Reviews for Vault 69

BY : SandStormHero

  • From LoverNDfighter on March 10, 2018

    Are you still on this story?? I like it alot better than some of your other ones and hope you continue to write it.

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  • From JBS2294 on February 25, 2018

    Great fic so far. Can't wait for an update. You should have the sister go nuts and attempt rape because of her insane workload. Like have him wake up to his sister with a full on crazy face or something above him.

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  • From LoverNDfighter on February 19, 2018

    Doing great so far, but where's the next chapter we were promised last month?

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  • From NeitherSoldier on February 15, 2018

    I would love to see more and find out what happenes

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  • From Happydalek on February 05, 2018

    Just wanted to say how attached I got to this story in such a short time. I had to create a profile just to say that. 

    I adore the way you've got characters inactering; inside & outside of the sex scenes. It really makes it feel that more real. 

    I look forward to the continuation whenever you feel ready to publish the next piece. ^_^

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  • From TheLegend216 on December 12, 2017

    I totally love this storyline, and the way you set it up. Please update this soon. So many of us are waiting for you to continue this. Its been so long. Please dont stop. 

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  • From Jomahawk2694 on June 15, 2017

    Ok, I have quite a lot to say about this story, so I'm going to start with the positives.

    1. This is really in line with the established Fallout lore, and that is awesome.

    2. This is the first time I've read a story about Vault 69 that actually makes sense.  Hell, this is the first story about Vault 69 I can actually remember reading that was longer than one chapter.  So great work there 

    3. The idea that the single male in Vault 69 being a teenager is an interesting one, and I'm really impressed with how you managed to make it realistic.  It truly is pretty much every 16 year old males dream and fantasy to be in a place where they are the only guy, surrounded by all kinds of women who not only are available whenever they want, but HAVE to let them have sex with them.  But when actually put into that position, the awkward wins out over the lust.  So really good job with that 

    4. The story is actually interesting, and a story about Vault 69 was the absolute last place I expected to find a multi-chaptered story, let alone one with good pacing and character development.

    5. The sex, when its actually taking place, is very, very well done.  Keep up the great work with that, and make sure that you explore all different aspects of the sexual sides of people.  With 999 choice, i'm pretty sure Tomas is going to come across almost every single facet of human sexuality.  (And you have been hinting that Tomas is developing feelings for his sister, which I am personally hoping you do.  Tomas and Clair would be great in my book ;) )

    Now then, onto the (hopefully) constructive criticisms.

    1. Along with many other reviewers, I feel that you have done a great job setting up the world of this vault, and that now, story can give way to longer and more detailed sex encounters.  Tomas has become far more confident than he was when he started, its time for him to get down and dirty (pun intended)

    2. This one is a bit of a personal one.  The whole incentive system you introduced in the last chapter has made me think of some very nasty possibilities.  With the promise that getting pregnant means a much lighter work load, fresh food and other sought-after amenities, the tone of getting pregnant has gone from "you will be ensuring the future of humanity generations from now" to "get knocked up so you don't have to work as hard anymore."  Also, with the carrot being less work and more luxury in exchange for getting pregnant, what happens when ten, twenty, thirty, or even more women corner Tomas somewhere and demand he make them pregnant?  What if he says no?  I don't think they would thak that answer very well.  I don't know where you stand on the debate of "can men be raped", but I personally believe that a mob of women holding Tomas down and then taking turns to fuck him while he is begging them to stop is not a good idea.  Maybe have the Overseer come up with a law to go along with the law stating that if Tomas asks for sex, you give it to him.  Maybe a law saying "If Tomas says no, you don't try to force the issue, or punishment awaits."  

    Basically what I'm saying is, please don't turn this into a vault where women fight and kill each other to get pregnant so they don't have to work hard anymore, and Tomas ends up strapped to a table, naked, drugged up so he's always hard and basically no better than a sperm bank.


    Sorry about getting kinda graphic near the end there.  Like I said, I REALLY like the direction you have taken the concept of Vault 69.  I REALLY want to see Tomas and Clair at some point (hopefully soon), and I REALLY want you to continue making this story.  


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  • From TotallyTheOne on May 18, 2017

    I'm actually enjoying this story, I was pleasantly surprised to find a half decent plot surrounding what amounts to a cunt of the week story.

    Good use of the fallout lore.

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  • From FartucusMaximus on May 03, 2017

    Your story made me want to create an account just to review it, no other story here has caught my attention, you write well, keep things going on a smooth pace, and I am eager to see what happens next, hopefully more confidence :D

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  • From Games_Bandit on April 24, 2017

    I wonder who Tomas will have on his dick next? This story is great at portraying Vault 69 and just how much stigma a man would get in an all female environment. I think it would be anxiety inducing to say the least.


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  • From SailorNemesis on April 20, 2017

    Good to see chap4, could have used some more editing for spelling but well written.  Disappointed we only had one brief sex scene, I think you did enough plot and set-up early on.

    Speaking of plot, their `carrot' is a good thought but there are real problems with implementation.  Even assuming they can keep their stud from being harassed constantly for sex, what if 50 or more women end up pregnant at once?  It could happen and it would be a real dent in their work-force.  Anyway, hopefully we'll focus on the sex and not get caught up in worker revolts, etc.  Hope to read more soon.

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  • From Fapman on March 29, 2017

    Fantastic! I cant wait for you to take this further. There are many interesting possibilities, and I cant wait to read what you will do with them

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  • From Biggie on March 26, 2017

    By far one of the best fanfictionselection I've read, please continue you left off right when it was picking up speed....but again great job

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  • From Jehuty-Prime on March 24, 2017

    Please update this story! I love it and willing want the kid to fuck his mom and the Asian doctor bad! Also the leader Mable and the blonde soldier woman, should be hot! Keep up the good work!

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  • From Enigma on February 24, 2017

    Damn that was hot. Please update this. 

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