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By : Crya2Evans

From ANON - Yume on September 07, 2007
Hello. Currently on chapter 7 and loving it. Only got one comment, Vexen's eyes are green. On KH-Vids.net you can watch a bunch of Kingdom Hearts cutscenes, including one where you see him and his eyes are like forest green or something. Keep up the good story, I hope Axel and Roxas get together.
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From ANON - Siany on September 03, 2007
you should probably be a bit more careful as to where you put commers but otherwise it is still very mich enthralling.
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From Cave on September 02, 2007
D:!! Mygod, I had been too busy to read this story and shame on me, I should have been reading it anyway. I just have to repeat again that I absolutely love this story and it's one of the very, very few in the Kingdom Hearts ficworld that wonderfully written, engaging plot, IC and all that good stuff. Though I'm definitely not a Leon/Cloud person. >.> *pokes with stick*

Looking forward to reading more!
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From Shihazriah on September 02, 2007
Holy SHIT!! My brain is just fried from reading all of this but I LOVE IT!! Yeah. I've read it all over the course of two days. I took my time so I could absorb all of it. I'm glad I did. Love for this story. I'm looking forward to your update.
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From ANON - Spinner on August 31, 2007
Not at all ^-^ I thought it was great! I can't wait for the next update!
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From ANON - Enzeru on August 16, 2007
ZOMG YES!!! i'm so happy about this chapter and am waiting eagerly for the next one!
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From Azshalade on August 03, 2007
I'm happy you finally updated, I checked everyday for updates and was glad to see these. Of course I loved it and can't wait for more!
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From HappyDragon on August 02, 2007
^.^;;; Sorry the death howl hurt, but it was how I felt. Yes, I�m starting with a reply to your reply in Chapter 10. Ah, yes, I live for long reviews, both receiving and giving. Yes, I have been convinced of the Xem/Sa�x pairing, and as there are only 3 characters with specifically orange eyes--and they are all fragments/stages of the same person--and only one Nobody with yellow eyes and an �X� shaped scar . . . But losing your touch? Never! Each chapter just continues to bring us readers in deeper to the majesty of this wonderful tale. And it�s I who should be pleased that I was able to guess some things right . . . even if I have no idea what it is that I guessed right. ^_^;; . . . Ah, I thank you for your consideration of my--and other readers�--insatiable curiosity. I wish you the best if you do decide to write a sequel, but don�t try to force in extra information if you don�t. I�d much rather have an Intermission chapter or a extra epilogue chapter that contains straight technical data about the fic-verse that was never explained, or that extends and fleshes out situations that were just mentioned in passing. . . . Err . . . hopefully my ramblings made sense. ^-^

And now . . . Time to read �Interlude 4� and �Chapter 11�! . . . . .

::Interlude 4::

::Giggle:: Go Axel�s indomitable persistence! He�s such a passionate, meddlesome, crazy, loving kid . . . And I like when they don�t just fall into each others laps. I always feel more satisfied if they have to work at getting the other for a little bit. And how can you go wrong with dragging Demyx along for the ride? {Fangirl!musings: especially if he gets redirected to Zexion along the way.}

. . . Gods I adore Roxas� internal struggle with himself, and the heightened confusion stemming from his fusion, but incomplete assimilation to Sora . . . Fair warning I may have to adopt some of these elements for the sequel of my current story, as I basically plan on dealing with the same subject, but from Sora/Roxas� p.o.v. . . . Bah, it�s crazy, and may end up working itself out in such a way that I won�t need to borrow elements . . . . I�ll go back to reading now, and feeling so sorry for Roxas and praying that Axel can get to them in time.

. . . Yes Sora!!! Follow those feelings! Go To Radiant Garden!!!!!!!!! . . . . Please? ::Puppy-dog-eyes:: Make Riku take you there on a daaaaaaaaaaaate! Yay!! Roxas is shining throooooooooooooooough!!! ::Does the happy fangirl dance, even though she knows that they aren�t out of the woods yet.:: Oooooo . . . Roxas wants lovin� so bad that he�s misdirecting it to Riku because it�s the closest he can get to Axel at the moment? Hmm . . . now that I will steal! ::Lifts said writing elements from the story. Places down a baker�s dozen of cyber-cookies as payment::

O__O!!! Vinny�s P.O.V? . . . . . @_____@ ::Cries:: I feel so bad for Vinny!! He needs love, hugs and snuggles . . . . and not just from Axel. XD . . .

DAMN YOU HOOOJOOOOO!! You Screwed Me/Vinny Over In �DoC�, And You Screwed Vincent�s Life 2 Times Ovveeeerrr . . . make that 3. . . .

Wooooo . . nice touch with the base properties for the 4 types of Keyblade . . . interesting . . . Twilight�s gonna be important next story, huh?

