Reviews for Messed up Lara

BY : HPharem


  • From Jackass2016 on April 10, 2017

    I know that you were inspired by another story but it is almost a carbon copy of it . You need to get a little out of fantasy as well . But as a whole the story is good and you can get it even better by being more realistic and the reason for Lara to give head was not very good as well .



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  • From AFFModerator on April 09, 2017

    Please correct your disclaimer.

    Your disclaimer doesn't have one of the two parts we need to see. It must say that no money/profit is made. Saying that it’s just for fun or just for entertainment purposes is not enough.

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  • From SailorNemesis on April 09, 2017

    Decent, but needs work especially on realism.  20" cock, seriously?  And no human cums enough to fill half a coffee cup and if she drank it, it sure as hell would not taste much at all like coffee.  Eliminate such nonsense from your writing and it will be significantly improved.



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