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By : Seje_For_Days
  • From ANON - Reader on June 05, 2015
    Man. You write pretty well, which is refreshing for this site, considering how low-quality a lot of the stories can be. Your method is also admirable, and gives you lots of flame to keep going. I hold one, rather large problem with it however. You can take my word for it or leave it.

    Your 'lemon' breaks and such, interspersing of the narrative with comments such as 'pull those pants up!' and such. I know you're going for a humorous vibe, with a familiar wink to the reader... however, it's very bothersome to the eye. Not only does it break me out of the narrative, but it's also highly unprofessional and unnecessary. It's adultfanfiction.net, we all know what people came here for. The touches of humour aren't bad, but you need to work on your writing to develop a way to smoothly integrate it into the story. RIght now it reads as a well written story, but choppily paced. At the same time, the tone of the humor - the sudden flashes away from the smuttier scenes, the breaking of the narrative with a quip, the nature of the humor within the story- shows your green.

    Overall, 3/5 stars. You're doing well so far, but there's always room to improve. Keep writing though. It's up to you to take my review as a proper review. But I feel if you did, you could create a story even ten times more worth reading.
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