Sweet mother of creation! Roxas & Vincent parallels!!!! ::Bows to the mastery of DracoQueen�s writing::

::Gasp:: Vinny owned a gun shop? . . . Yes Leon, remember . . . reeeeeemeeeeembeeeeer . . . so everyone forgot about the Nobodies . . . . saaaaaad . . . Aw, poor Squall. He has the weight of the world on his shoulders, and no one to lean on . . . so Cloud hasn�t come back from his fight with Sehpy . . . and do I detect some one-sided Cloud/Sephy-ness cleverly disguised as minor insanity? Oooooo jealousy . . . ah the complexities of the heart . . . . this is soooooo fun to read!

!!! Interesting thought, I�m not sure if you�re going for Vinny having taken the picture, or someone else, but the whole �Cid arguing with someone off camera�, . . . I sort of pictured him in the background facing Vincent to the side, and that Vincent was originally in the picture, but the magic of the grotto erased him from the picture . . . of course Cid could be facing forward and arguing with the person taking the picture . . . I wonder where Sehpy would have been in all that, there was a time when he was sane . . . and he thought he was just a human . . . and not related to Hojo . . .

DAMN YOU HOOOOOJOOOOOOOOO!!!!! . . . . Sorry, I�m back now.

What the hell happened to Berret? And the guy who piloted the robo-kitty? And Red XIII? . . .

Nevermind.

Dear gods the fear of rejection is strong in this fic . . . . like a chewy beef stew even. . . and dreams. I�m a sucker for dream-play and happy endings . . . .

And now . . . Chapter 11!!!!!!

::Chapter 11::

O_O!!! 3 weeks!!! ::Panics:: . . . Okay, yeah, Roxas wouldn�t be able to �detect a disturbance in the force� instantaneously, and life can be odd and troublesome, and then there�s time distortion/dilation between worlds to worry about, such as the difference between Grotto�s time and RG�s time, and even DI�s time . . . .

. . . Aww . . . meddlesome!Axel at his best! And Vinny is going into depressing sulky mode. That�s not cool. With luck, maybe Axel will be able to chip away at the mental block in Cid�s mind . . .

DAMN YOU HOJO!!! DAMN YOU AND YOUR MEMORY BEAST THAT ARE EVEN EATING THE MEMORIES OF PEOPLE ON DIFFERENT WOOOOORRRRLLLLDDDSSSS!!!! . . . Sorry, just my guess of what�s hampering Cid�s recollective abilities . . .

WhOOOOOttt!!! Yay Axel making Cid thiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiinnnnk! . . . Ah, I luv that little fire starter. . . . Though it�s moments like this that make me swear that his Somebody was a follower of Loki . . . .

XD Powned by the Uber-Healer. Look on the bright side Ax, at least she�s not purely human . . .

But at least you�re getting closer! . . . He might remember Vinny . . . maybe . . .

I�m guessing �the search for Rude� is gonna be the driving theme for the sequel . . . unless he randomly shows up at RG. . . .

Oooooooooo . . . Vinny�s past . . . Oooo, Cloudy disappeared from the castle, so he might return at the castle . . . or is Leon going there for inspiration from being in the same place as their former king . . . . . . And did everyone forget that �Ansem Seeker of Darkness� was really Xehanort, first apprentice to �Ansem The Wise� the real King of RG? I mean, it was all Xeha�s fault, even though they were both interested at first, �Ansem The Wise�--Who later took the acronym DiZ {Darkness in Zero} for a name--got sense talked into him from King Mickey . . . not that Mickey�s words reached Xeha or the others . . . .

I should probably go reread this from the beginning because I�ve obviously forgotten some of the fundamental differences between this AU and the games . . . which is a really go thing! It speaks volumes to your ability to suck the reader into a fully realized world!

All hail the power of Chocolate-chip cookies. The cookies cure all. ::Nod-nod:: Bwahahahahahahahahahaaaaaa, she knows him well enough to keep him well supplied with chocolate-chips. . . . Now Aeris can attempt to drag Vinny out to help her cook . . . which might help Cid remember . . . maybe Vinny has some specialty dishes that only he can make? Which Cid would have tasted firsthand, of course . . . . Ah, I think too much . . . .

O.% . . . Ax is the fire elemental, and he�s the one melting?! . . . . Aw, poor broody Vinny . . . Ha! In the end, none can resist the persistence of Axel . . . or chocolates. XD

Da hell? Vinny haaaaas to be part Vampire-Heartless {nevermind that there is no such Heartless} for the heat and humidity to not do anything to him . . .

!!!!!! Reincarnated Reno!!!!!!!!!!!!!! . . . . or not.

