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Reviews for Suikoden V: Relations

By : Sialeeds

From ANON - Anon on August 10, 2006
u should do a chapter about isabel and hazuki
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From ANON - Anon on August 09, 2006
Please update soon, I'm so impatient. also I love the pairings so far. keep it up
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From Streti on August 03, 2006
Hmm, the fourth chapter was very good! I wasn't too fond of chapter 3, Luserina seemed to go too far out of her character. The scene with Arshtat was quite natural however, flowed well and believably and didn't feel creepy despite the incest, instead it was quite pleasant. The scene with Marina and Belcoot is great as well, I think you got drunk Marina spot on! It's funny and erotic, and the suggestion at the end of Faroush x Marina x Belcoot was quite a pleasant surprise. In short, I thought chapter 4 was quite enjoyable in its full.
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From McDohl on August 02, 2006
Hey great to see you�re writing again. All in all I like chapter 4 I just wish there was more to the Prince and Arshtat scene and you shouldn�t feel bad with incest there�s nothing wrong with incest, yes in real life there is but there isn�t anything wrong with incest between fictional characters heck if you look at the royal family�s family tree you�ll see it�s full of incest in one way or another up till the point that Ferid won the Sacred Games the winner had always been a Godwin or a Barows so yeah the Royal family is one big incest pot. So you shouldn�t feel awkward about it. And I for one would love to see more of the Royal Family

Love the stuff between Belcoot & Marina it�s turning out very well. Can�t wait to see the threesome However I don�t think it should include yaoi I have nothing against yaoi in fact I think it would add to the series and maybe would like to see it in later chapters. However I just don�t think it would fit Belcoot, it just seems to out of character for him.

Anyway keep up the good work.
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From ANON - Anon on August 02, 2006
"It's time to stop playing and start..."

"...Dating?"

That line actually made me laugh out loud. Good stuff. Seriously though, give some thought to including Hazuki. Or I guess I should say 'Give some thought to introducing Hazuki'. It'd be a fun character dynamic to see you right about. The love triangle, I mean. Oh, and please no yaoi.
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From ANON - Anon on August 01, 2006
I can't tell from the story that you thought the incest part was awkward to write.
The only objection I have is that they're finished so fast, they only have sex for
one paragraph.

The BelcootxMarina part was funny and nice, though it also was a little short on sex.
The next chapter will be interesting to see, though I was looking forward to a
non-yaoi threesome. Would you consider making two versions? =P
Good job anyway and keep going!
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From ANON - Girouette on August 01, 2006
Ho ho HO! Woo! What do we have here?
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From ANON - Anon on July 28, 2006
Please update soon
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From ANON - Girouette on July 26, 2006
Well, well. This is a nice story...and I would definately like to see a yaoi chapter
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From McDohl on July 17, 2006
Wow Chapter 3 sure as hell surprise me, that was definitely wasn�t what I expected from Luserina I thought she would be more virginal inline with game�s Luserina but this was a good surprise I enjoy that she took charge I also found the added touch of anilingus. The Belcoot & Marina was good. I actually would like to see more of the 2 heck maybe a threesome with Prince. since the Prince are good friends hell the were almost Brother in-laws however I don�t think the prince & Belcoot should any sexual things together unlike the Prince Belcoot doesn�t strike me as bi-sexual. I like how you have Kyle trying to get the Prince to check out the ladies with him. The chapter did have some minor spelling errors and some spots seem rush but still it was a good chapter. I know you are trying to stay with the feel of the game by not having the Prince talk or show much emotion or even be call by a name and you have done it in a good way and some readers like that. However in my opinion trying to keep that up will get old, I would like the Prince to actually speak and interact with the people of the castle plus it would make him more realistic. I mean are we to believe that the Prince can lead a army but can�t ever get more than 2 words out of his mouth .One last thing I know you gave the Prince a name at the beginning of chapter1 but I would like to see it use more it�s ok for most the castle to call him Prince as a show respect to him and his title but I think he�s close friends such as Kyle and Lyon and his aunt Sialeeds should call him by his name at lest when not in a formal setting. Any keep up the good work and I hope would get computer problem taken care of.

