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From Fawnheart on August 11, 2008
Oh one more thing before I forget, which I nearly did in the face of Valen's...tail...

The obsidian statue of the dancing girl? Man I loved that part. Besides the smut...that would have to be my favourite part hey.
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From Fawnheart on August 11, 2008
Holy snapping Wonderboy, I've learned to review your chapters as I read them, there is always so much GOOD STUFF in them and they are so heady that if I don't, I'm too exhausted by the end to do anything more than say HOOOOEEE WLYYY SHEEEEIT!

K...The Valsheres? Keep in mind, I've never played NWN (I've explained why too, stupid freaking game that doesn't work heheh) But holy snapping, I got such a good feel for her in this chapter, she is my kind of villain! I love her, what a nasty piece of work lol. That's what I love about this story, I don't need to know anything about NWN to freaking enjoy it out of control. Sheesh you are good...

K...The part where he is talking about the Archmage who laid a geas on him? How cool is that? And realistic too, that it was a simple knot but had a mountain of power behind it. I heard once that Bruce Lee had only a few simple moves but he had perfected them to point devastation. Bloody brilliant and nothing to do with your story hehe, but you know...it's the logical little things like that in your stuff that make it believable enough to get the adrenalin pumping. Just fantastic...and don't be hard on yourself Ceald, pride is great! Kick her butt! lol

DO IT CEALD, DO IT, DRAG HIM OVER AND DEVOUR HIM! hahhahaha I love this, you are so good lol.

NOOOOOO!!! *smacks Ceald's reason down and tells it to piss off!*

Freaking brilliant wonderboy, my only criticism (i don't think I even spelled that right!) was that you have perfected the cliffhanger...that was just cruel finishing there lol. I love it. Bloody fantastic, as usual! All the cock description? Reow! My favourite hahahaha no I take that back...no bugger it, I don't. I love Valen, the base of his tail, and the base of his... fantastic!
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From ANON - Jaix on July 23, 2008
I have to say, this is by far the best fan fiction I've ever read and to be quite honest I'm generally rather picky about fictions I read or like. I'm very glad that I recently decided to replay my old Neverwinter game, which led me to the curious thought if there would be any fictions out on it at all. In all honesty I wasn't really expecting any of the fictions to be all that great. But yours, oh man I stayed up till around 7am reading all of it then re-read it once again after waking. Mind you I actually finished reading around 5 but it was quite impossible for me to sleep after that being as wound up as the story got me. I've never actually played the Under dark version of Neverwinter so I didn't know who Valen was at first. I must agree he is one sexy man, however I quite like Ceald more then him. In fact he's my favorite so far, its a bit hard to explain for me why. Just the way he views things, the amusement, and I have to say he does have quite a bit of bad luck mixed in with the good. I love the way he re acts to most things as well. All in all the character is much love and I wouldn't be surprised if I try sketching little doodles of your character there.

For the story itself, its so very well written with a very unique way of describing things. Like how you do the battles its not too drawn out and it keeps your interest. Sometimes very amusing and also realistic for the world of Neverwinter. Like the screaming illithid flying towards Ceald. Also the part with the mentioning of Tomi was quite nice, he's always been my favorite henchman so far, although the mentioning of finding his body like that was sad. There's so many good things I'd love to put but my brains still jumping everywhere trying to find a way to put the words down in a manner that they would be coherent. Quite frustrating actually, ah yes I also must commend you on the story/storyline as well. I've tried writing fictions before it isn't easy, especially if you have a spastic mind. Right now I'm having troubled making my mind focus on what else I could put down but nothing really comes to mind. All I can say is that I am in awe and you most definitely have a fan of this story and of Ceald now.

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From ANON - Lunar on June 15, 2008
Damnit! how did you sneak ANOTHER chapter past me! Nooooo

smut! FANTASTICO! BRAVO! I loved every bit of it. It went really smoothly!
WHen do we get the asskicking! now that they've knocked boots, they can combine powers to form Voltron, right?...

wait... nevermind. Anyway! Huge fan love. I send you email. Right... Now.

*click*
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From ANON - Arimikoe on May 16, 2008
Damn, you did it again. Goddamn. Goddamn. DAMN.

