So when is the next chapter? I'm curious to see how this turns out and what kind of karma is involved for Warren. Its written well and makes me want to get back into writing my own fanfic. I hope you write more soon. 

Why not continue? I want to see how Warren is going to fuck Max and Chloe at the same time and fill their bellies and pussy with his sperm. It needs to fertilize them again, I want pregnant lesbians. Please write a new chapter.

Been a while since I had time to read a story, picked this one pretty much at random.

Good storytelling, I really liked the sections from Max's perspective.

minnor spelling errors aside amazing use of adjectives!

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Fun stuff, hope he gets away with it.  Looking forward to lesbians getting pregnant.

Hey! I'm one of those who enjoyed your story and encouraged you to write more. Liked that chapter, nice story progression and really creepy undertones with Warren getting way into his power trip. Hard to find stories that tread the fine line between outright rape (there's tons of simple rape fics) and mindfuck, especially written in a way where predator keeps his way with his prey for some time, days, weeks, with victim non the wiser. Really enjoying it so far and hope you won't feel discouraged and continue.

That being said, sex in this chapter feels... somehow unsatisfying. For someone that busts his nut every day in a week with his longtime crush, Warren blows his load way too fast, and acts way too un-perverted with new girl. Quick oral, almost no foreplay, little focus on currrent partner, I feel all that could've been avoided, if Warren acted a bit like teenage boy he is. Kissing and groping Rachel a bit, just for fun, patting Max's butt and saying that she can rest while her friend picks up the slack, maybe doing some mock-up dialogue while feeling up Chloe. "Hey, hot stuff, I'm raging lesbian but just for you, I'll suck your cock" , move her around, lie with his head on Rachel's knees and put Chloe on top of himself to really drive in how lucky he is to be surrounded by lesbians and fucking them. 

Maybe even start to leave little stuff like lovebites, leaving bra's clasp opened, pants a little lower than usual, little touches to have fun and enjoy his powers beyond 'freeze time, fuck girl'. 

Just my 2 cents. Have a good day!

Simply amazing timestop goodness, I wait for more. And boy, do Chloe+Max lesbian action interrupted by Warren sound good!

Dark, but some stories have to be in order to be fun!

Eagerly awaiting more!

So, my thoughts.  I'm not really a fan of 'true' non-con; especially not with violence. I prefer for the girl to be hesitant but ultimately not completely unwilling.  However, since Max was at the time unaware of what was happening to her, I'll give that a pass.

Also not a fan of Evil!Warren, but I understand that what the story needs, the story gets.

What I really did like was the emotions and mental turmoil surrounding Max's unwilling orgasm. Simply perfect, you did a wonderful job contrasting the pleasant sensations vs. the psychological distress.

Although I have to wonder, given that this Max is not only a lesbian but apparently a virgin as well, is she going to do some 'exploring' and see what went on down there, and find out 'Hey, that's different'?

So even though I can see that the review may not seem flattering, I did actually like the story.  If Chapter 2 is Chloe, might I presume Chapter 3 would be Kate?

I want another chapter.....so here's a review :)

I am liking where this is going. I think maybe the longer it goes on the more submissive the victim should get. Cannot wait for the next chapter.