Reviews for Sonja the Barbarian

BY : Jamesroper1

  • From MkSlave on October 17, 2018

    I've read many of your stories throughout the years; Your writing skills are developing really well. You have a talent for telling a compelling story, and I can tell you really care about making a good tale.

    My only critique is sentence structure. There's a few run-on sentences and comma splices. You have a tendency of combining sentences with the word "as", which makes them long and wordy. I don't think I can post links, but I'd recommend the Purdue OWL website. There's a section on punctuation and commas that could help. Another resource is Grammarly, which proofreads for grammar mistakes. It's free too!  

    Overall, the only issues are on the technical side. You're great at crafting a story. I look forward to reading more.


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  • From Fukushu-sha on December 20, 2017

    This is cool. I've read some of your stuff before and I've seen your writing steadly improve. It's nice to see you go for to a more narrative-centric style here. You've shown that you can do it well with a great quality of writing and nice detail. If you haven't already, I would consider posting on AO3 as well as here, it would probably get more attention (not fanfiction though, cuz they're boring). I've also noticed that you've posted a few starts and removed them. I guessed that you might have been unsatisfied with some ideas and maybe you are a perfectionist. Not that that's a bad thing, it's good to do your best. Any way, I'll hope to read more soon.

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