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By : AkumanoTsubasa

From ANON - Comedy of Errors on March 27, 2009
This story wasn't bad. It was actually pretty well written. But I do agree with Bleeding Willow about the characterization, especially with Leon. In your fanfiction, he struck me as weepy, childish, and downright weak when his character in the game was the exact opposite. True he was tormented by Sara's death and Mathias, but he's supposed be capable and mentally strong, seeing how he's able to move on from his beloved's death when Mathias couldn't.
I know all your supporters are saying that its your fanfiction and that you can do whatever you want, awhich is true (sort of.) But its one thing to slightly alter a character's personality to make the plot convinient, and another to change it altogether.
You should've put an OOC warning in the beginning. It's just very annoying when writers make up characters and then slap names on them so that it's fanfiction.
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From ANON - Eiahmon on March 26, 2009
OMG! You're back! I'd given up on this story ever being updated, so you can imagine my surprise when I dropped in to see that it had been updated. Twice! XD I'm glad that Richter made an appearance - I've been waiting for him and his reaction to Leon's situation since the beginning, though I'm not sure the way you have him speaking is in line with his character. He still was very entertaining to read, especially his reaction to what Mathias had done to Leon. My fave is stil how Leon and Joachim act towards each other. I found the image of Leon tugging on Joachim's sleeve like a small child would very endearing. I can't wait to see where you're going to go next, though would it be possible for sometime to have a little more about how a) Joachim survived following the events in LOI and b) a bit about he and Walter's relationship? That would be greatly appreciated. Hurry up with the next chapter please, and don't drop the story again for a while, or I shall hunt you down and chain you to your chair until you update! XD
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From ANON - Okori on October 05, 2008
Oh yes, definitely hooked. I've enjoyed the Castlevania series casually and although I'm a little lacking in background information, you do sum it up quite well enough to understand.

I'll be waiting by for another chapter. : ) I do wonder how Richter is going to feel about a descendant of his having loud, wild sex so close by. I'm betting poor Leon IS an incubus isn't he.
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From OrochiGreel on September 26, 2008
I'm confused, are Dracula and Mathias Cronqvist two different people, instead of being the same person like in the games?
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From ANON - Amazed on June 28, 2008
Oh wow, this is great! I really am looking forward to the next chapter of this!! You're a very talented writer, so I hope you keep going with this story.
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From OrochiGreel on June 22, 2008
To Bleeding Willow ITS FANFICTION! STORIES WRITEN BY FANS FOR FANS! AS IN YOU WRITE YOU CAN CHARACTERIZE YOUR FAVORITE CHARACTERS IN ANY WAY YOU SEE FIT, YOU CAN TURN A VILLIAN INTO A GOOD GUY AND THE SAME THING WITH TURNING A GOODGUY CHARACTER INTO A VILLIAN! IN OTHER WORD NO ONE CARES IF THE CHARACTERS ARE CHARACTERIZED THE RIGHT WAY OR NOT,THAT�S WHY IT�S CALLED FANFICTION! SO GET YOUR HEAD OUT OF YOUR ASS(sorry got lost in the moment there and DON'T HATE ME)!
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From ANON - kuri on May 11, 2008
I'm glad to see that you've returned to this poor fic, giving it updates! Let me just say that I am definately a fan of this- the pairing makes me drool, and your writing and prose makes me terribly enamored with this fic. hope there's more to come, maybe even sooner updates >_>
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From ANON - Lolly on May 08, 2008
Hi,
Really love the story! I do want to know though is there a possible Richter/Alucard scence anytime soon?
I can't wait to see what happens next :)
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From Fawnheart on May 08, 2008
Nice! I'm stoked about the explanation on the whip...I'm seriously going to have to buy this game now, what an interesting background! Poor Leon, that must be freaky seeing one of your descendants who seems to have himself together a little better that he does, he seems so naive and vulnerable but no doubt it's because he is...being turned into a vampire would probably have that effect lol. Anyway, really enjoyable, I loved the little injections of humour too. Can't wait for more :D
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From Fawnheart on April 20, 2008
K...another review from me. I just read your other reviews when I posted my last one, and I have to say I totally disagree with a previous poster's take on 'fanfic' or whatever, but everyone is entitled to their opinion I suppose....once...after that it becomes a bit boring when not only are the initial whinges the same, but are done it in CAPS (I had a bit of a laugh that the post tried to dictate what was and wasn't proper etiquette...in the cyber equivalent of shouting, kinda evoked images of someone frothing at the mouth. I just didn't see any need for it...twice.) I understood perfectly that you didn't mispell Childe and like I said, I haven't read Anne Rice. Your writing was so concise though, that I was able to gather from the context of what you had written that it must have been vampire jargon and not incorrect spelling. Not only that, but childe with an 'e' is Old English spelling and Ms. Rice didn't invent it, I doubt she would claim to, either.

