Reviews for Reds Under The Flower BedBy : JayDee |
Well, this was...something.
So, here we have another story review by a guy who isn't in the target audience. First, the story does highlight the importance of context and how it can affect my response to imagery and dialogue. See, normally...
"Princess Peach, you are deposed as ruler of the Mushroom Kingdom. We’re setting up a people’s collective. Long live the People’s Mushroom Republic!"
...hearing Toad say that would be just about the funniest thing ever written. In isolation, it's hilarious, complete with a mental image of Toad with a hammer and sickle flag appearing behind him and the Soviet national anthem blasting in the background. In context, though...
As usual, you have a serious talent for giving the reader just the right sensory details to perfectly communicate pain, and there is actually something deeply unsettling about brutal murder taking place while happy music plays and the torturer features a happy, childlike smile. It was likely intended to be funny, and sometimes it can work for dark comedy, but there's also something kind of Orwellian about it.
I've never actually played any of the Super Mario games, strange though that may sound, so I don't have any attachment to these characters save by pop culture. Nonetheless, you do a good job of establishing sympathy for Princess Peach, with her only line before the torture begins being a display of kindness. Don't get me wrong, it's nowhere near the degree of character establishment you gave Luzurial, but Peach is a character in a well-established franchise, so not as much detail is necessary.
By now, you're no doubt wondering why I'm reviewing this, given my snuff aversion. Well, back in 2008, I stumbled upon this story, and somehow I read "brutal plant rape" in the summary and thought it was just going to be basic tentacle stuff, you know, rape in the Literotica mold where the victim begins enjoying it partway through. I somehow missed the word "snuff" in the disclaimer, and it wasn't until you described the thorns tearing Peach's flesh that I realized where this was headed.
Nonetheless, your writing style caught my attention, and I thought "If only I could find a story that doesn't feature snuff. Hmm...well, this Whore of Heaven story isn't snuff, so that means this angel will come out of this okay!" *click*
One hour later...
"I'm sad now..."
THAT'S RIGHT! The story I couldn't remember? IT WAS REDS UNDER THE FLOWER BED THE WHOLE TIME!
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