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By : AoiNikko

From ANON - Lilith on January 15, 2006
You haven't updated in so long. *Sniffs.* I need to see if fics are finished when author has been gone so long. Cursed curiousity.
Also, you may want to check chapter two. I think it cuts off in the middle since we didn't see Leon save Selphie or even see introductions.

I feel for Riku. Poor kid. Though, angst is always good. Spy Wakka is also amusing. Shu I think is very...ignorant I suppose is the only thing you could call it as well as Kairi. Sephiroth is good too. I'm not really sure if I want Cloud to go with him or not. Leon I feel sorry for to. To have the one you love hate you is said. Not sure what I can say to improve except for the weird grammar things that seem to happen so often on this site. You know the whole "But"But thing. It was in your chapter, so I remember it. For choices....I actually want them all to happen because Sephiroth plotting is always good, Cloud being a parent is amusing, someone needs to meet a merperson already, and I want to know the whole story about Daisuki's already! Um, yeah. Hope you update! ^_^
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From ANON - Shiruy on December 30, 2005
Hi!
I really like your story, it�s the first time that I read a KH-merpeople-AU. ^^ A big YAY! for the cute Riku/Sora-Scene in the
last chapter, but you know, I hate Sephiroth. ^^" I can�t help it, I know he�s damned hot, but character-wise... And since
I�m a huge Leon/Cloud fan that only adds to my dislike for Sephiroth.

I�m curious about what Wakka meeting merpeople, do they even speak the same language?
As for our choices, I�d like to see the ides B) and C) carried out. ^^

And please, NO friendliness between Sephiroth and Riku, and no deal either... >.< I really don�t like that guy and besides,
I think it would be unfair on Sora.

Bye and keep up the good work ^.^

Shiruy
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From ANON - cassy on December 22, 2005
To be honest this is the first time I have read the story. I love it. Usually merpeople stories are lame and using KH charcters, i had my doubts. However, I read read it and I am very empressed. Yoai is always awsome, but you have really thought the plot through. I do hope you update this story soon, because I really want to see what happens with Seph.'s plan and will Riku go along with it. Good luck. ^.^
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From ANON - Warchild on December 13, 2005
2nd choice about sora telling cloud about riku and I wonder if you're so busy with school that it's difficult to have enough time doing this fanfic...
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From ANON - Goldendragon50 on November 10, 2005
I know you probably forgotten all about Pisces but I wish you would write a new chappie!!! PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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From ANON - Anon on October 23, 2005
eeeeeeee! where's the rest? Why aren't you updatin?
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From ANON - Flidar on October 13, 2005
So... everyone who leaves a review can vote for what happens next? Alright!

I REALLY like how Leon tries to cope with the fucked up situation with Cloud. You�ve got me a tiny little bit confused here though. Cloud doesn�t know �bout Leons feelings, right? While they were yelling at each other there was this point where Cloud said �Yes, that�s true, but at least I didn�t choose a Daisuki that hated the very water I swam in.�. Could you enlight me about that? Does Cloud think Leon named someone his Daisuki, does he know about Leons feelings for him or was it a mistake on your part? I�d like to see how things turn out between them.

On the other side the relationship between Cloud and Sephiroth adds a whole drama to your story, BUT. I. DON�T. LIKE. SEPHIROTH. TRIEING. TO. EAT. SORA. AND. RIKU!! *breathes heavily and advances on Sephiroth ready to stangle him in a slow and painful way*
So plea~se don�t let Riku make a deal with him! Dammit, he and Sora just got nearly KILLED by Sephiroth it�s just unnatural that he makes a deal with their would-be-murderer. And for the 'problem', why doesn�t Riku simply migrate with Sora? The Dorsalbacks could need some more protection and Riku being strong and all (allright, maybe not yet, but he WILL be! ^.~) could provide it.

