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By : maiafay376

From ANON - Bedsidespider on October 06, 2006
This by far has become my favorite Fic, please please please don't quit, I really like your OC Daniel
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From maiafay376 on October 05, 2006
This is to Ninael:

I don't like padding my reviews...but I wanted to answer you here.

I'm glad you decided to take a chance with it, and I hope you continue doing so for the long haul. I'm pretty sure this fic will be very long, as I'm not even in the "otherword" yet! (but expect that in the next three chapters...finally! Oh, and he won't be alone...muhahahah!)

Sorry for berating that person on your other tale, they made me angry with that little jab toward "penis descriptions. I don't ignore that part of the anatomy, but there are other ways to describe it besides all hard core. The style I'm writing in is formal...so my terms will be formal. I won't spit out the term COCK just for the hell of it. As long as an author describes proper terms for "penis" without repeating that term seventy times durning the fic--then authors should be able to use whatever word they want.

That scene where Daniel is having his little one on one was meant to be sensual, not porn. If I want a more raw scene, then I'll use more raw words. If I had used "cock" in that scene, it would have screwed up the flow, and focused the reader just on that part of the anatomy. I wanted the focus more on Daniel, and the fact he's being overwhelmed by some otherworldly influence. (Walter...yum)

Funny you should mention a threesome...it won't be a technical "menage a trois"...but they will be in a situation that is messy, graphic, and bloody--but still sensual in some form. Yeah, that will be fun to write...oh, and sex is "not" the ONLY thing Walter is punishing Henry with. It is, but hes also doing other things to Henry, most not very nice. I will touch more on that later, but its violent, and references the final sacrement that Eileen repeats to Daniel from that dream in chapter 5.

Thanks again for the review.

~Carrie
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From ninael on October 05, 2006
Just spent the last several hours reading this, and quiet frankly-- I'm amazed. If it weren't for the little voice whispering in the back of my mind that sex is how Walter is punishing Henry I'd probably be gasping in shock. (Speaking of that, why the hell do I want to see a threesome with them and your OC? I should probably go to bed XD ) Well, more so than I am now in any case. Your ability to capture emotions like desparation and suspense are amazing; I usually skip over those when writing a fanfiction because it's not where my muse's insparation usually lies.

It's not often I see a fan fiction that can break free of the average fandom and really strike out as something that could exist within the universe of said game, and I will be keeping an eye out on this story and future works by you.

And to answer your question, I don't have a beta, but I tend to read through my stories before submiting them in hopes of catching any mistake. There's bound to be mistakes, but I try and correct as many as possible.
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From ANON - sephykoi on October 04, 2006
Review for chp 6, part 1 (ganked from LJ):

Wowwww... There' sooo much to cover!!

Other'n the fact that I absolutely loooooooove it and that I'm tired as hell, I'll try to see what I can review on. @_@

Walter somehow molesting Daniel. Walter moving the plot forward with a confused Daniel. Valtiel arriving and 'aquainting' himself with Daniel. That damn fucking doll. ...Alessa. I have no words to say other than that I'm rather awed. Like... *_* kind of awed. It was just so perfect, in how it flowed, and how each character behaved and reacted to one another. All that plot. Heh heh... can't wait for Thursday (or later if need be) :D

I feel for Daniel--he's REALLY loosing it, but I don't blame him in the least. I know I would! Hell, I'm surprised Henry in-game didn't after being imprisioned inside his own aparment. Speaking of whom, I'm both curious to know what Walter's going to do to the poor guy... but also not. Morbid curiosity, should I say. At the same time, I'm wondering if... say, Daniel finds out/witnesses it/the many things Walter may (or may not?) do to Henry (and others?) :3 Just a little *cough* neurotic statement from me.

Since I'm still *_* I'll have to leave the review at this... But rest assured, I'll be even more *_* when the next chapter comes out, that I find words for pieces of the chapter to comment on! :3

MUCH LOVE! *glomps Henry*

~the seph, FOYF

=D
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From ANON - Anon on October 03, 2006
great.really.great

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From ANON - Esther on October 03, 2006
Ooh, I don't know what to say. But I really should know by now to not read your stories right before I'm going to bed. They always creep me out.

the way you write is really good, Without using to much words (some authors over describe things) you manage to make me understand just how stressful it must be for poor Daniel.

The example you used when Daniel can't stay away from the bedroom, with the old toy you ignore until it's taken away, then you can't rest until you have it again. That example was so right.

The sentence "If he died inside this cage, he would at least leave a decent corpse" got me laughing out loud. If I was Daniel, that would be the least of my worries. But sometimes when I watch CSI and they show pics of some corpse, the I would think "Aww, poor bastard dying looking like that".

I think you managed to describe Daniel's way to madness very good. Not only is just being alone unable to do anything drives me crazy, but to also have to stand demon dolls, weird creatures and a crazy man, well, it would be weird if he Didn't go mad.

This was a long chapter and it's was only part 1! It will be hard to wait for the next part, but I'm sure it will be worth it.
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From ANON - Mel on October 03, 2006
There is so much going on, but you've really kept the balance and the pace. I am thoroughly enjoying Daniel's rapid descent into madness. I think you've captured that quite well. And I definitely enjoy the bathroom scenes all too much. I am such a sick and twisted individual. O_O

The voyeur scene was quite intense in itself, too. Definitely erotic and ugly at the same time, knowing Walter had a hand in it.

You've really captured the mood in this fic -- so many turns into the unknown. I love it! Everything about it! And I've never even played the games! *laughs* Okay, making James run around while I'm screaming my head off doesn't count... but yeah.

Keep up the wonderful work, lovie. You are doing a fantastic job with you OC's and the plot idea that has taken over your demented lil' mind. ;)

Mel
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From ANON - Kage on October 03, 2006
I can't wait for the next part. Keep up the wonderful work!
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From maiafay376 on October 03, 2006
Thanks guys for all the feedback...to *wanderaddict*--yes Daniel will meet Henry,(in fact next chappie!) and expect a little love triangle between Daniel, Melanie and Henry--admist all the horror, running and screaming, they will find time for the angst and complicated feelings. Expect the chapter containing Walter/Henry (Daniel will be present as well) to be incrediably graphic and hard to read...since I deal with exactly what "The Receiver" has been going through during the last two years. Make sure you guys tell me about how I portray the canon characters...if they are IC or not. I did a ton of research on events, timelines, and even if that SH newspaper had a real reporter working for it. I really want to be sure I get it right! Thanks again!
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From ANON - Anon on October 03, 2006
Thank God I didn't try to read this in the middle of the night. *shivers* It's creepy, and mind fucking, and all those wonderfully weird and twisted things I associate with Silent Hill. I love it! More please!
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From ANON - wanderingaddict on October 02, 2006
wow, amazing update. every time you add a little more this fic just gets infinately better (although I would like to have daniel meet henry :P).
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From ANON - Chaosdreamer on October 02, 2006
O_o

You updated!

So happy. Can't wait for more! ^_^
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From ANON - wanderingaddict on September 28, 2006
Wow, this story is just intense. It completely captures the bizarre and addictive quality of the games that keeps you right on the edge of your seat the entire time. I hope to read more soon.
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From ANON - zuka on September 28, 2006
*whimpers* please please update i reakky want to know what happens next is he it that other world or is it just a dream. AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH i want to know! anyways love the story just like your Resident evil stories. Keep it up.^_^
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From ANON - Ekki on September 22, 2006

Can I just say, I have never played Silent Hill. And chances are, I won't, if it's as freaky as you've written this. |D;; Dearie me. Much love your way, darl.
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