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Reviews for Taking What's Mine...

By : EclipseCannon
  • From ANON - Anon on December 28, 2009
    This story is horrible.

    First of all, Luke is more than a little OOC. He's a selfish brat, but he is not a rapist. He would never pin Tear down, and he would never speak so cruelly.

    Second of all, people do not like rape midway through. That's just not how it works. If someone is getting raped, they just don't decide halfway through that it's not all that bad.

    Thirdly, your write porn really badly. Thrust thrust kiss scream done. It was like reading a sexual version of a newspaper article, totally dry and matter-of-fact.

    And fourthdly, I don't like Asch/Luke, but dedicating a little whiny rant to it? That's ridiculous.
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  • From Koto on August 18, 2007
    Okay, while I don't support LukeXAsch I do have to say...Having sex with a clone of yourself is not like incest. It's more like masturbation. Really, really good, hot, sweaty, buttsecksy masturbation that involves two people...But still, masturbation.

    -TehKoto
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  • From ANON - blah on August 13, 2007
    i have no interest in reading a rape story by someone who bashes other people's works in ugly caps...trust me, no one will stop anything when you approach it as blindly and as stupidly as that.
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  • From LilacPhoenix on July 08, 2007
    I understand how you feel about delusional & horny yaoi fan girls, because I too don't support or like that junk, but they have rights just like you so respect them and don't bash them. You can say what you want in your stories, live journals, website, etc but never go over to them and flame. Trust me, you wouldn't want to sink to their level (and I am talking about the ones who like to bash or spit on the female who happens to threaten their canon sue couple in any way *cough* Kairi and Naminé haters from the KH fandom *cough*)

    Luke x Asch is no better than the Sora x Roxas lovers >_>

    Rape fics aren't my cup of tea just like pedo stories but I'll put up with this because its hetero unless there are too many mistakes in here for my liking.

    In the first paragraph, you spelled maybe and thought wrong. ^^0 Ok... I stop reading after Luke said he was taking what is his because the OOCness and mistakes in here was intolerable for me. I'm not saying your story sucks nor you're a bad author but I think you should seek a good proof & beta-reader to have your stories come out better in the future OR use something like Microsoft Office Word 2003 to catch your mistakes.

    I have my own request on a couple I would like to see a lemon on but I'll do it myself when I get ready.
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  • From Scramasax on May 19, 2007
    I agree! All the fics under here are all Yaoi/Yuri with the exception of one fic (My Anise/Ion fic to be exact)

    This is nicely written, and playing to their actual characters too!

    Now that I've reviewed your het fic, why don't you review mine, hmm? :P
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  • From NobodysHeartless on April 19, 2007
    -squeal- Thank you for replying to my challenge! ^^ It's written really well, desptie the Luke-OOCness but you did mention that happening so, it's a good fic.

    :3 Thanks again and hope to see more from you! ^_^
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