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Reviews for Persona Non Grata

By : rAiNwAtEr
  • From ANON - lunatree on December 15, 2005
    This is a great story. I love the idea.
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  • From ANON - Kaorustalker30 on December 15, 2005
    The only problem I have with this story (so far): the constant typos. I mean I've seen you write before and you very rarely had any typos then ("Flames of Purgatory" and "Sin's of the Father" being prime examples of your work), so what's going on now? There is no need to rush the chapters - take your time and reread what you've typed; I can honestly say that all the typos really took away from the story. The way Riku acts is the way that the 'inner me' acts, so I particularly *LOVE* his personality in this story; but, with all the typos, it's difficult to focus on what is being said (and sometimes you use words that mean an entirely different thing from what *I* know you mean - for example, you said 'unexceptable' but I know you meant 'unacceptable' in the last chapter.) I am sure that you'd get many more reviews if you just took your time and to go through it.

    I am not trying to discourage you, I am just pointing out the things that detracted from the story (at least, in my opinion). I really love the way you have written Riku, and I actually found Sora to be the one who annoys me in this fic (despite how mean that may seem...) But, I *know* you can do much better when it comes to cleaning up the typos. Regardless, I still like this idea.
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  • From ANON - soul ribbon on December 14, 2005
    well that took you long enough to update. lol. it was worth it though. interesting chapter but if it isnt to much trouble, could you kill riku? i know he is a main charecter in the story but if he ever even tried to talk to me like that then i would send him to a nice cold morge slap straight away. lol.

    update soon.
    XxX S.R. XxX
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  • From ANON - Penfaerie on December 06, 2005
    Wow!!! Exellent first 2 chaps. Can't wait to see what happens next!
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  • From ANON - sinheart on November 27, 2005
    omg this is just.......sooooo fucking good *lacking better word* Please write another chapter as soon as posible!!!! and if u didnt figgure it out already i soooo love ur story.
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  • From ANON - Kyuuen-kun on November 23, 2005
    Great story so far, keep up the Great work, update soon. ^_^
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  • From ANON - soul ribbon on November 21, 2005
    this story seems pretty good so far. cant wait to see more. update soon.
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