It was a while before I could clean up all the drool and get back to reviewing this. This ended up being way the hell more than the sex scene I bargained on. I had no idea that Caeld was a virgin, number one (being an elf and over a hundred years old, that says a lot...) and the fact that he'd give himself to Valen like that... well... damn.

The emotional aspects of it were spellbinding, but the part that really stuck out to me was Caeld clinging to his pride, opting not to do it in the easiest position.

He is going to hurt like fucking crazy after this. Nothing like going to hell with a sore ass though...

You know, I just realized, the Valsharess came AFTER the battle. Nice way to change it up - it seemed natural.
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From ANON - mmonst3r on May 15, 2008
DUN DUN DUNNN.

Dundundunnn my ass~! Once again, I love Caeld's fumbled dialog and... well, I love his character. XD

Keep it up.
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From Larania on May 14, 2008
^_^ I hope you continue writing this. It was a pretty good lemon. I hope you continue to write out their relationship. (Heh. Valen even impressed my poor girl-loving druidess)
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From ANON - Nex on May 08, 2008
As smooth as they are, yours are much better in terms of their technical excellence. You weave tales, and I write smut. *nod nod*
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From Fawnheart on May 06, 2008
Ok...calm now. Half a packet of cigarettes (and I don't even smoke! well...unless I'm drinking :P) and an evening of walking around blushing later...

Just...holy shit wonderboy! I was determined not to say what I always say i.e. you are a freaking master who doesn't write, but crafts...but I can't help it. It's true. The only other time I have read anything that evoked such a strong reaction as your writing does, was when I was 12 and read LoTR, the part where the shadow wraiths were sniffing around for Frodo and co? Yeah, had me screaming 'Hail Marys' for a week! The second time was when I was 17, in Sydney, sitting on the bonet of my sisters car after finishing work early and waiting for her to finish. I had just bought Stephen King's 'The Talisman' with my very first pay ever, and was up to the part where a little funnel of sand appeared out of nowhere and a juicy fruit wrapper was winking in and out of sight, that was full on 'rosary' inducing for a month! I think it's testimony to how good your story is, when authors as brilliant as Tolkien and King can only get my heart racing like that, once, in an entire epic book...(and keep in mind, The Talisman is like the holy grail to me, I have made the hallowed pilgrimage and read it every year since I bought it, I love it that much!) Yet everything you write leaves me absolutely exhausted by the time I am finished. No joke, I feel as though I have gone like, ten rounds with bloody Danny Green or something! And I don't even box! Every word,every paragraph just hauls me along and makes my head explode!

First...I didn't think anything could ever replace your description of the base of Valen's tail as like...the epitomy of 'omg' in my mind. So much for that, it's place has been usurped by his massive !!! and I looooovvvveeeeee Ceald. Holy shit, he is perfect wonderboy! I don't know why you would think he isn't in the lime light, gawd! He is the catalyst for everything! He is lovable, sincere, courageous, SMART, K...now I hope Ive finished gushing and can get onto reviewing your story!

Chapter 7 ... my first smirk was in the first paragraph...Blood can only move so fast? hahaha, perfect! my first smile and chuckle? The part where Ceald does his dramatic interpretation of Flowers of the heart...far out wonderboy, that was so 'real'...brilliant, as usual.

I loved loved loved how hesitant and self - questioning (?) Ceald was, if that's the right expression, he has such a powerful, authentic 'presence', it's bloody amazing and I am in awe every time I read your stuff at how you are able to make him so bloody real!
And I thought my head was going to explode when they were getting all hot and heavy, no joke ...I think I forgot to breathe even! And when he actually slipped him the pork sword and Ceald kinda freaked, you know, the violation of his soul kinda thing? I actually jumped to my knees and was SCREAMING at my laptop, NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO CEALD FOR THE LOVE OF DE-CAFFINATED COFFEE!!! RIDE HIM LIKE A CIRCUS PONY FOR FUCKSAKE! (at which point my bigger, more aggressive 'proof reader' popped his head around the corner and asked if I was 'right?)

His interruption still didn't spoil the mood though, but in all honesty, the breathing space you created as a result of Ceald's internal freak out was so perfectly timed! I swear, if you didn't give your readers little bursts of respite like that, you'd kill us ALL. You would be like, some mass murderer of the pen, no joke! A trail of dead bodies all over the world and the only lead is that the last thing they did was read Ceald Amothien :P So anyway, the heart-racing, mind-blowing feeling of the first part of the chapter kinda disappeared but now, I don't worry when that happens, I just gather my breath again and steel myself for the marathon run I have learned your stories are gonna take me on!

