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Reviews for Wild and Crazy

By : SaraJaye
  • From ANON - Anon on July 19, 2007
    Short and sweet. only complaint is the occasional lack of common tense in the same sentence (jumps from past to present for eg).
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  • From SaraJaye on July 16, 2007
    ...Hmm, maybe "it wouldn't be their kind of sex if it wasn't" might've sufficed.
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  • From WotanAnubis on July 16, 2007
    Pretty short, but functional enough. Not that I'm one to talk - I know all about the horrors of trying make a sex scene last longer. ;)

    Anyways, the only thing that really bothered me was the 'it wouldn't be Hector-and-Farina sex if it was anything but that' bit. It kind of draws you away from the action and rubs it into your face that you're reading a story. A rephrasing of that part might help. Something like... I dunno... 'as it always was' or 'which was exactly how they liked it'.
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