Reviews for The Lone Wandering Couple

BY : Morgan Shepard

  • From Hannible-Lecter on May 03, 2018

    Part way through chapter 4 and quite enjoying it so far. Grammer wise just remember that if the following word starts with a vowel then it's an instead of a.

    As for you comment on chapter lengths, most fantasy books fall between 3000 and 10000 words, so if you fell like you chapters comfortably fit the 5000 word count keep it at that. If you write what feels comfortable to you it will feel more natural to the readers.

    Those where tye only real criticism is have for you story at this point and I look forward to reading what you have to offer fyrther down the line.

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  • From SailorNemesis on January 18, 2018

    Well written.

    I guess it's a sign of the times that a rape scene in an ero-fic merits such attention.  Sad what things have come to.  It is just fiction and you think people will be traumatized.  You are probably right.

    At the start, Nat is contemplating that she is now legal for sex and looking forward to that.  Yet when she meets Ama, they seem like sex is routine for them.  I guess it could be just Ama who has experience with others, but the writing feels like this is not their first time.  You should probably address that.

    Looking forward to Christine being molested.

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