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By : kittynakajima

From ANON - FlopJackDan on July 29, 2012
I really enjoy this fanfic, from the moment I read the very first chapter. It's a good thing I started reading it at the beginning of 2012, or I would have gone insane waiting for chapter 19 :)

Is also good to read such an expanded Sonamy story, I mean, I'm not blinded by this couple and I like it when things change around if the story itself is interesting, but (in this site) Sonadow and Shadamy stories had been done to death, whether they are good stories or simplistic one-shots. And I only saw 1 attempt of making a good triangle love thing, that it doesn't seem that it will continue, sadly. So I like that this story tries to stand out, not only with a rarely used couple, but by using a huge amount of effort, and success nicely. Seriously, exact pregnancy information? It may sound boring, but it adds to the inmersion, and I sure as heck like it.

Now, one final thing: After reading chapters 19 and 20, I can see that the story is coming to an end, the closure is yet to come, and the anticipation is there. But, if the story will end just after the "baby" (not to spoil anything) is finally born, could you please make a little epilogue chapter, one where we get to see the lives of Sonic and Amy a few years later? I mean, just to wrap up the story with a nice tie and not leaving room for the "Oh boy, how will their lives be after all this" doubt. If you don't want to do it, and leave the aftermath for the viewer's imagination, then that's fine, but it's something I want you to take in consideration, as I'm sure someone already asked about it, and hell, maybe it crossed your mind at one point, or maybe it didn't.

That's all I wanted to say, hope you keep up with the story!
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From on October 22, 2008
The latest chapter was good, but I have to agree with Sonic: this is one time when 'mercy' shouldn't have been given. What should have been done? Sonic should have turned Robotnik into a pile of sentient GOO with Chaos Control, a form where he would never be able to harm anyone ever again.
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From Marinalightyears on September 15, 2007
huh.. Its been awhile.. again. Though I don't think I have reveiwed before. First off, the good. Your story here definatly has good emotional build up.. and the tense moments are tense as hell. your grammer is well used, and the characters seem mostly Right personality wise, Albit alittle more emotionaly strained in some cases Then ever in the normal Canon.(sonic, and the Very mad Eggman are examples here.)

to Be a constructive reveiw however, there is the bad which I should Adress.. Unfortunatly Im tired and would rather not search for them. Keep writing, and I'll kep reading.
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From on September 06, 2007
Well, I have to say that if Sonic is thinking of killing Eggman, he has the right idea. That idiot has been given chance after chance after chance to turn around and stop trying to take over the world and stop bothering Sonic. Has he done that? No, he just tries EVEN HARDER to kill Sonic and his friends.

Time for Robotnik to be killed, or at least have his brain operated on to get rid of those destructive impulses, even if it means leaving him a vegetable.
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From Naxuro on March 14, 2007
This is one awesome fanfic, can't wait to see the ending.
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From DisasterMaster on January 30, 2007
NOSE PICKING COWBOYS! Such suspense, such drama, this fic kicks ass. But why the hell doesn't anyone review it!!!? Come on people, get to reviewing! Nearly 4,000 hits and nobody is reviewing? Don't make me track you all down and shoot you!

My reviews are probably getting annoying, but I want you to know that I'm still here, loving your fic! I don't think I've ever been so attached to any other fic as I have this one. Damn, I'm pathetic. Have a wonderful day!
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From ANON - magebear7 on December 11, 2006
dun dun DUN! eggman is arias father! maybe? who knows. anyway, great story!
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From ANON - magebear7 on December 11, 2006
not bad. however, there were a couple problems.
1. pov changes. at the end of the chapter, you change from 1st person to 3rd person. the magebear isnt sure if it is intentional or not, just putting it out there.
2. name consistency. throughout the chapter, you switch between "sonic" and "sonikku". now, while only the first is accurate, the magebear can see where you got the other from, so its not a big problem. however, what is a problem is that you use them interchangeably. if you left "sonic" to descriptions and "sonikku" to dialogue, it would be ok. the other way (sonic=dialogue, sonikku=desc) wouldnt make as much sense, but it would work too. as of now, youre using both names for both purposes, which just doesnt work.
3. not as big as the others, but the erotica could be more, well, erotic.
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From ANON - Anon on November 03, 2006
Well, well, well...I didn't think that disaster master would have such a sensitive side to him. Nonetheless, Right Here is a good song and I do agree with him that it would make an appropriate theme for this story.

