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Reviews for Luka's Story 4- The problem with gods

By : Ditmag
  • From Breadhouse on December 24, 2021

    Hey ditmag, thanks for the authors note, i really appriciate you what you said and i'm looking forward to what you have instore. I'm a bit sad to know what im looking forward to will be bitter sweet, but tbh i understand. a sad ending to a good story is still a good story. I was very happy to learn that Luka's story would get a part 5 though, as much as im sure you could be tired of writing about the same characters and wanting to branch out. you created a very wonderful narative about his life and learning more about it has been more and more enjoyable the more that ive read.

    On a personal note, idk how other people feel about violence towards the characters, but personally that wasnt what bothered me. it wasnt that Alice did that, or that luka almost died, it was the aftermath. 

    Alice not realizing or understanding exactly how horrible what she did was, or how toxic her obsession for revenge had become, or even thinking about the aftermath of what would have happened had she actually killed luka. she just cried to luka about how stupid she was and said sorry, and he forgave her. As much as that experience traumatized luka, it really should have been just as traumatizing on her. 

    Its embarressing to admit but it took me like 3-4 days after reading that scene to stop being so angery about it. Not at you, Its your story you can write it how ever you like. At alice, I just started to hate everything about her after that. I'd be sitting in my car driving to the story and just see luka getting pulled into her mouth in my head thinking.. God fuck that bitch..

    honestly that was probably one of the bigger factors in me being so happy that he eventually ended up with tomano. after a 200 year toxic, abusive and co dependant relationship he finally could be with someone that valued and cared for him. 

    anyway, like i said, its your story. at the end of the day, they are your characters, They live in your house, i just got to come over and meet them. which was lovely. 

    And i think you should fully embrace the writing style youve been developing. the story telling and humor has been delightful, Youve made me laugh, cry, as well as other bodily fluids. I plan on reading many more of your stories to come, and hope that more people find and come to appriciate your writing in the future.  

    Much love. 


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  • From Breadhouse on December 22, 2021

    So i just binge read luka's story 1-4 over the last few days. While i did have an issue with a few things, all n all, blown away by the story you made about a H game. quality fucking stuff and the writing is incredible. admitedly a lot of my initial issues rose from the story in the MGQ game, like alice's cold treatment of Luka while he is slowly falling more and more in love with her. But the thing with her second mouth.. that was to much. not that it happened, but that he forgave her, like the same day. I get he forgives everyone and thats sort of his thing, but something more than, "im sorry" "ok lets go fuck" really should have taken place in there. Im also really sad we didnt get any of the Luka tomano romance, That was genuinly heart breaking, of all the monster's he's met she seems like the one that would have actually been a good partner for him. having already read the 1st chapter of the new story i know that eventually happens, but if you ever feel like going back and writing some stuff about that, you know, just go with it. 

    all n all. i would give your writing 5/5 stars. even with the stuff i didnt like it was still creative, fun and hot as absolute fuck. I am now deeply emotionally invested in the world you created. (not the MGQ world, your world, just to be clear) Can not wait to read more and see what you do next with the story. 

    And i gotta say, im glad you added more to the end of part 4, You were right, even after the 2 epilogues it didnt really feel complete, the last few chapters really added a lot to the story. And that thanksgiving chapter was like a perfect bow at the end of luka's journey. so wholesome. 


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