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By : maiafay376

From Madhater on July 08, 2008
So your rewriting the whole story again..... well as long as you haven't forgotten it thats all that matters, i was getting sort of sad when i hadn't seen an update to this stories sequel for a long time, now seeing that your working on the story it makes me happy, hope the rewrite goes well for you. ^_^
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From ANON - Tori_Chan on July 06, 2008
Man...this is like the second time you have done this to the story, and it is still great. It has a wonderful richness with a slight trace of madness(but not madness considering he has a voice in the back of his head...literally). I absolutely love this story anyway it is written and hope this revamped version is updated soon, because I like where it is heading all over again.
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From Vampirezdarkgurl on June 30, 2008
Nice. I look forward to reading more! It is definately different than the original. :) Keep up the good work.
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From ANON - Mr. Snugglies on June 18, 2008
Once again, really loving the formatting in the revision of Rare. I�m just getting a lot more insight into the characters with it. Leon�s inner turmoil is much more present in this version. The style, it doesn�t feel like you�re speaking about Leon anymore as you are speaking for him. For Ashley as well. What I mean by that is, it just plain feels more like I�m hearing from Leon, instead of the author of the story. The contents in the story are still flowing nicely, mixture of subtle but informative. You may not know completely what is happening, but you know what you need to know at this point in time. The plaga is inside his head; it�s really starting to fight for control and poor Leon is fighting hard to avoid losing his control. His character is spot on, which is hard for some people to do when writing a character in a completely different situation than what they are depicted in originally. Sometimes with characters, you feel too much of the writer in them, but I don�t feel that in this. I see Leon. I see Ashley. And I see what they are going through and their struggle to grasp and handle the situation.

Man do I love Leon�s attitude in this. His temperament is very appealing and even gives a picture of just what this plaga is doing to him. I can�t help but love how he�s having these snide and mean comments pop into his head or come out of his mouth. Hell even if he did think those things before the plaga, I�m sure he�d be more than hesitant to verbalize them or actually want to �ring her neck�. The little spats between him and Ashley were as amusing as they were defining. Ashley�s anger and irritation towards Leon�s mean little remarks. Heh, I loved how he kept calling her princess in that nasty kind of way. It�s the little things like that which seem to hint at Leon�s lack of control, even if minor at the moment, it�s still enough to take notice.

Then again if I had a feeling like someone poured �burning embers� in my lap I would be rather irritable too. ^_^

I enjoyed this regenerator scene much more as well. Not to mention a bit more gross with it slobbering and drooling on him. That would be so nasty, especially with the way you described it�s smelled. I had always kind of wondered why in the first version the regenerator didn�t take notice of Leon�s plaga affects and you can tell this one did. At least I assume that�s why it didn�t try to impale him. Which ended up making the regenerator screw itself over but ..ah well..sucks to be him. Plus it was more creepy feeling. The closeness of the two and all that nasty slobbering it was doing. Then not to mention how I liked when Leon punched it through his nasal cavity and actually took a moment to be disgusted. It made me laugh. I could see Leon simply thinking �oh..yuck� and then moving on.

Though I laughed at Ashley�s reaction when she was splattered with all the regenerator goop. I could imagine her doing that.

Of course, the plaga�s new form of speaking is better. Sophisticated, yet not exactly sophisticated structure of sentencing. Its little phrases that are shown really help understand what�s going on and what Leon is having to deal with. Not just the plaga but how Leon�s senses are affect in general. His confusion..he doesn�t know what�s going on..just that he�s seeing and hearing things he shouldn�t be. Not to mention feeling things he shouldn�t be�especially in his pants. ^_^

I for some reason enjoyed this line �Funny, he could hear her, but her voice came from behind a cloud of buzzing insect wings�. I think it�s just because it was simple, but it was clear to what he was actually hearing now. And god I know that must be friggin annoying, it would drive me crazy.

