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From alternativesoldier on April 16, 2008
This is one of my favorite stories. ^_^ It's hilarious and fun. I'm really looking forward to the final chapter is past chapters are any indicator.
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From LoveDark on April 05, 2008
another magnificent chapter added and even though it seems you didn't plan it the wait was a good supense builder but all the same I can't wait for the chapter ;)
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From Kuromei on April 03, 2008
Hooray for fluff! XD Now I can't wait for the smexy smutiness. X3

And I loved the outtakes. rofl XD
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From Sione on April 02, 2008
Yeah, what are you going to do instead, Jak? XD I think Dax is going to enjoy the answer to that question, lol.

*Eagerly awaits the next chapter*

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From BlackShadowChild on April 02, 2008
Great chapter, PLEASE I'M BEGGING YOU UPDATE SOON!!!
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From yeahjesse on April 01, 2008
ROOOOOOOBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBIIIIIIIIIINNNNNNNNNNN!

The end is making me crazy. Way to set it up so perfectly. :) Ah, I'm so excited. I can barely contain myself.

Anyway. You know my thoughts on this chapter (from the FFnet review), but I wanted to say... Maybe I'm being too hard on myself and this is some sort of adorable cutesy reaction, but I've been reading Hana-Kimi lately, and, and, and... ALL Of YOUR OTHER REVIEWERS MAKE ME FEEL LIKE I'M NOT A GOOD ENOUGH FAN! I need to get a band that says "Robin's #1 Fan!" and wrap it around my forhead until everyone I know officially deems me insane. *pouts* I need to be more constructive and help you more! I'm like "*nod* *nod* this is so great, yessss torture Jak more *evil glint* MUAHAHAHAHA!"

But. For real now. If you could see my sideways perverted grin, I know you'd laugh. Sandover is the perfect setting for this, really. It's so wonderful because it's one of the only places that's simply theirs. It'd easy to write the other characters out of the room, if you know what I mean, but this gives it such a personal and wonderful touch. Like their version of a 5 star hotel. Hrm... I'm starting to get the "oh noes! My boys might not get such a nice place to play around in! NOOO!" feeling. I'm sure I'll work something out, though.

And if you still think you aren't brave, just re-read "Hush" or PD, or that scene in the shower in this fic (as I do so often, ho ho ho ho!). You may not BE the yaoi guru, but your innocent nature ends up helping this story a lot. It's sortof like how amateur porn can be way more realistic and satisfying than anything else (not that I want my little Wobin to ever figure something like that out for herself!). I wonder if Samos or Keira would try to move back to Sandover. I bet Samos would like the idea, anyway. Best not to tell those guys right away, or they'll ruin the mood! Although they could spend many a night telling all of the townsfolk embarrassing stories about Jak and Daxters' time in Haven. *gets ideas*

Oh, and the handprint outtake is wonderfully funny. Sadly, I know the pain of sunburn too well to actually wish that upon the poor redhead right before their first night of luuuuuuurv. Good luck with the next chapter, and it's great that you inspired people to join just to give you reviews. You've certainly inspired me to do so much. *huggles*
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From Ainu on March 06, 2008
Another great chapter, you'd think after all this time you might have lost your touch (humor wise) but this was the best one yet! I love it! Good job with the suspense on Jak's gift, even I want to know what it is!
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From YaoiNinjaBoy on February 23, 2008
I love this fic so much, but I'm wondering when you'll add a new chapter, I REALLY wanna see what Daxter's surprise for Jak is x.x
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From SerialKira on February 02, 2008
The relations between Jak and Dax in this story are so deliciously convoluted! It's a wonder Tess hasn't just barged in there and kicked both of them in the butt. XD I absolutely love your take on Jak. A lot of people make him out to be kind of mean but I don't necessarily see him that way in the game. In fact, he seems more the way you portray him.. kind of socially retarded. :O I also really love Dax's single mindedness towards the whole thing. XD To him it's all cut and dry.. poor thing.. but it's very in-character for him. Overall it's been fun to watch your writing evolve throughout this piece too. It seems like you got braver? :D

