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Reviews for The First Crack in the Metal

By : MMishima
  • From lexxxxxii on February 18, 2008
    Wow. Even better than the first installment. I love this so much. So much in fact, I think I may have to draw fan art for it, if I can find the time. In which case, I'll be sure you are the first to see it.

    Can't wait to read the next lot of chapters. x
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  • From Sefie on February 13, 2007
    Bad Saatchi, bad!! >:o I feel almost sorry for Midg-- I mean Xiaoyu. -_-;

    But, congratulations on part two finished! :D http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/48701171/ A little something. ^^ Keep up the marvelous work~ :D


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  • From MMishima on February 04, 2007
    Thank you for the review, Selfie. I appreciate a good critic!! In defense, let me say that when the average person speaks, which is the predominant use of "your" versus "you're", there is never a break down of proper grammer. And if anything, while writing Hwoarang, good grammer isn't even a factor hehehe, though I do understand the need for that conjunction change. There is a difference, however, between "wet" and"whet". "Whet" is used to indicate when something is...unnaturally whet...for example, lubrication, although it is "wet" on the skin, I like to differentiate it with by adding the extra "h". So, that is a bit of artistic loveliness on my part.

    Thank you for the link, I will definately give it a read over!!
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  • From Sefie on February 04, 2007
    Oh, one thing that has been bugging me for a while now in your story is the confusion of some words. Mostly the use of "your" and "you're", and also the difference between "wet" and "whet". I think you should pay more attention to those word pairs. Here's a link to a site that has a lot of commonly misused words: http://www.readabilityformulas.com/article-lanne.html

    But this is just minor detailing, don't let it keep you from writing. ^^
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  • From Sefie on January 19, 2007
    Bi-weekly?! Ahh, that seems like such a long time. x3 I'm so so very glad to have rediscovered this story arc of yours. (I began reading the first part in... oh dear, I can't even remember when. o_O When did you begin writing it? XD; And then a few months ago I get back to fandom, start reading fics and suddenly get this "Hey. I've read this before. O_o"-feeling~) It seems to me that your writing skills have only gotten better through time. This part seems to have advanced on every level for you, keep it up~ :D

    Thank you so much for writing this arc, I love it!
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 19, 2006
    I just want to say thank you so much for writing this fic.
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  • From MMishima on December 18, 2006
    I hope everyone enjoys. I have actually completed this sequel...chapters I will post will be weekly till it is here in its entirety. I have begun work on my T5 fic, the last in the "Sword Maker Trilogy", please R&R!
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  • From ANON - Neverland on November 21, 2006
    I love this story arc and the way it is progressing. I check back every other-to-once a day to see if you keep updating and you have! Please continue.
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  • From ANON - jayree05 on October 25, 2006
    Yay! An update. I was worried you had died or something. Good stuff.
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  • From ANON - Aki on October 23, 2006
    I can't believe I'm reading this. It's like a dream. A really really good dream. It's so detailed...and...god damn just perfect.
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  • From ANON - La Petite on August 14, 2006
    A friend recommended this story to me and I'm glad she did. I never expected it to be so good.

    You have some *serious* writing skills, girl! The characters seem so perfect. Hwoarang feels like a perfect rendition of his game self as does Jin and his transformation from Tekken 3 to 4. Just...wow.

    Can't wait to see the next chapter. Please continue.
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  • From ANON - Kaoru on July 17, 2006
    Ooooh, quite a cliffhanger...
    I'm so worried what'll happen to Hwoa-chan^^
    Please continue, I can't wait to find out what'll happen next!
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  • From ANON - jayree05 on June 24, 2006
    I love this story. Please keep the updates coming...
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  • From ANON - Kairi Fighter on June 01, 2006
    I'm really glad to see updates to the "Quality..." story arc (it's such a great fanfic *and* it has my favorite couple). I'm looking forward to what happens next.
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