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Reviews for A Heart to Call My Own

By : GatorBoy

From ANON - Nicole(: on May 31, 2009
*smiles giant smile*
You really need to update this fast, cause this is amazing. I love it to death. They are so in character, and this is just... Perfection. (: I love it so much, and you need to write more. Please? :D
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From ANON - JapAngela on April 13, 2008
I liked what I read so far. But I'm going all emo because there hasn't been an update in forever. T^T
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From HarasMent3012 on October 14, 2007
oooh! Zexy's so sexy! hehe! hmm, wonder what will happen here... >:D
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From HarasMent3012 on October 14, 2007
The story sounds awesome. You write brilliantly, lol. the seriousness and humour mixed together are great. cant wait to read the rest!

xXx Haras
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From Cave on June 12, 2007
O:

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This story rules. Finally, a high school AU with absolutely fantastic writing! I am absolutely loving the pace of it and the characterization. Zexion is awesome. So is Demyx. O: Go team you!

Sometimes though you use 'the' instead of 'they'. Thought I'd point that out~ Can't wait for the next update! :D
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From sillyneko345 on June 05, 2007
Another chapter?! *dies of happiness*

The first part of Zexy's dream = rawr! Emus = lol! Darn those pesky emus, always popping up in random bedrooms to ruin the moment.
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From sillyneko345 on June 05, 2007
Squeee~ an update!!! I understand about school-induced delays and such... it almost makes it all the sweeter when the update finally happens. Anyway -- the review!

Zexy just needs to have Demyx over a lot so his hosting skills improve ;) Favorite scene was the movie -- I would've pictured Demy as the one who'd be scared of horror flicks and Zexy as the one who'd like them... or at least find them amusing. I was laughing there, it was just too cute!
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From ANON - FlurryDivider on June 03, 2007
OMFG! I LOVE IT! Could you email me when you update!? Plz and thx! And I absolutely LOVE this pairing and you can write it well! Keep up the good work!
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From alwaysabrat on June 03, 2007
I really like this story!! Zexion is funny i love the side comments be makes!! Cant wait for the next chapter!! XD
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From ANON - Califa-chan on June 01, 2007
I love this story and it is a great cliffhanger I already have filthy thought of what might happen and I was disapointed by no details when Zexy was in the shower cos I like lemons and that would have been lemenade that would put me over until the real thing.
You're such a tease! something naughty better happeen soon or you'll see the flamthrower I use on Evil Kairi XD

But if the next part goes romantic I don't want to see angst cos that can put people off stuff so like make Zexion try and kiss Demyx and he misses and makes a show of himself maybe as a good delay if you have to do one
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From HappyDragon on June 01, 2007
That was too cute! Ah, I�m so glad that you�re working on this story again. I almost thought I�d have to search out your fic on other fanfic sites. I was even ready to go looking around both DeviantArt and LiveJournal because there they kind of . . . well bluntly, they�re more lax when it comes to imposing rules, and I was beginning to think that your stuff would get purged. But then there�s also Mediaminer, they�ll take any writers, any age, forever and a day as long as they have the right warnings . . . .

But I digress. This is cute, and I almost didn�t believe that you started out with a dream. But I applaud you on keeping them from just �falling together�, while still tempting the hell out of Zexy. Ah, and you left off at such an evil place, I wonder if Zex will have a nosebleed by the time we get back . . . or will you pick up right where you left off?

MMM, well keep up with the delicious Zemyx!
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From guzophela on May 29, 2007
-drools at Zexion's movies- Most of ours are bootlegs, 'cuz we're awesome like that, but I'm a documentary /fiend/.
Hooray for an update though! Demyx seems relatively straight, but the horror movie thing was kind of a cop-out me thinks. They totally should have watched "The Omen" (not the new one, the old one), just because that's one of the few movie's I'll watch. Or maybe it was Demyx's sinister plan to watch a cheesy horror film and get cozy with Zexy? Anyway, I await the next chapter good sir!
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From HappyDragon on May 29, 2007
O______O!!!! An Update! Yay! ::Dances::