In any case, I absolutely love this story and am addicted to it like some crazy drug! I really hope you update soon!
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From MasterJak on January 21, 2008
First off, babe, I want you to know that I registered an account solely to review your story. Thanks for making me do it. :)
Second, I am in love with Talk to Me. That's saying more than it should. I'm a quirky type who tends to love the "let's get it on because relationships are kinda fmeh sometimes" stories. But your story has captivated me to an incredibly ravenous point. I have never, in all my years of slash-fiction fandom, wanted to read the next chapter more than I do now. Or have, rather, while reading the whole story. (After chapter one, I was all "DUDE, I WANT THE NEXT ONE! Oh, wait, there it is...") I adore how you've managed to make such a lengthy plot with all the characters involved in some way, taken things to a completely different side than you lead on (Razer and Rayne? Who'd've thought?), create the most perfect circumstances for outlandish behaviour, and yet you manage to continue to frustrate me in a way I love, a la "WHY DON'T THEY DO IT?!" I'm quite enjoying being tugged along as a reader and reveling in your take on my favorite characters in all video gaming.
I find myself especially charmed by your little outtakes. Inspiration has even occured to me in the art department as far as possibly drawing the little shoulder versions of Light and Dark. The one strangling the other, regardless of motive, is hilarious to me. (And Torn and Ashelin, however canon the pairing, has never been better written than in your fic.)
In short, I am head-over-heels for Talk to Me and remain your faithful reader til the end. Been here, anonymously, since the beginning, but I HAD to let you know how much I've loved the whole experience.
(Particularly those times I had to stifle my own creepy laughter with others around who were completely unaware that Jak had just ungracefully burst into the room yelling like a madman for *thank goodness* no reason. I'm telling you now that yours is the only fic to elicit an "Oh, no he di'in'!" out of me in public, much to my chagrin.)
Creepy Fan/Stalker Love, MJ.
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From wanderingaddict on January 17, 2008
Sorry for spamming you reviews like this, but I'd like to politely retract a lot of what I said in the otehr two. I wrote them right after reading through Chapter Ten, but now, after reading the story again and reflecting some, I don't think they really say what I feel.

First off, I love the entire world you've built around Jak and Daxter here. I love the Dax the ottsel, and I love Dax the elf. I love the syntax, the way they speak to each other, and I love the way you manage to capture a written accent for Razer. I like how believebly Jak seems to run from everything sexual with Daxter, and I like how easily Dax can push his buttons. This is something that can be read over and over again, each time finding something new, something deeper, and I think that makes this utterly enthralling. Jak's constant angst and fallbacks, leaving Daxter to figure out everything all by himself, is totally enthralling and creates this intense desire for more. I like how you push cliches, and that blowjob scene in the shower? One of the hottest things I've ever read. It's so erotic, but at the time, reading about how Jak looks down to see Daxter coughing pitifully and looking up at him for approval? Wow. I mean, wow. That's freaking powerful. Personally, if I were Jak, I would have burst into tears and melted, or at the very least swore to myself never to deny Daxter anything he ever asked for again, haha. You have a knack for building scenes that totally drive the story, and even when it seems like the constant "run from anything hardcore and hide" mentality that both guys is gonna get old, it doesn't. It's still fun, still exciting.