I give your story a 10/10.
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From ANON - Disaster Master on October 30, 2006
-DM turns to Eggman and pulls out sledge hammer- I'm going to kill you mother fucker! -turns back to story- Great job with ano- oh wait, I forgot about something: KAMIKAZE BABOONS OF TIMBUKTU! Sonic is gonna rip out Eggman's guts and force feed them to him. I would too though if that ever happened to me. Poor Sonic, poor Amy, son of a bitch Eggman! He should've never been born! -DM realizes something- Wait a minute, if it wasn't for Eggman, Sonic and Amy would've never gotten together. -thinks about it a little longer- I still think he's a monkey molester though. I need to know the next part though, so please update as fast as you did this time. And please make "Right Here" by Staind the theme tune for this fic. It's too cute! -DM explodes- Look what you did to me. You made this fic too cute. -DM slaps himself- No, No! It's fine the way it is. Don't get all gorey and brutal. I wish the best to you and your story. Have a wonderful day! ^_^
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From ANON - pendejo on October 24, 2006
deveras que esta estoria es bonita [this truely is a beautiful story]

Disaster Master dice que esta estoria es mejor que ARAAT [Disaster Master says this story is better than ARAAT]

y en diciendo la verda, a veses le creo [and to tell the truth, at times i believe him]

*pendejo se cachetea* [*pendejo slaps himself*]

no, no es mejor. esta en nivel con ARAAT [no, its not better. its on par with ARAAT]

espero leer mas pronto! [i'm hoping to read more soon!]
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From ANON - Anon on October 18, 2006
To Harley:

Try being realistic please. At what point in time during any Sonic storyline did Shadow and Amy seem like they would be a good pairing? It's not canon, they hardly even know each other besides the "hug" in SA2 and her cameo in Shadow the Hedgehog (the game). ShadAmy = Moronic, I have to say.

To author:

Very nice story, I hope to see more.
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From ANON - Disaster Master on October 15, 2006
SURFING ELEPHANTS OF MARS! So, the fic is almost over eh? Well as much as I'd like to keep reading this, I must say that nothing lasts forever. But, if you are going to end this fic soon, make it end with a bang. If you get me. Also, this fic is so good, it deserves a theme song. Might I suggest, "Right Here" by Staind. It'd be a perfect (and cute) theme song for this fic, as in Sonic's POV referring to Amy. Here are the lyrics to prove it:

I know I've been mistaken
But just give me a break and see the changes that I've made
I've got some imperfections
But how can you collect them all and throw them in my face

But you always find a way to keep me right here waiting
You always find the words to say to keep me right here waiting
And if you chose to walk away I'd still be right here waiting
Searching for the things to say to keep you right here waiting

I hope you're not intending
To be so condescending it's as much as i can take
and you're so independent
you just refuse to bend so I keep bending till I break

But you always find a way to keep me right here waiting
You always find the words to say to keep me right here waiting
And if you chose to walk away I'd still be right here waiting
Searching for the things to say to keep you right here waiting

I've made a commitment
I'm willing to bleed for you
I needed fulfillment
I found what I need in you

Why can't you just forgive me
I don't want to relive all the mistakes I've made along the way
But I always find a way to keep you right here waiting
I always find the words to say to keep you right here waiting

But you always find a way
To keep me right here waiting
You always find the words to say to keep me right here waiting
And if I chose to walk away would you be right here waiting
Searching for the things to say to keep me right here waiting

Please take this song into consideration. Have a wonderful day!

(To all you cum garglers out there that aren't reviewing this fic: I hope you all get anally raped by some guy living in a box behind Wal-Mart.)
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From ANON - Harley on October 15, 2006
You know, I think I would have preferred it if Knuckles and Rouge hadn't got back together, what with her being a filthy slut and all. But even so, you made it seem like it could happen because they're both idiots. Just because I don't want it to happen doesn't mean it's not written well.

And I still don't like SonAmy much. But you're actually making it readable for me!

I don't think Knuckles would hit a woman... but hey, he was angry and I'll let you get away with it this time.

So, on the whole, damn well done.
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From ANON - Disaster Master on August 30, 2006
RECTUM BREATH FROM HELL! You've made my day by updating this fic. I guess you can't update it faster like I asked, thanks to work. Yes, work can be a pain in the ass can't it? But it's necessary. I'll still get you songs that you want. Think of it as a thanks for making such a beautiful fic. And if you don't want any songs, that's cool too. I'll be waiting for the next update, and once again, Have a WONDERFUL day!
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