Ah, well life can get pretty crazy sometimes, so it�s all okay. Ah, it�s just good to know that you�re still working on this. But now, to--Oh, Cookies! ::Munches on a cookies:: Mrpf? ::Swallows bite:: MMmm, okay, I was wondering about the beta-ness. Ah, on the forums here you can go asking for a beta, they even have a board/thread dedicated to it. But now--once again--to read!! . . . .and eat da cookie. XD

::rereads chapters one and two. Starts on chapter 3::

Hmm . . . swiftly in comparison to the other questions? Or swiftly because now they had worked out the appropriate formulas? Granted you did say last time that their teacher had been particularly cruel in her assignment . . . ::Reads::

Poor Zexy, I�m guessing he doesn�t have any kind of video game systems on hand for when Axel and Marluxia visit him . . . if they visit his home . . . ::Everything clicks in head:: Oh. Awww . . . poor Zexion . . . . ::reads on::

XD Yay Dem! Trying to make Zex laugh and feel better. ::Read-le::

::Giggles:: Demy likes shiny things. XD ::Read-read::

Dun-dun-DUUUUUUUUnnnnnn . . . . because everyone�s thinking it. ::Teh readzors::

XXXXXXXXXXXXXDDDDDDDDD Demyx the movie fanatic!!!! And he�s advancing on Zexy like a lynx on a snow-hare!!!!!!!!!!!! Oh, that�s just rich . . . ::Reads more::

::Laughing hysterically:: Unified . . . . worse choice. . . . ::Slips back into incoherent laughter as she continues to read::

Oo? Demy swears? . . . I thought he was too bouncy to swear . . . meh ::shrug:: whatever. ::To the reading!::

O.O;;; I feel Zex�s pain . . . . ::Reads the more::

Oh boy, sneaky ninja move to get the DVD into the player w/o the other guy knowing what it is . . . now I really feel sorry for Zexion . . . ::Reads::

OMG . . . . nooooooooooo ::Covers eyes:: that�s exactly how I am!!! ::Rocks back and forth:: Aaaaa . . . I almost don�t want to read anymore �cause then I�d have to read more about the movie . . . . aaaa . . . but I like this fic too much and I want to read it . . . . aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa . . . . . . .. . . . . . . . . . . . . As long as it isn�t something like �Bug�, �28 Days/Weeks Later�, or any of the newer Zombie Movie remakes I should be okay . . . .::peeks between fingers to continue reading::

Ah . . . it looked like it was really going to happen! . . . But then this would have been waaaaaayy too short a fic. So good save! ::Thumbs up:: And I like Zexy�s mental review. XD ::Goes back to reading::

::Sings:: They�re Pinky, they�re Pinky and the Brain, Brain, Brain, Brain, Brain! Dum dee dum dum dum! ::Stops singing:: So Dem�s been under a rock? Or out of the country? Or moving around constantly? Hmmm . . . . he�s a movie fan, but doesn�t know about cartoons . . . ::Ponders more. Reads while pondering::

::Giggles:: Mirror over bed . . . ::Reads on::

XD He�s so trapped. Everything is working completely against him, and in favor of his �problem� . . . and the starring, oh ye gods the starring! It begins . . . . .

Yay! Sooner is appreciated, as is the hint of lemon! . . . Though knowing Zexion�s self-control, that probably won�t happen . . . doesn�t mean that he can�t dry-hump Demy in his sleep, or vice-versa.

Ah, I�ve got to say I love the characterizations for Zexion and Demyx in this. They�re both very clear, and I find myself relating to the pair of them--granted I�m relating a bit more to Zex than Dem, but that�s only because we haven �seen� much of Dem�s life--daily or otherwise. Still this is both very cute and interesting, and I find myself enjoying it immensely.

I wish you luck in keeping up the good work.
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From VampireMooglez on April 30, 2007
Well, this is one of the most interesting KH stories that I've read so far (and I've read a lot). I have to admit that I almost died when I ran out of chapters to read. I absolutely adore the pairing. They are so cute together!! And I'm happy that you're able to keep them both in character (I normally stray from that, haha). I've bookmarked the story so I'll be able to quickly check for more.

Hope you update soon.
Cute but Psycho.
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From hontokawaiinekochan on April 26, 2007
Cute story ^^ I hope you will update it soon
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