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Reviews for Path of Radiance Reborn

By : Kryptonix

From Zelix on July 16, 2007
Oh my god... chapter 6 was, oh my god... it was so intense! I've read so many fics with battle scenes in them, and i've been, least to say disapointed with their quality, but you, wow... the scenes in chapter 4 were awesome and now chapter 6, all i can say is... perfection. I've written some battle scenes myself, so i know how hard it is to write them which is why i am now telling you that your scenes are just plain and simply rock the house.

The fight with the black knight was perfect all around, the details, the intensity, the length... and the part where he began to use the warping powder, that was really original. And when the battle was over, i was literally clapping my hands at how you described the end of it.

I can't wait for the next chapter, i just can't wait.

PS: The reviewer, black knight, is a friend of mine and he wanted to give you a message since he can't review your fic due to you not accepting anonymous reviews anymore:
"Yes, you have indeed filled my role adequately and as recognition to your writing skills, i shall spare you of feeling the cold merciless steel of my Alondite. It is too bad i am now dead, for i would like to shake your hand out of respect, keep writing and my vengeful ghost shall not pay a visit to you."
And that, as they say, is that. hope you update again soon!
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From CrazyIvan on April 12, 2007
After reading what you have here I have to say that I am quite impressed. I had to skim a bit during some of the sex scenes, not that I don't like them, hell, they're one of the best parts in anything, but, I just kinda felt tired of smut for some reason... Oh well, back to the review. The way you follow the storyline is very very good. However, I wonder why you chose to only retell from the 24th chapter, I myself have a fanfiction in the works from the prolouge to the epilouge, but god only knows when I'll get around to it.

Now then, I saw nothing major in the way of gramatical and/or spelling errors, the formatting is plain and simple, which is good. You've used quite a few of the characters, although, it seems only natural to leave out some, trying to follow each individuals storyline in detail whilst still keeping the main storyline moving along with equal detail would just be far too complex. Your attention to detail is superb, most of the time you can almost 'see' the story as you read.

I have a few minor dissatisfatory items to report, whilst the sexual scenes were long, well written, and full of, well, sexual situations, I felt you were lacking on the combat side of things. You did do quite well, but they just seemed trivial compared to the effort you but into the sex. A great writer gives the entire story equal effort. I also noticed you didn't mention all of the general's names, with the exception of Bertram, this is something that seems quite odd, when you consider how in detail everything else is, you probably already know that each of the generals in every battle had a name, in fact, some even have back stories of their own, however, going into that is just not a wise idea.

Well, that about wraps my review up, you should consider yourself honored, it is very very rarely that I find a piece of work so well done that I am compelled to review in such a manner. Kudos to you good sir, and now I must bid you ado.

This is CrazyIvan, signing off for now, semper phi, carry on....
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From Jaxomruth on March 11, 2007
Another great chapter. Don't worry about the next chapter not having any sex. It is important to build plot if you want to make your work more than just pure smut. I would love to see you do a lemon between Lucia and Januff the Hawk Laguz. I think they make a wonderful pairing. You've done a male beroc with a female laguz, it would be great to switch it around. Besides those two have great chemisty between them. One of their first converstation is about Januff wanting to try a "restuarnt" with Lucia.
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From Zelix on January 15, 2007
Hahahhaha, chapter 4 was quite funny. You describe the battle scenes really well, i'm truly impressed about those, and of course, the pairings are really good and this one was funny too, i loved how you ended this chapter and i would love to read more soon.
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From darkwave390 on January 06, 2007
Wow...you're good at lemons. It's weird...I can't really describe what it is that you do but you really capture everything there is to good writing.
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From ANON - Bucko on December 29, 2006
You're doing a most excellent work so far with this fic. The original story is used well as a frame, but you're also expanding it with interesting elements of your own, which, for the record, meld in nicely with the world - in difference to some of the other oddities you often see when authors try to pull something out their sleeve. The characters keep themselves in their own mind and world, too. For the most part anyway. There were some things in the first chapter, but I believe Jackal Man covered that. You've improved since then, though. I give you the Thumbs Up Award for pulling through that crazy pairing in the last chapter and making it believable. I think that signifies the fic as a whole.