The Plaga inside him whispered. He smiled. �Liar.�

Really liked that part because it gave me this disturbing image of Leon, how he smiled immediately at that realization. His amusement to it was eerie and absorbing to me. I just loved that Ashley�s aura gave away she was lying. How the whisper inside his head triggered the response and he just let go. At least for the moment, he let it go and to be honest, it all became easier for him. Before this scene, his fighting it was visibly hard on him. You could see his speech was a bit unclear and he had to concentrate too much on what he wanted to say. His irritation was flaring; his thoughts were getting a bit out of whack. It just makes me think of how bad it would suck to realize that the only way you can stop feeling like a bumbling idiot in need of a lobotomy is to accept and participate in something you just despise. Which is a bit foreshadowing of just how bad this thing is going mess with his head and who he is.

So I think you handled all that really well. And out of my own sadistic nature, I immensely enjoyed how creepy Leon became and how even if unwillingly, began enjoying himself with the scared Ashley. I thought the addition of the chase is great because it shows he is in fact a predator. Which I think was missed in the first version. The plaga�s voice helps show it as well, but I think his more imposing presence towards Ashley and the regenerator help reveal it more.

Now! Onto Ashley, she was great in this chapter and I don�t want her character to be left out. Her dialog was great. I could see Ashley being desperate to fix and help Leon. Her refusal to take the gun, because she is not stupid, she knew what he wanted her to use it for. I honestly feel Ashley would find it hard to come to terms with shooting Leon. Not just because she doesn�t want to hurt him but also because hell, she doesn�t want her only source of survival dead. Just her conversing with Leon was great. Whether it was when she was aggravated, scared, concerned, or just simply trying to figure out what the hell was going on. So I do feel you captured her. Both characters helped solidify each other and the story, neither felt like their existence in the story was pointless or taking up space. They both helped tell this chapter, they both helped the flow of the story line and they were both kept in character even in an AU situation.

That�s why I liked it. Despite the content of the story, I still feel like its Leon and Ashley, struggling to survive and not be taken over by the things they encounter. But unfortunately for them, you are much more sadistic than capcom. Hah!

I did enjoy this chapter immensely and everything flowed nicely together. I do feel the need to state some of the same things I state in reviews for the previous chapters because I just like to let an author know that they are keeping the same rhythm they had in a previous chapter. Each chapter makes up an entire story obviously so each chapter has to uphold the one before it and this does. It was a nice transitioning from chapter 1 and it kept the same steady flow but had a whole new set of things to tell and show. I can tell you worked hard on this and you did an excellent job. I wish ya the best of luck and hopefully a stress free time at the next chapter revision. Best of luck and can�t wait (well I can but you know what I mean) for more.

�Because I think you're going to run, and if you're going to run, I'm going to run. And when I catch you, I'm going to hurt you.�

Yes! That line by Leon. Liked it way too much for some reason. Creepy, creepy, evil Leon. Mmmmhmmm.

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From alleycat88 on June 17, 2008
I thought I loved it before but the rewrite is just awesome! and I cannot wait until you update Ashes! ^.^
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From KagetsuAsame on June 16, 2008
More! I can't wait for another part!
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From ANON - Mr. Snugglies on May 14, 2008
Excellent improvement on the first chapter in my opinion. Noting that it has been re-written and updated. I did in fact enjoy the first version, but sometimes seeing it from another stand point kind of opens your eyes. I found this version a bit more easily flowing and my favorite aspect, a lot more insightful on character thoughts and personalities. Truthfully, not to be mean, but the characters are more appealing in this version of the chapter. Yet, they do not seem out of character in the least.

Especially the first paragraph with Ashley, much different than before. I liked how it showed how Ashley felt about herself. I find it to be easily believable that she would have that feel towards herself. It was also just a great way to recap events of how she got there, what had been going on�even if you didn�t explain everything. Honestly, glad you didn�t. Too much detail can be a bad thing. I really didn�t want to relive the �entire game� in the first chapter. ^_^

Not just in Ashley�s part, but Leon�s as well. I love how he isn�t made too nice, but not too mean in this one. More realistic in the sense that it shows he doesn�t hate Ashley, but he does become irritated with her. Whether it�s because of something Ashley does or because of just the situation in general. And it also shows he does feel positively towards Ashley as well.

