Reviews for Bye Bye Kairi; Hello Roxas!By : Zet |
Something that you've said repeatedly in your story concerns me. You have Roxas continually referring to Sora as his "prize" - and his means of obtaining him is through sex.
Given what else you've said, I assume that you think this is a romantic notion. It bothers me, however, because sex does not equate love. Not even when it's between two people who do have a mutual regard for one another.
Leaving that aside, you have a wonderful springboard here for a rather deranged tale of narcissism. The way that you have Roxas within Sora in both the beginning and end of the story lends itself to some interesting possibilities.
Happy writing to you!
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