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Reviews for Separation

By : Smiley
  • From SSjDiizoid on November 05, 2011
    Oh, wow. Oh, man.

    How could you do that to him? After building up this intense, emotionally invested journey, *how* could you do that to Ridley? This is a phenomenal story but that downer ending *really* rips at the heart strings, it's just too cruel to lead us down this fantastic if violent path and then *BAM!* you kill off his chance living the rest of his life in joy with Samus.

    Guess the moral of the story is... make the right choice while you have the chance, 'cause if you don't, you never know where the wrong one will take you.
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  • From ANON - gohma128 on January 16, 2006
    can i cry yet? is that a yes ok then WHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA! ;_;
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  • From ANON - Zero on January 16, 2006
    that was so fuggin good i'm sobbing whaaaaaaa!!!! ;-;
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  • From ANON - Doust19 on January 15, 2006
    Absolutely hilarious.
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  • From ANON - Gao on December 22, 2005
    Oh dear god.

    There is no way I could possibly describe the feelings that went through me as I read this story. It is truly a masterpiece! Your skill at writing fanfiction, and fiction in general, is glorious and sparkling, and I'm not just saying that. For example, when Samus and Houston were getting married, there was a line that read: "Saying 'I do' at a wedding with Samus was one of his biggest fantasies. He never thought it would turn out to be his worst nightmare." And later, right at the sad, sad end, there was the line: "Samus dying was one of his biggest nightmares. He never thought it would turn out to be the happiest moment in his life."

    Wonderful! Dazzling! Bravo!
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  • From ANON - Valian on November 25, 2005
    This has to be the bes one-shot I have ever read. I loved it! Though I was a little confused by how Ridley was built meaning was he humanoid dragon or just dragon like in the metroid games. Also thought he was a bit of a pussy in some parts when he started crying, but all in all really liked this story, ecspesialy the part where Ridley tortures Houston. Oh Yeah!
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  • From ANON - zero on November 20, 2005
    this made cry!!! WHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - Deep Grey on September 11, 2005
    I'm not a true Metroid fan but I think I should comment on this story. I too felt like crying while I read it. It kept me anticipating that something good was going to happen, but it never came to be. I also like the way you included humor as well as dark scenes.
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  • From ANON - ForsakenX on August 01, 2005
    I actually enjoyed this story, wasn't the greatest abundance of originality, nor did it really go along with much of the metriod series, but, it was very interesting and deep. A definate holding nothing back love story, which adds a bit of flavor. Well written, lightly funny, kept you reading, and had a good ending. Good job.
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  • From ANON - Matt on July 23, 2005
    how.....dare......you.....how dare you kill off Samus. and at the end of a love story too.
    the toture scene was cool and all, but otherwise, i hate this fic.
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  • From ANON - Bojack727 on June 04, 2005
    Don't worry your little heads over this story, Smiley has more plans in mind- its just a matter of getting him to do it.^_^
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  • From ANON - TheDamned on March 14, 2005
    That was a truly touching story, the ending was very saddening. It made me shed a tear. This story is by far one of the best written ones on Adult Fanfiction.net. It does an excellent job of creating an atmosphere of helplessness, and of how everything could've been changed if Ridley just simply told Samus his news first. One simple thing changed could have made their story end up with a much happier ending. You are a very talented writer, you know how to create just the right atmosphere with mere words, to make the reader feel just like the characters in the story feel, and you use just the right words to help the reader visualize what is going on, that is a rare talent among readers. On a final note, I ask you, can you please, if it's not too much trouble, create an alternate story, one where Ridley did tell Samus his news first? I believe an alternate story to this work of art would really put the whole "one simple thing can change your life forever" thing into retrospect. It would also might make the people who read this piece, and were dissapointed witht the sad ending, happier. Can you please consider this suggestion? Thank you, and good luck with any future pieces you may write for this site.

    -The Damned
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  • From ANON - Shinaguma on February 22, 2005
    OH MY GOD. OH MY FUCKING GOD. This was... so good.
    I cried at the end. You are incredibly talented, who the hell cares if it didnt follow the metroid story.
    This deserves an award or somthing.
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  • From ANON - awed on February 16, 2005

    damn.....
    I haven't cried this much since Saving Private Ryan.
    absolutetly brilliant work
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  • From ANON - A fan on February 08, 2005
    That was amazing, I loved it. It was extreamly sad and dark but it was just incredible. I'm a decent writer and I dont think in a hundred years I could write something that good. Write more storys please, the world needs people who like to read storys like this.
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