For example, he is clearly irritated when she isn�t where he had directed her to stay and he admits he dubbed her whine tone as the �Ashley Shrill�. Yet, when he finds her having a �plaga fit�, he is quick to try and comfort her, even made an attempt to considerately wipe the blood from her face. Even though he failed to do that, though it wasn�t funny, I laughed anyway. Sorry, just found it kind of comical that Leon would fail miserably at something so minor. I�m a bit weird though. Hah! Of course those were not the only things that showed character personalities and whatnot. Just his reactions and Ashley�s as well, toward each other�s well-being.

The dialogs, both external and internal were a bit more solid with the characters. Their actions in general as well. Leon�s sometimes bluntness when in a rush or irritated, but then he would try to smile and reassure despite whether he felt comfortable with something or not. Ashley�s attempts to be brave but sometimes couldn�t help but show fear or discontent with things. I was glad they didn�t feel like one-sided characters. Even in the brief introduction of them, this revision of the chapter actually made them better and realistic characters in my opinion.

One thing I can say I certainly enjoyed more in this version was the plaga�s perspective during the attempted removal. I found this version to be much more graceful and even though it was shorter, better written. Before, it seemed almost a bit too much of a �human� thought. I don�t know if that makes sense, but that�s the only way I can think of describing it. The way you have it now sounds more like survival instincts that a parasite would have. Live! Which is all they really want to do. Live and feed. But in the process, gave just enough but not too much information to show what the little bastard�s plan was. Sneaky plaga!

And poor Leon, he�s a �plaga closet case�. He knows it�s there, but in denial. Went through all that pain then had to watch Ashley make it look easy�and for what?? Failure. Bum deal Leon.

Ah, just remembered, I like how you added in the input to why Leon didn�t like or was uncomfortable with Ashley touching him in that manner. I always thought it would be such a bad idea to bang the boss�s daughter�especially if your boss is the president! There�s a front-page scandal for ya.

I just plain liked your version of Leon going through the removal process better than the game. Much more painful sounding and his reaction was better. Which I always assumed it would hurt horribly to have to go through that. In the game, he just kind of looks like he�s trying to have a really quiet orgasm. Because I know it has to hurt, every time I watch that part in the game I�m thinking �Scream damn you! Scream!�

I know he wants to�or at least I want him to.

All in all, I found it to be a wittier, solid, and intriguing chapter. It just seemed to grasp me better. Story and characters all together. Oh and extra points for keeping some of the original dialog from the game and mixing it with your own. Great job, great improvements. Keep it up, I�m anticipating to see what you are going to do with the other chapters. It�s always a good trait in a writer to want to improve and get more out of their work. I do think it�s a good thing whether it�s from your own opinion or suggestions of others that make a person improve something. Even if it�s not bad before, it�s okay to want something to be better. I know I�ve written stuff that at the time I liked but now look back on it and realize I there are so many things I want to change about it. Difference between you and me, I�m too lazy and careless to do it. ^_^

So good luck and can�t wait for more!

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From ANON - Anon on April 20, 2008
what color is leons auara?
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From ANON - oo on April 20, 2008
you cant believe how many people stuck around? are you crazy! this story is great. its got everything i love in it anyways...i bloody printed this story out and ive reread it way to many times!
silly, youve got that whole artist thing going, thinking all your stuff is crap when it isnt.
anyways, i just reread it today and i was wondering, maybe a stupid question, but, is leons plage possibly like telgrens reincarnated plaga or something?
weird question i know, you might not even understand it. but leons memory focused mostly on telgren in that one scene with all the soverns and slaves, and then i remembered leon had a couple of dreams about telgren in the sequel...so just wondering.
and, that story your working on now, on the gleam child comm. its private and you wouldnt friend me, but i understand, you dont know me and all. but that story really got me when i first read it and on your comm it just sounds great with all this new background info. so will you be posting the story publicly on aff or fp when you start writing it?
alright, thats probally all for now untill i reread it again!
bye maia!
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From ANON - LWS on March 25, 2008
Oh darn it! I was adoring Leon finally being loyal to Saddler and just like that...

