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Reviews for Path of Radiance Reborn

By : Kryptonix
  • From ANON - magebear7 on November 05, 2006
    woohoo! great! try a shinon/lethe next. thatd be interesting!
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  • From ANON - Mishina on October 01, 2006
    More. More. More!!
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  • From ANON - oath_keeper289 on September 09, 2006
    h-o-l-y...... SHIT! that was the best FE fic i have ever read!!!!!!!!!! OMG OMG OMG!!!!
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  • From Kiune on August 08, 2006
    Awesome story. It's hard to find decent lemons these days. Either they don't get to the point or the lemon part is two mangled paragraphs long and look like it was written by a horney thirteen year old (or someone who didn't bother to spell check after typing the damn thing with one hand ^-^) The detail was well done and you portray the characters well. You should continue this particuliar story!
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  • From jackalman22 on August 07, 2006
    Well, well, it seems that since you reviewed my own story more than once, I figured I owed you the courtesy of extending the same to you. Let me just start out by saying that I thoroughly enjoyed this piece. You started it out very nicely, painting a nice image and getting the reader right inside of Ike's head. You also paid great attention to chronological game detail, and you did a good job of including lots of characters and realistic interactions. I actually laughed at the bit between Boyd, Kieran, and Oscar, and I mentally nodded at the reference to Gatrie and Ilyana. Like I said, your attention to detail (in terms of Path of Radiance as the source material) is very well done.

    Now, for my take on the sex. Overall, it was very good. You took your time, which is a great plus, and you definitely were vivid with your descriptions. My only problem was, much like the other reviewer mentioned, Elincia did seem a bit out of character at some points. As caught up as she and Ike may have become during the sex, her personal habits would not go out the window. She would not say "yeah," or "baby." At least, I don't think she would.

    Furthermore, I thought that the sex was a bit too much "sex" and not enough "making love." You started to explain and develop a sincere, deep bond between Ike and Elincia, and I thought it was great. However, you took the sex in the smut direction more so than the love direction. I don't think their attraction or care for each other stops at lust. Sure, there is lust, but I didn't get the sense of love-making that I thought should have been there.

    If you never intended to make it a love scene, that's perfectly fine, but it sort of threw me for a loop. Other than that, the sex was smutty, hot, and well-written. My only point of advice is to watch out for frequent repetitions. It happened a couple of times, namely with the "jet after jet of cum" and the "volume and intensity" (referring to Elincia's moans). Be careful to mix up your depictions so that the reader doesn't get distracted.

    On a related note (and I doubt many people would even notice this), but keep in mind the time setting of Path of Radiance. Did they have lamps back then (the type you switch on)? Also, would Shinon be wearing his bow at the dinner table? He's Shinon, yeah, but I doubt any warrior would come to dinner packing their weapon. Not a big deal either way, but as a detail stickler myself, I'm giving you a heads up.

    In closing, this fic contained everything I like about erotic fanfiction. Excellent pace, good characterizations (for the most part), hardly any grammar/spelling mistakes, superb attention to detail and environment, and solid depiction of the sex scene. Your style reminds me a lot of my own, and I just wanted to commend you on a job well done.

    I love Fire Emblem, and I hope you continue your work. Even if you decide to not continue with Fire Emblem fics, I'll look for more of your work in the future. Okay, this review is long enough.

    -jm
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  • From ANON - Al on July 09, 2006
    Really good, though Elincia seemed a bit OOC during the love scene. Great to see a story with these two though. Hope you write more.
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