. . . Well that went well . . . . That�s not going to make the reopening of his shop all the easier . . . Oh, and nice touch with the name. ::Thumbs up::

::Gasp:: That�s the way to Sephy and Cllllooouuuuud!! . . . And Tifa. XD

Dun-dun-DUUUUUUUUUUNNN! Yay climax! Now Axel�s pissed off and taking matters into his own hands.

Awwww . . . Axel fixed things! . . . In his own meddlesome and deranged ways. . . Ah, and I love how Cid hates to get all �pansy� & �mushy� . . . .

Aaaaaaawwwwwww . . . . Cid�s gonna be all big and bad and manly and keep people from roughing up Vinny so he can live in peace . . . and maybe open his shop . . . maybe . . . that would be nice . . . maybe he could work on anti-Heartless and Anti-Nobody munitions . . . you got to figure that if the Heartless existed before Ansem, and stuck around after he was defeated, that the same has to hold true for the Nobodies and Xemnas . . . so that means that lesser Nobodies could be running around the worlds, same as lesser Heartless . . . . .

Sorry, just rambling. Nothing about Materia based �caster guns�, like the ones found in the �OutLaw Star� anime. Nope, nothing about magically charged rounds as all . . . . . Honest! ::Shifty-eyes::

Wait a minute!!! But if Sora is coming there . . . . and Axel is going to the Island . . . . NNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!! For the love of the gods! Don�t do that tired Soap Opera routine of the star-crossed lovers just missing each other by a few minutes! Pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeasssseeeeee! Make Axel spend like a week or so on making preparations, he needs to learn how to fly a gummi ship, right? And they have to set the course for him, right? And isn�t Squall still overprotective about Sora�s well-being?! Oh the humanity . . . . . Oh the Humanity!!!

Oh . . . nevermind, that�s a hell of a lot better! XD

. . . . !!!!!!!

YOU EVIL, EVIL WOMAN!!! ENDING IT THERE!!!!

But I still love you so all is well . . . And I didn�t fail to notice that Riku is there with him. XD Oooo how will he react if Axel goes rushing over to Sora with the intention of huggling his Roxas-bunny? Ah, but this was the worst and best possible place to end this chapter.

I don�t know how I�m going to handle it when this story eventually comes to an end. . . But I have a feeling that unlike with other long to epic sized stories that�s I�ve read in one sitting, I�m not going to fall into withdraw/depression . . . I hope. . . . I think this might leave me with a lingering dreamy feeling . . . But I can see that the end is probably no more than a chapter or two away . . . .

I think I�m ready for it.

But I know you enough to not expect the ordinary resolution of plot-lines. As such, I look forward to the next installment to this . . . And I�ll probably review over at MM.Org under the name �HappyDragon�.

TIll next time! Much love, huggles and smuuuchies! {And cyber cookies. All hail the cyber cookies.}
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From ANON - Spinner on July 30, 2007
You have no idea how happy i was when this updated! i almost fell over from excitement when it updated twice! I've been checking every day since the last chapter lol! can't wait for more! please update soon!
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From ANON - Drisowen on July 14, 2007
Awww! I've just read all the chapters for this story in two days and I absolutely love it! I thought it was moving a bit slow at first, but your descriptions of everything were just so wonderful!
Anyway. Poor Vincent/Ceran! That's so sad! TT.TT I hope that things between he and Cid get worked out and everyone remembers him u.u
Woderful work and beautiful writing. I cannot wait to read more of this.
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From ANON - Spinner on May 29, 2007
Awesome chapter! please update soon!
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From Applerum on May 29, 2007
I won't ask. I will tell. Roxas is so not seme. I know he's fiesty and we all love him, but I just can't wrapmy mind around that. Oh, I love the way you arrange the story. It's very good. I enjoy reading it.
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From Applerum on May 29, 2007
I know your a big fan of Vincent Axel, but I couldnt bring myself to read it! I felt like I would be betraying my love for Akuroku.....What on kamis' green earth does Akuroku mean? I know what but I have'nt the slightest when it comes to translation.
But you made me appreicate the word 'massage' very much. I giggled like a maniac when I saw it.
One more thing before I go; Um, wouldnt all the sex have made Axels' wounds...y'know...like, burst open, or bleed to the point of hemmoraging?...Ok Im just weird like that and question everything. Youll have to forgive me, as I am insane like that. Mental disorder and all...lol.
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From Applerum on May 29, 2007
Vexen has yellow eyes. He's on my desktop! BTW, this very good!
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From ANON - Trowa on May 29, 2007
WOOT! They're finaly off Gaia's Grotto!! I can't wait for what happens next!
Your story is perfectly written and keeps the readers attention, grammar, spelling, and word choice is fantastic!
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