But it still doesn't change the fact that you are one of the most fantastic writers I've ever come across. Flaws or not, this story is gripping and morbidly addicting. Really addicting, I may use the term loosely often but I mean it to its full extent here. Out of pure personal taste I always steer away from anything het, that'll never change. But even the con-het here wasn't enough for me to stop reading, the description and attention to the characters is simply amazing. I feel for Saddler, Leon too since he's getting the worst end of everything but I always had a soft spot for the villains, especially the ones with hearts. Sure, Saddler's a sadistic bastard but in his own twisted way he cares, weather Leon's a mere pet to him or not, he still cares. Personally, I seriously hope that in the sequel he'll rip Wesker apart slowly and painfully and get Leon back. Yeah, I'm not a big fan of Wesker, but hey, you're the author and what you write is what I'll read.

Hn, sorry if this review is sloppy, I'm not in a very productive mood, but the point is, your work is truly and utterly brilliant, captivating and leaves no sense of none-satisfaction that others do, you tie just about all the loose ends.

To be honest, I'm lazy and bad at reviewing without falling into rants of my personal interest. So I'm likely not to review again, but I will read Dark Ashes of the Phoenix and adore it. So yeah, keep up the mind-blowing work.
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From ANON - oo on December 27, 2007
for about 2 years now ive been coming back to this story, rereading it every now and then. so, finally, ive printed this story out for keepers. this is the first time ive ever done that for an online story and a slash one at that. so thanks maiafay. its a great story.
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From VelvetMace on September 05, 2007
I just read your fic from beginning to end, for the third time, and I want to assure you that you have not written a Canon Sue. No one has accused you of that, because you haven't done it. I really hope your worry about charactarization isn't what is slowing you down from revising the sequel.

Yes, you made Leon incredibly desireable and beautiful, but throwing out those useless Sue tests, it's not perfection that makes us hate Sues. It's the fact that they are shallow, boring, and trite, and demand huge amounts of reader and character attention, while not giving a compelling reason to care about them. Trust me, we readers are VERY emotionally invested in Leon. He pays our attention back in lush, sensual detail and emotionally realistic drama. We know that Leon is highly fuckable, not because you tell us he is, but because you make us feel the the obsession and desire Saddler and the others feel for him. That's a pretty high reader pay off.

So don't go labling him a Sue, even though you changed his characterization (with a damn good reason) and gave him a new special ability (power to seduce even if he doesn't want to). Leon faces realistic consequences for these powers: He doesn't just have the pretty girls wanting to jump his bones, even shambling undead things, creepy old guys and tentacle monsters are chasing after his ass. By the way, kudos on making slimy blood-tentacle rape sensually hot. That's a pretty tough feat.
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From ANON - Ciarda_Rois on May 19, 2007
I've just come into the Resident Evil 4 fandom, and I have to say that you have spoiled me beyond all hope with your story. Dark, sensual, and I love the ideas of the different types of Plaga castes, especially making Leon a luv slave. Heh heh. Besides that, you have a wonderful talent for description and setting, which all in all makes me a very happy reader. I can't wait for the rest of your works to come in, especially with Leon in it. :)
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From ANON - Anon on March 09, 2007
D: You made a red hot fiction THAT I CANT FAP TO D; D: D: If the one whose getting fucked doesnt like it then I cant like it D: But this wont stop me from reading to find out if he ever just fucking takes it..
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From ANON - amberley on February 06, 2007
wow. you revised the whole thing...even though it was already perfect! your so dedicated.
thanks maia for the story.
truly loved it.
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