That said, in my first post I said it doesn't seem like there's enough sex stuff. I don't mean just sex, I'm talking about Jak you know, sneaking peaks at Daxter or something. I mean, I know he's a good guy and all, it just seems like finally getting permission to actually look at his friend's, well, fun bits, is going to be a little more important, and, well special. Daxter, I can understand why he never looked before, but... well, I was just saying that it's something I wondered about as I read. Something I jsut can't relate to that well I guess. But that's minor, and it really doesn't have any sort of impact on the story or anything. The major point I was trying to get at though, even more so now that I went and reread it a few times, is that I don't understand Daxter's decision to not go to bed with Jak. I mean, if it went something where they went and blew each other's brains out, but Jak noticed Dax was distracted and wouldn't stay to cuddle after (since Dax wants to get to work), that's so much more relatable and believable, rather than Daxter jsut being like "I don't really understand how or why, but I gotta go do this now. right now. can't even wait ten minutes." Like I said before, I'm jsut cruisin' along the rest of the story, which flows so very well and is quick and even, and then there's this huge, jarring plothole. I love the fallout of it, I love, *love* Jak's angst and sadness, I love that Daxter is so excited for their next step and Jak thinks that they have to break up. It 'causes tension, fun, sexy tension that's fun to read. It's jsut that, at that one point specifically, I have a moment where I'm thrown back, and since Daxter doesn't understand why, I don't understand why, and it doesn't seem quite so real anymore. Instead, it changes teh story from this enthralling read to "oh, the author jsut put that there to get some more angst in."

Other than that though, this story is *good*. It's a fun, loveley read, and I hope you keep writing more chapters. I'd never write this long a review if I didn't think you had a heckuva lotta talent, and I do want to see more of it. This is only meant as constructive criticism and I don't mean to offend you or anything, jsut give ya some stuff to think about.
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From wanderingaddict on January 16, 2008
Just to clarify, I wanna say that if my only problem was "Aww, there's not enough sex," I think you must be doing something right. I mean, I get all that you trying to do there (Dax changing because he really wanted to prove his love and all) it's just... not that smooth. Anyways, it's really good, I enjoy every bit of it.
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From wanderingaddict on January 16, 2008
wow, this is such a fun and enthralling story! I don't really know what to say, except that I love, love, love Daxter's constant shifts from ottsel to human and back again (that's really a nice touch) and how adorably cute Jak is. Heh, I also like the way you poke fun at "the bigger guy is always on top" which is kinda funny and, while I do dislike that cliche, I also really, really want to see Jak plow Daxter first, which kinda brings me to the only flaw I see in the story. While I love the constant push and pull and teasing touches and the way Jak always retreats, I do have to say that... when reading this (and maybe it's just in part 'cause I'm a guy with a high libido), what throws me off the most (especially after this last chapter) is that I stop and ask myself "wow, they were about to have sex. they're two teenage boys, and they were about to rub each otehr off, which takes all of five minutes when you get as horny as that. would you really put a lid on >at most< a half-hour blowjob to go talk/chat/work on an unknown surprise?" I mean, I dunno, as the reader, I was really into Jak coming back all hot and heavy and dominating, but then to have Daxter just be like "oh right, even though this is so cool and I'm all hot and bothered right now, and really turned on, I have to go do something else that can't wait ten/fifteen/forty-five minutes." Sorta like, you held out a handful of chocolate and said "come and get it!" and then the moment I was in range you slapped across the face with a fish. It jsut seems to me that no boy in his right mind would turn down an offer to fondle/oggle his naked boyfriend (which seems to happen a lot in the story- I understand Jak with his shyness and morals, but Dax?).

Or maybe I'm just over-sexed and horny and don't know what I'm talking about. This story is really good, and I hope you take my comments for the constructive critcism they're meant to me, I really do want to read more!
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From dac720 on January 14, 2008
I loved the last two chapters (9&10), not only did we get a super hot shower scene but massive emotional ups and downs for Jak. Will Dax be able to show Jak his present of love, or will Jak jump the gun resulting in more angstful over thinking. I can hardly wait for the next update!

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From Sione on January 11, 2008
Ooo Jak is being all protective, it's so cute! But what wild imagination he has.

Still no sex for the poor boys but I agree that it can wait. It's more realistic that way. I really think they need to talk more, those two has some serious communication problems. Now I'm really curious about what Daxter has done.

Btw I'll be sending the first part of my story to you very soon. It's pretty lame compared to yours, oh well I did my best. I should have had it done earlier but I guess the holidays got in the way.

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