I like the idea of Sora telling Cloud about Riku. How would Cloud react knowing it? Would he still forbid Sora to see Riku while he himself knows the pain of having a Daisuki and not being able to see him? He could also help Sora realize his feelings. If you put in some more drama with Cloud acting strict and 'evil'-even if he only wants to save Sora from the pain he felt- then HELL YES that�s totally fine with me! I love Drama... as long as it has a happy end and I don�t have to wait too long for it. *nods*

Also again: I vote for B because I love Drama and it could also lead the story to Clouds own Daisuke and the situazion with Leon, AGAIN. I just hope you bring those two together, not that I have anything against Sephiroth in general, I just don�t like how he acted so far in this story. *turns around with a scary light in her eyes and gets ready to strangle Sephiroth again* Huh? I�m not allowed to kill him, �cuz you still need him in the story? Okay... but only till its finished! Muwhahahahahahahahahaaaa!!!

I�m totally against A �cause like I already said it would be illogical and downright stupid on Rikus side. I also don�t like it if things get too messed up and then I�m sitting there crying/fuming (and getting ready to hunt you down!!) in front of a cliffy. Like. Right. NOW.

I think D with all you wanted to know a great idea but I would be very disapointed if you do a whole chapter just with this instead of continuing with the real story. I�M GREEDY, TOO! I want more chappies! *wails* I NEED more plotfilled chappies!! *notices her emberassing behavior and coughs* Er... Anyway... you could put parts of it at the end of every chapter. This way you�d also be sure people read your ABs.

I don�t really aprove of C, mainly because I don�t see what good it would do to your plot. I mean, Wakka is already on the mermaids side, though mainly because of Cid and auron. ^^ One of the previous choices though, of Kairi going diving, getting into trouble and being saved by a mermaid could really help her in realizing that they�re not 'only animals'. Pffft. That so full of herself bitch! I don�t like her, so why not letting her meet Sephiroth? *snickers evilly* Of course that would only have her and a lot of other people that mermaids are not only primitve but also dangerous.
... *thinks this through again* You know... you could do that after (I�m asuming it WILL happen) Sora and Riku got captured. Shu as Kairis father would surely be angry and weary around them. Would he be cruel to them? Would he trie to kill them?! OOOOOOOOOh... I worship the Drama and the Angst! (As long as you don�t leave me with clifffies... just reminding you... ^.~)

Now to end this long and rambled and surely confusing review I want to say I like your story and hope you continue soon or I�ll have to hunt you down for this cliffy! (insert gulp from your side here)

Keep it up!

^^ Flidar *winks*
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From ANON - Tara on September 21, 2005
Wow, this has to be the best fic I've ever read really. I have tried to think of something that you could do to improve, but I keep coming up with blanks. It's already put together so well I really don't know how you could improve it. I love the Sea frazes you put in there like "dried kelp on a black beach." I was wandering if you were going to put Ansume in there somewhere thou. Maybe he could be another Razerfin or maybe a traveling, skilled fisherman after mermaids that happens to come to the Islands? As for A, B, C, or D thing I think you should choose since your doing it so well, but if you need an answer to that question I would have to say C and D with a little bit of A. Keep up the great work! I can't wait to see what happens next, please continue writing on this fic. ~Tara~
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From ANON - Aeriem on September 13, 2005
I want more story umm yeah I chose A. So go write more now please.
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From ANON - Loki on August 10, 2005
So far I love your story (fanfic) thank you so much for taking the time to write it and the time and guts to share it. Please update soon, and as for the choices plz don't use A(riku makes a deal with seph) In my opinion(sp?) you already have enough drama that might be to much. Making it annoying any of the other 3 sounds like they would work well though. Anyways thats what i think. Thanks again and pease please please update soon. [signed] Loki
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From ANON - kagofay on July 31, 2005
I'm really into this story, it's got a nice flow to it. And unlike other fan fiction, I've read this a few times already. The only this I could see to change is adding a little less about the 'humans' in it. Not take them out, they add alot, it's just not as interesting.
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From ANON - rikusoraalltheway on July 13, 2005
Guineus i love it especially the part when riku and sora gets to gether this is the best story iv read so far.
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From ANON - k9gmilly (to lazy to sign in) on July 12, 2005
That was the best story i've read so far keep writing or i'll keep sending you emails to keep writing i did it befor.
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From ANON - k9gmilly (to lazy to sign in) on July 12, 2005
OMG A I seriously like your story and right now im at the end of chapter 3 i gots to read more
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From ANON - Dark Mistress Kolulu on June 01, 2005
I really like this fic so far. I haven't gotten a chance to do reviews for the other chapters but I really like this fic so keep going.
I like choice letter (A)
I really want to read more!
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