I'm really interested in seeing where you'll take this next. Personally I would love to see something with Titania, perhaps paired up with Haar or Ranulf (or Caineghis, wie). Yeah, she's frustrated and blocked up over Greil by this time in the story, but I bet you could work around that or use it to your advantage, like you did with Shinon and Lethe. Anyhooo, anything's good. Keep it up!
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From ANON - Zelix on December 20, 2006
I've always loved path of radiance, ever since i first played it i've been completely hooked to it... and now, to see this wonderful fanfiction, well, i'm feeling completely satisfied. I love the pairings you've made so far, especially the latest one, heh, that was so good!

Well, i can't wait to see where you will be going with this fic, especially with the new element you've added to it, can't wait to see what you're going to do with it!
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From ANON - jaxomruth on December 10, 2006
I would love to see you do a Lucia/Janaff pairing. They have some really good support conversations. Plus I love pairing beroc/laguz up. Here is looking forward to your next posting whenever it is.
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From ANON - Radiance on December 08, 2006
First off, i must say big thank you for giving me someone pairing up with Lethe... and with Shinon of all people! That was like a shot out of the blue, no time to evade or realise it, just simply... wow.

I can't wait to see what you come up with next, and the Wraiths you added into the storyline, those guys have me intriqued now, and i am very interested and eager to see how you utilise them into your story.

Please update again soon, this is too good to stop now!
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From ANON - Black Knight on December 08, 2006
... I am deeply impressed, this new chapter was most enjoyable. Wraiths... interesting, very nice turn of events you have here, and i am more than interested in how this new turn of events developes in the future chapters.

So this time it was a Shinon/Lethe pairing, that, is something i NEVER expected to see and i congratulate you on doing it, it was very well done. I will keep watch on what you invent next, with great interest.

It is a good thing you updated with such a skillfully done chapter, you have now been spared from feeling the cold steel of my Alondite, of which, i am greatly relieved.
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From ANON - applemsith on December 01, 2006
u got fuckin talent u little turd mongering piece of cunt. fuckin amazing stories, jizzed like 2 pints and covered my fuckin cat. im so fuckin horny right now that im gonna fuckin penetrate my dog, tavis' sweet, flacid anus and plunder him with a firey unadultered passion rivaled only by that of ike and elicina and u and me in our tuscan villa on those long, sweaty, passionate summer nights. a little advice: get rid of the gay ass fucktard game plot and stop using fuckin gay ass names like ike and soren, use a kool fuckin name like brandon and fuck fire emblem....fag. u should go into the adult fiction novel business.

keep up the fuckin kick ass work............cuntfaggotdouchebaggot
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From ANON - Black knight on November 10, 2006
Nice, it is good to see some het Fire emblem: path of radiance fics for a change with excellent quality. I don't review often, but this fic caught my attention firmly and i decided to give it a review, as tribute for giving me something delightful to read.

Keep it up, and i won't have to use Alondite to impale you, killing Greil was bad enough, i would hate to kill yet another one who has caught my interest. :)
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From ANON - Radiance on November 09, 2006
I'm really liking this fic so far, that last pairing surprised me quite nicely, didn't see that one coming. This fic is very good, and i am very eagerly awaiting for the next installment for it, hope you update again soon!

As a side note, i really would like to see either a Boyd/Titania (Due to me playing the game and trying out the support conversation between the two of them, it got me curious) or someone getting paired up with Lethe. But, that is your choice, i'm just asking. Either way, i can't wait to see what you come up with next!
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From ANON - Anon on November 08, 2006
Very good, this fic is quite good indeed. I can't wait to see what the next pairing will be like, since this latest one was VERY surprising... can't wait to see what happens next. Update again soon!
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From ANON - darkwave390 on November 07, 2006
It's really good. I think that another interesting pairing would be Ilayna and Gatrie.
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