PS.
Sorry to go on a rant there and it wasn�t meant to be a shot to you it�s more a shot to the game mechanics and Konami, I mean for crying out loud the days of the silent heroes died out in the mid 90�s
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From McDohl on July 17, 2006
Great story love the the Lun chapter and the ending to ch. 2 . I�m 100% behind a Prince x Lursernia maybe romactic dinner or some crap like that leading to Lurserina�s first time. Alsoif you plan to do a Belcoot x Marina or a Marina x Prince chapter how about just make it a Marina x Belcoot x Prince threesome. For future pairings how about what I think everyone will like to see Miakis x Lyon or Lyon x Miakis x Prince at some point down the road or at lest Lyon x Prince. Also a Lelei & Lucretia bath scene might be nice. Also since the game hints to it I would love to see Kyle x Sialeeds. Even though I�m not really into male on male sex, one idea I was thinking of might be interesting since The Prince strike�s me as someone that could be bi-sexual and Rahal could also be gay or bi. And since you seem not to be shy of incest I thought that it would be interesting to see and Threesome between Rahl, Prince, and Rania with everyone getting a piece of each other. Also since you said you wanted to add things besides just sex it would be funny to see some scenes like Kyle or Kyle and the Prince checking out the ladies.Any way keep up the good work and Sorry about the # of paring suggestions.

For some reason when I first post this review a few days ago it cut the top half off and I just notice it today so I try to fix what got cut out at lest what I remember.
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From ANON - Anon on July 16, 2006
Very good, It's nice to see another great Suikoden story. Suikoden deserves more good stories.
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From Sialeeds on July 15, 2006
Thank you so much for your reviews! Some great ones here too! *sniffle*

To address:

Raja: I tried to write her as the game did: down to earth and to the point. However, when/if she gets more lines, I'll try to emulate her more realistically.

As for the updates, I absolutely plan to make more chapters soon, but my computer is HORRIBLE. It will shut itself off at a moment's notice. So, its highly likely you won't see an update for about two weeks, as I'm going to visit my granparents and then HOPEFULLY get a new computer.

So...um...thank you very much, and do keep checking in and reviewing, I may surprise you with a new chapter. XP
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From Streti on July 15, 2006
Hm, nice to see more good Suikoden stuff! Good writing, not perfect, but without nitpicking too much, I'll just point out few things in the first chapter. First of all, I was wondering what it was that was messing up the layout, and it turned out to be Egbert's huge written-together line. You should put a few spaces in there, just a few not to mess up Egbert's style from the game.

From the eating scene, when you list all the characters and then directly continue with "wolfing down a meal", it gives the impression that all the characters are acting the same way. I'm not sure if it was intentional, but I really can't see Luserina, Raja and Lucretia "wolfing down" the food the same way that Logg and even Lun would.

I know you also said you wouldn't be faithful to the game's script, but it was a bit weird to see Raja talking like Logg. For Lun, it was easier to take in, since her style is much closer to her father's, anyway, although still on a higher level.

But with that, the first chapter was a good introduction, and the Prince's line right at the end of the training session was quite amusing. The scene with Lun was nice.

The scene with Jeane in chapter 2 was quite hot, however! For some strange reason, I didn't really like Jeane 5 in the game, but you've done a great deal to raise her appeal. I don't know why it is, but the image of Jeane topless, but not bottomless, her full bosoms out in the open, was very sexy! Thinking of her with a sheen of sweat on her bare skin as she tries to cool off... ah yes. The facial was very sexy too, as well as the scene where she's inviting the Prince to eat her out. However, I think it's a bit much to have her come so soon, and then once more again.

Nice ending to chapter 2. Both the scene of the Prince licking her out on her booth and the messages in the comment box were very nice on their own!

So far, the cumshots with Jeane and Lun were described nicely, with the cum dripping from inside them, or splashed on the thighs of the women... although, when the Prince licks Jeane again, I was left wondering whether she had cleaned up or not. :P

As for pairings, I'm behind Prince x Luserina, and I also think that Killey x Lorelai x Viki threesome could be interesting... or a foursome with Zweig.
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From ANON - flame13th on July 14, 2006
Keep it coming

*fapfapfapfap*

u r really good. Still waiting fer some pairings and chaps.
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