As far as I am concerned, you take the fanfic and you make it your own. You write fanfic to fill in what you think the original lacked. And you have done that, and not only have you done that, but you have left me - someone who has never been interested in Vampires AT all, or even heard of the game this was based on, completely converted. Completely. I know the name Anne Rice, I've never read her books. The only thing I know about vampires is from Van Helsing and I mainly watched that to perve at Hugh Jackman - but this story!...far out. Bloody magnificent. Personally, I loved how you used the term 'reamed' and I was actually impressed when you said 'buggered' in the first chapter, because it matched the language of the era in which Leon had last lived. It was raw and to the point and since the topic was rape, I think it was more than fitting and a perfect choice of words. I mean, he was raping him for the love of chocolate! What would else would anyone have you do? Try to make it glamorous by describing how he surfed the hallowed hershey highway? Rape is coarse, it's violent, and the way you wrote it got that point across without being tasteless and I thought you seriously handled it beautifully. If it had been handled badly, I wouldn't have read any further.

If people don't like the way you write, or your originality, then they should either write the kind of stories they want to read or just not read yours. Constructive criticism is great and seriously helpful, and well...if you get one raving, loony post by someone who didn't like it ...well...every person is entitled to their opinion, and I suppose one rant is acceptable. But the fact that there were repeated posts meant that they continued to read your story after having already said how much it was 'anti-cannon'and how frustrating that was to them. What a waste of time. Thankfully, you obviously didn't listen and change anything or I wouldn't have had the luck to find this gem of a story tonight and I tell you in all honesty, it was sooooo good that read the entire thing from start to finish and am chomping at the bit for the next chapter.

So like I said, it's bookmarked and added to my favourites, and now I am officially stalking it! Keep up the good work, your writing is mesmerising and your tale even more so. I loved it :D

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From Fawnheart on April 20, 2008
wow..oh man, how brilliant is this? I love it, i love the struggle with his beliefs in God, I love the variations of demons/sucubi/incubi...the whip? I'd love to know a bit more about that and how Sara was tied in with it since I haven't played the game, I love it that he can weild Holy attacks when as a vampire, he should burn shouldn't he? I. Can. Not. Wait. to find out what he is. Brilliant, seriously. This story stands alone. I have it bookmarked and will eagerly await updates. Just magic! What a find!
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From ANON - Marita on April 01, 2008
Absolutely adore this story; in fact, it's probably my fav Castlevania fanfiction. I'd really love to read more!
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From ANON - Darkness on February 19, 2008
I LOVE IT! OMG i just happened across your story and it immediatly captivated me! I love your sence of style in the writing and i love everything you've done with it! From making Mathias a scheming bastard to Jachiem the savior, but still keeping Leon just as breath taking and powerful when it calls for it! I can't wait for the next chap! Please update soon! oh P.S. I love that you actually pulled Leon back from the dead! But i can't help but wonder what was Jachiem doing visiting Leon without Mathias knowing he was there? Anyway i love it!
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From ANON - shinigami on January 24, 2008
Squee!!! Found your story last night and loved it. Hope you update it cause its just so yummy....
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From sunapea on August 13, 2007
Holy mother of fuck, that Bleeding Asshole named Willow who reviewed your story is a prick! Castlevania itself is a campy, gaudy, rip-off of every bit of vampire legend/lore/fiction which came before and to have people complain that a Castlevania story is not original is just plain laughable. It just proves that some people have no concept of the subject matter that they critiquing and are so far up their own arseholes they be bleeding. This story was good enough for me, kept me entertained and I'd really like to read some more. I get that uke-y Leon is only that way because he�s just recently been raised from the dead and all that other horseshit but most people just don�t catch on too quick unless you draw them a diagram. There is also no doubt in my mind that Joachim is a very, very bad vampire man and is playing Leon in some form or the other, so no worries. Do your thang girl.
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