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Reviews for The Sound of Music: Plagas orchestra

By : parodialviruses

From ANON - Sam on October 08, 2006
Very interesting story. I dont know what to say since the flamers really are being very immature on your story. this is actually a very good read and I'm a bit biased with the LeonxAshley chapters because Leon is my favourite. Also, I love descriptions in a story so maybe that turned me towards that more. The dialogues were cheesy in the chapters with fake ada in it and you did say that that is your style that your going for here. I hope you two continue with your story and dont change styles if you dont want to, unless you want to, although it seems to work fine for both I guess. I dont see anything wrong with the POV thing it didnt seem like a big deal to me and it wasn't done poorly. I'm just confused why this story was targeted for such hatred. Did you authors rub someones back the wrong way and make them jealous?
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From ANON - Anon2 on October 06, 2006
gah! I'm literaly drooling over your uses of adjectives and descriptions right now XD
Nice job to all of you guys. Its an enjoyable read and the differences were somehow nice.

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From ANON - Tammi on October 05, 2006
I dont see what all the fuss is about. I don't think any of the other readers are having a hard time following the story at all. I didnt. And the word 'dick' wasn't overly used either, especially compared to how many chapters have been issued so far.

Dialogue can be cheesy in some places, but the authors said that's what they wanted. And...Resident Evil has always been known for its cheesy dialogue. Hello- "Jill Sandwich?" "They've all become monsters!" "The ladies love the accent." "Where's everyone going, bingo?"

I say everyone needs to grow up. If it makes you feel better about your lack of self esteem to try and put down others just because they are getting nice reviews that aren't 'OH WOW I WANT TO BIRTH YOUR BABIES!' than just go right ahead and flame. Obviously, you aren't going to make anyone else feel the same. And everytime you click on the story and flame, you are only going to make it that much more popular. These two ladies know what they are doing, and it seems there are people (like me) who will defend them.

To the authors, sorry about the rant, and I hope you don't let the ankle biters get to you. You both are extremely talented, and I get a good laugh and a bit of arousal from reading your works. Whoever it was to have that Krauser/Ashley sex scene... that was wow too!
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From ANON - anon on October 05, 2006
naw, just ignore them, guys. Just keep writing your fun stories and we'll keep reading and enjoying it.
dont change your styles for this story. They're just fine for the effect you both wanted.
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From ANON - Erky Perky on October 05, 2006
Is it me or is it getting hot in here? I came to this place expecting to read some hawt loving, not to watch a flame war. To that anon who flamed: if you can't say anything nice, well then maybe you should just shut up. The world's in deep shit already with global warming; no need to add to the mix by spouting your hot gas.

To the authors, awesome job! You keep doing what you're doing! Ignore all this negative bullshit, and hey, if the flames keep coming (I wouldn't know WHY unless the person's a 'dick', hahaha) I'll bring some weiners and steak, and we can have a good ol' fashioned BBQ! ;) Mmm mmm, that's some good eatin'!

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From ANON - The Tyrant Hamster on October 05, 2006
At last, finally, I'm all caught up today, hurruh :D. Hehe, now um, lets see, please excuse if this is a bit short, I'm pretty tired :o. First of all, you two make for a most interesting writing couple, your styles are quite different but complement nicely, a double helix of chapters, it's cool 8). Having said that, in its own right this was both interesting and fairly sexy. The mutating cock aspect I found a little, bizarre, but I know people have many and varied sexual tastes, so I won't knock it. The second part with Krauser and Ashley, well, you played the lust-enslaved slut role out for her sublimely, damn it was hot XD. In terms of advice I'd say, just on a few occasions, a little more elaboration might have helped, some of the big moments seemed to slip by a bit quick, such as the orgasm. The two of you have a thing going on there, one of you sometimes misses an opportunity to flesh out a high point, and the other occasionally overloads a situation with words. You're both writing great, but if you could just refine a shuffle towards each other, just a tiny bit, I think you'd both improve a step for it without losing your individual styles :). But this is merely attempted helpfullness and don't let it could the message that I found this a solid chapter ^^.
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From ANON - Sugarplum on October 05, 2006
Hmm me thinks someone needs to take a chill pill, or get a hobby. I can understand if you don't like a story if it doesn't meet your tastes, but bashing it for no good reason aside from, "I don't like your humour"? That's so lame.

If you found it so distasteful and hard to read, why did you bother? Was it that difficult to hit the BACK button, or were you just itching for a bitchfest?

Either write something constructive in your review or just leave. Everyone would be better off for it.
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From ANON - anon on October 05, 2006
to anon above this anon review.

you are saying the author is stupid because you disagree with the pov?

Why dont you just flame some more and call her idiot and all kinds of nasty things then?

You try to put down other peoples stories and the way they write instead of helping them out.

Another thing, if you dont like the story why are you bothering with it? Just go on your merry way and read other peoples stories here.

If that's your thing, you should just do that. Other reviewers and readers are enjoying it, and you come along and start throwing flames and nasty words to put others down.

The authors already said its partly humour, and if you dont like it, why not just go away? No one making your eyes bleed, you yourself make your own eyes bleed. You have no one to blame but yourself.

The corny dialogue is for fun and everything else is for fun.

Either enjoy the story or move on, instead of putting other people down.