And it did, that was simply the BEST de-virgining I have ever read. I'm serious. I haven't read a lot of them but in various books and novels they usually describe it vaguely as 'crossing a bridge' or something corny like that, unless it's Colleen McCullogh, who always seems to make it seem like one more thing checked off on her characters 'to do list' :P (which I like, I mean really, first time? Who cares, get it over and done with already so you can bloody well get on with it and enjoy!) But you? Holy shit...thanks so much for completely blowing my pragmatic view clearly out of the water. That was not just a crossing of the bridge that no authors that I have ever found can express cleary, that was ....like... let's detonate the fucker and blow it to smithereens, then bunji-jump off what's left and scream our heads off all the way down until the blood vessels in our eyes burst!

Magic.

Sheer, bloody magic. Fuck you are good. Deadset!

So there it is, I'm too scared to read it again, at least, not until I take an energy drink first, then the caffeine they have will end up making me swing from the ceiling fans but it will be worth it~!...and I am DEFINITELY not going to let your BIGGEST fan, my 80 year old client, read it! Holy shit, if that gave me heart palpitations...what it will do to her...shudder... I don't think my insurance covers 'naughty young man' induced fainting spells! (although my guess is that she knows things that you and I haven't even heard of :P)

But...I'll stop gushing now, having embarrassed myself enough... fucking hell wonderboy, if I don't see some pulitzer prize winning bloody work, in HARDCOVER, in my local bookshop one day with your name sprawled all over it, I am gonna hunt you down and throw my cat at you! I mean it!

And all up you have like 40 chapters? Holy shit, I will die, I just know it! But at least I will die happy...even if I do end up going to hell :P lol

I love you, I love your story. You rock!

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From Fawnheart on May 06, 2008
Hoe-lee snapping dog's bums wonderboy... holy fucking SHIT! Oh my freaking GAWD.... that better not have been a dream, I mean, it, I will absolutely flip out...actually, it could be good, because then they will have to go through it all again hehe, but oh shit...

Oh my GODALMIGHTYHOLYSNAPPINGARMPITS wonderboy...

Fuck me dead...

I'm lost for words...I better wait till I calm down so I can give you a vaguely sensible review...

Oh fuck.

Holy shit..

Jebus!
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From ANON - lunar on May 05, 2008
wai! WHy didn't you tell me you'd added so many more tasty bits!!
Here I was sitting like a chump thinking I'd seen the whole chapter to-date and NOooooo you went and added the hotness!

I like the little bits and bobs of description you added at the beginning too, btw. Helped to clarify the setting and set the tone yadda-yadda MOST EXCELLENT Third-base action *applauds* I totally agree that tiefling has unfair advantage due to body temperature. Ceald is not going to find another honey as hot as this one in a month of sundays :-D

*applauds some more*
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From ANON - Nex on May 01, 2008
... You know how to keep a crowd, my friend. v
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From evelyn on April 06, 2008
URRRAAAGHHH cliffhanger!

It was excellent, I love the imagery, and how Caeld more oft than not trails off with his train of thoughts.

His poor li'l dragon's gonna be pissed.

ANYWAY I'm stoked at the update and can't wait for more!
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From ANON - Ermine White on April 05, 2008
I'm all a-squee! I popped in to see if you'd updated and you had! As usual your descriptions are clear and vivid. And Ceald's inner thoughts brought a smile to my face, especially in the alleys. He's a voyeur at heart isn't he?
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From ANON - Arimikoe on April 05, 2008
Okay, I had to leave and come back a couple of times before I could stop smashing the keyboard incoherently. Sex like that does that to my brain. Valen does that to my brain. I've never actually thought of him having black blood and a somewhat grey cast to his skin before, but I find myself rapidly becoming a fan of it... how can I not?

Caeld continues to make me love him. That adorable mix between innocence and ... not ... it absolutely captivating. I do not know how you wrote out this chapter so coherently. I would have had to stop several times.

Also. The tail thing? And Valen's explanation of it? Oh. Man.
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