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Reviews for Calm My Storm

By : VampireMooglez
  • From ANON - Riku on May 13, 2007
    *drops jaw* OMG......I think I just died.....gah my brain! I think I'm going to have good dreams tonight, thanks lol, it was hot...good job ^^
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  • From ANON - stupefiedNarutard on May 11, 2007
    'OMG. Yummy!'

    ...


    just kidding, I won't leave it there.

    Okay, what to say, what to saaaaay... YOSH! LEONSORA!!! (One of my fav pairings for KH) I haven't read any of your others 'mansex' scenes, so I wouldn't know if you are getting better or not, but it was pretty good if you asked me. Maybe if you had drawn it out a little more, made Sora a bit more IC than he was it would've been completely satisfying. It was good, no doubt, but you can improve like that. I found that I like it when I see that the uke is expressing how good it is by intense moans and strangled words. Things like clutching the bed sheets, describing expressions, etc. is a big turn-on for most fangirls. (you prolly know that though) So, yeah, although mansex is kind of uncomfortable to type, it's better if you make it longer and detailed in a way that will catch the attention of the reader. When you get into it though, make sure you don't make paragraphs too long. When I read smut or mansex, I like it when they have short paragraphs, but a lond sex scene. Woohoo, yummy, yummy.
    Although it was for purpose of the story, I didn't like Sora's characterization too much. It just... kinda threw me off. I always see Sora as the "^_____^ person"... I bet that doesn't make sense, but, yeah, he's the one that is always smiling or determined and seeing him like this just irks me. Maybe if he wasn't drinking and was more distressed than anything. Like, instead of passing out from drunkenness, you could've made him pass out from fatigue from fighting and Donald and Goofy just happened to be somewhere else at the time.
    Don't get me wrong, I totally loved this--it was worth my time! LeonSora smut is always the best, especially with mixed in fluff. Sora's commanding threw me for a loop, but it was nice to see him take what he wanted. Yeah, Leon did get shorthanded on the whole sex thing, but at least he got to screw Sora riiiiight? I mean, he didn't totally go without pleasure! ^^ He had hot, steamy, mansex with Sora... one of the ultimate ukes! Damn him! If I wasn't a girl... then I'd be a man. Not just any man, Sora's seme!!! BWAHAHAHHAH!
    Anyways, I hope I helped you a little compared to the, 'OMG. Yummy''s you continuously receive (I hate that too, nice of them to comment, but at least say SOMETHING else, riiiight?) Leon was damn sexy in this too and the last part choked me up a bit. I was like... awwwww, he's coming back to Leeeoooon!!!

    Thanks for a wonderful smut-fluff-yay story, hope to see another LeonSora from you again!

    lovelovelovelovelove,
    stupefiednarutard

    e-mail: shitake_shroomz@yahoo.com (if you ever wanna tell me about any other stories you write, please contact me at this address, okay?)
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  • From on May 11, 2007
    Don't worry. That doesn't remotely (okay to me) qualify as Riku and/or Kairi bashing. Overall however, the story was wonderful. It's a shame it's a one shot because I would have loved to seen this fanned out. I always love SLASH pairs but the actually story still takes place in the KH universe. That's becoming more and more rare now.

    But alas, keep up the great writing!
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