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From ANON - anon on October 05, 2006
Where to start...? O_O

"This is semi-serious story with some humour." -- Part of your summary...hmmm. I find that very hard to believe -- on so many levels. Where does the humour begin? Where does the seriousness begin? I don't see any of it. I see a cheaply written story that needs a major overhaul on just about everything.

Really, the POV switching from one paragraph to another is what gets to me the most. It's mind boggling. Jesus, my head hurts. No author... NONE... who has enough competency in their brains knows that you stick to ONE POV throughout a chapter or section... then you switch to another if one so desires in the NEXT chapter or after a time break. I have never read a book (and I have many) where the writer will suddenly switch the POV's. I cannot begin to explain what a major pet peeve this is of mine, when I'm trying to read a story and it suddenly switches. It ruins the effect and the smoothness of the story. Very poor writing right there and in desperate need of a beta... one who knows what the hell they are talking about when it comes to editing. You might want to check into that, dearie.

The weak dialogue, I can understand since you were intending to make it so lame. That I can overlook...I think. *eye twitch*

All in all... this story is poorly written. Pathetic even. I seriously regret clicking on this as now my eyes are bleeding. Excuse me while I go bang my head against a wall and put myself out of my misery.
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From ANON - william birkin on October 05, 2006
I need to leave a proper review for the rest of this story, girls. Let me just say this is an entertaining series and one that left me chuckling in some areas. Good descriptors, still flowed easily and every chapter was different and enjoyable.

To be nitpicky? I'll jump on the bandwagon since some people want to be nit pick. The parts with Pandora's story was very descriptive, flowing and well done, even with the overly flourishing descriptors. I am bias with the Leon and Ashley pairing so that's a plus. The usage of Leons dick was funny, and I noticed even in Crimson Belladonnas stories she used dick too to describe the males part. I think this shall go down in history, the word 'dick' in nc-17 stories. It's the mother of all male penises. Get your daily dose of dick. Poor girls, now you'll be forever super hypersenstized over the word dick and its use.

The part with Ada's clone was funny and I'm glad you girls are using it as it would explain the extremely out of character demeanour Ada projects. It's quite pathetic but as long as it's a clone, there should be a reason for its malfunction. Perhaps, if I may suggest, why the organization had not realized this slight error? Were they just focused on the Ada with her usual spy-skills? Perhaps that is the reason as they, the organization don't seem to care about human personalities. Clone Ada is quite the pathetic woman and its not a wonder Wesker is getting the mother of all headaches.
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From ANON - Jared on October 05, 2006
wow the descriptions in this story is whoa! was that your intention? :D
Because your other stories dont have this much; your other ones are perfect. But this set of series has alot of deep description. Dont get me wrong, its still good and still readable and flowing yet, I'm left wondering if you did this intentional?
Are you trying out a new style?
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From ANON - The Tyrant Hamster on October 05, 2006
OK, finally, I've got time to review this XD. Hehe, anyway, lets see. In a nutshell, this was good, really quite solid, with one or two minor bumps but none the less a nice quality chapter.

A couple of minor points was that first, while I lot was said in this chapter, not a lot actually, happened, you know? I mean the description was good, wonderful language and flow, but there was a huge portion of it crammed into parts where in fact little to nothing actually transpired, which is a good tactic in some kind of, you know, major event, but it did sort of, how can I say this? It was a bit much for the more mundane stuff, like if you pack every trivial action with so much detail it sort of loses it's meaning. It wasn't a big problem, but if you could shorten a sentence here or shave one off there, just tuck it in a little bit tighter, I think it would help the story flow much better :D.

The other thing, is the descriptions were sweet, but a select few of them were a bit, um, much, like one about Leon's dick, it sounded like some kind of mutant, I'm sure that's not what you were aiming for XD. Call a dick a dick, or call it a pumping, blood-filled shaft of masculinity, but if you put on too many layers of description, it sort of covers up the original meaning, you know?

All the same it was a very good chapter, and I myself am guilty of the slight imbalances that peeked up a few times here. This doesn't need any drastic changes, or any at all to be honest, but if you could just use a little less in the way of words to describe some things so the story has more pace and flow, and not over-describe things that don't warrant it, like a cock, I think it'll make for a helpful improvement.

That's my advice, trim a bit off the descriptions of events to help things flow better, and also off of things that they don't quite fit. But even without these tweaks I think it's a very good chapter, just trying to help it become a little step better ^^.
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From ANON - mysteryman on October 05, 2006
sorry that last review was for chapter 4 just to make it clear ^_^
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From ANON - mysteryman on October 04, 2006
Very nice. :D I did notice a few grammar mistakes in there that kind of interrupted the flow of things, such as "feeling her voluptuous breasts pressed tightly to his". Tightly to his what? He doesn't have voluptuous breasts so the sentence doesn't make sense.

Aside from that, it had all the usual, high quality goodies that you normally produce. :)

- V's friend
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From ANON - anon on October 04, 2006
I cannot beleive that person came in here to bitch about both of your works when by far it is an interesting and fun read.
If this is not the place to have fun and spread your wings to write and enjoy your fandom I dont know what.

In all fairness she did initially like it but I'm just shaking my head at the negativity.

As for your works, I look forward to the rest of the installments you two come up with.
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