needs to stop. You can't take constructive criticism it seems, so perhaps concentrate on that besides running over and flaming a fic for the hell of it.

    GROW UP!
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  • From ANON - nightmaremuse on October 14, 2006
    The notion has crossed my mind that perhaps there are a significant people frequenting this website who are underage? The sheer idiocy of flame wars astounds me. I mean really, it reminds me of when I was seven.

    But moving along before thinking about it makes my own IQ drop to their level.

    As you undoubtedly already know through LJ, I think your writing is fantastic. Honestly. Not just to impress any other bitter and moping authors that might be milling about the review page. Very few published stories are of this calibre.

    The characterisations and plot are delightful. I have waited eagerly for every one of your chapters (both of this story, and others) and have never been disappointed with a boring, predictable plot or dull characters, or uninspiring dialogue. Most often I find myself marvelling at your ideas.

    I particularly enjoy the descriptions that arise from your use of language. These descriptions are made all the more poignant by the way you challenge convention. And that, of course, it was separates "tales" from "art". Too many authors are bound by stereotypical styles of writing that results in dull (but perplexingly acceptable) stories that are more like fairy-tales for three year olds than linguistic delights. As I say, you have managed to develop a unique and almost lyrical style.

    Unfortunately, this often goes over the heads of the fools who are to ignorant to understand the difference between weekly trash magazines and literature.
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  • From ANON - Mel on October 13, 2006
    Wooie... I love it when people have nothing else better to do with their time other than spout out shit. Eyes bleeding? Hon... try to use a better insult. If you wanted to get revenge on Maiafay, you didn't do the trick. ;) Just to assure you, darlin'.

    So fuck off and crawl back into the pathetic hole you came from. No one needs to hear your lame attempts to flame someone who didn't deserve it in the first place.

    Have a nice day, bitch.
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