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From ANON - Oriya-Chan on September 03, 2008
This story..... freaks me out to no end. I love it. The way you made Dante and Seth's relationship makes me think of some pretty weird things. I can't help but to notice a parallel between Seth and the Animal and Dante and Vergil. Seth is more relaxed while the Animal is vicious and angry. True, Dante sometimes does come off brash and cold. Most of the things you see in the games and the Anime is that he is more laid back. Vergil on the other hand.... him and the Anime defiantly act a lot a like. Kill being the main word in their vocabulary.-grins-

Truth be told I wanted to stop reading when I saw 'Seth' because I can't stand mary-sues. I am still having second thoughts about this one, though in the more recent chapters it has me hooked. I want to see Seth die. Dante and his heartbreak? I saw that one a mile a way. I am sure you didn't mean for Seth to be a hate able character, but, I hate him. I really want to see Dante pull that sword from Seth's body and watch him die. -Shrugs- If this depresses you? I am sorry, that's just the way I am.

Good writing though. I am going to stick to this story. It has me hanging on. Thanks for giving me something steamy to read on these cold nights. -wink-

Oriya-Chan
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From ANON - Yuka on September 02, 2008
Oh wow this such a good story. I've 'read' many fanfictions here but this is one of the only two fics that made me read the whole thing rather than just skimming it. I hate OCs but this story is an exception, Seth is a really good character and I just think he's great.

Werewolves are the only furry that I like (I just love wolves =P) and i'm glad you made one with Dante, that was hot @.@;
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From Duvainna on July 23, 2008
OK, if I ever had questions regarding Dante's sanity, they're all gone now. He's completely bats :P I can only imagine his demonic healing is too fast for his own well-being. He has no sense of self-preservation left whatsoever. He's on the best road to lose himself and destroy what he still cares about. -.- The Animal must be laughing its ass off.
I was pretty shocked after ch. 19. Dante has so little humanity left in him, it's frightening. O.o Your approach is much darker than I believed. Funnily enough, my first thoughts were that if you ever wrote a story about Sparda, you would totally make him a ravenous psychopath that had to be assassinated for everyone's sake. :P

I love mystery stories. ^^ It's great you focus on that aspect too. Every other fanfic I've seen with such elements usually included an intro to the intrigue but everything was sorted via brutal crashing in the end. >.> It feels really good to finally see Dante doing investigating stuff, not simply exterminating things. :P I hate it when he's all brawns and no brains.

Anyway, I can't wait to see how Dante and Seth's relationship will develop. Dante seems to assume a very intriguing role, I wonder if it's natural to his character or not...
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From Duvainna on May 10, 2008
Ack! He's such a prick! I can't believe he did it to Damsel >.< Every time I start to pity him a little bit you just have to remind me what an asshole he is ;P I like it how you stressed his inhuman attitude; I can totally how he put all these layers to protect himself and forgot how to deal with emotional things properly. It's frustrating, really, how he refuses to admit his feelings. His blockheaded-ness may cause even more problems...
I have to say I didn't expect Dante to accept what happened in ch. 13 that easily. He really is loose in that field. O.o

Poor kitties. *sobs*

Loved Seth bits in chapters 14-16 (except for kitties scene... I'm traumatized now LOL). Unfortunately my brain is too fried to try to figure out his past and his connections to the Animal and that Lance guy. Somehow it feels like jigsaw puzzle with too many elements. Very intriguing ^^
Am I seeing things, or is Dante already pretty involved in this case?
Either way, Seth now looks more firm than ever; I mean, as a character without unnatural dissonances. I used to be baffled by his 'soft' side, but now it starts to make sense to me... I think.

At first I was kinda reluctant to see Trish, but you pulled it off without mishap. She fits well and yes, it's nice to have her there. ^^ At least Dante has more to ponder on. He might give that impassive, brittle attitude, but he still cares. I really liked his reaction to Haunted Mansion incident.

Heh, there are so many tiny details I love in this fic, but meh, there's no use drooling all over them here. XD

As much as I want to know what happens next, I have to admit you ended it in a pretty good moment... It looks like it marks a pivotal point for both overall plot and Dante and Seth's relationship.
Still, I can hardly wait to read more ^^
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From Duvainna on May 01, 2008
*squeals delightedly* After so many warnings, I poked around ch. 13 as if it was a spiky hedgehog. But! You somehow managed to nail most of my favorite kinks in that scene. (Well, except Tom at the end, lol.) It was gripping, engrossing and simply perfect. I just love the idea of Dante submiting to someone. BP was exceptionally tasteful - heck, the whole scene was easily one of the best I've ever read! And not only the sex was fascinating, but man, Dante's loss of control... I can almost see his shell cracking.
I love Seth in this chapter. Meh, I love everything in it. Such a treat! XD I regret I couldn't get to read it earlier; no harm done however, I'm addicted again.
Voyeurism suits Dante well.

Was it DT sex you mentioned earlier? I hope that was it (loved it! ... I'm repeating myself), the image of having sex with fully formed giant bug is hideous x_o I hate all insects with passion, but I kinda like Dante's bug DT. There's something intriguing in such a handsome man transforming into monstrous cockroach, haha.

As for Tom, he's a surprisingly nice fellow. XD He sounds like a typical gothic kid with little brains, but you somehow managed to make him a real person, not paper character. Now that I think of it, I even have Tom the goth in my family, LOL. He wears all black, studded belts and heavy boots, easily pushes 6.3 ft and is certainly the most scary person related to me. XDD Almost polar opposite of your Tom. The first thing I thought of when I read that name though was 'Bobby the emo' featured in parody video on Youtube. XD

(Btw, white eyes. It's fascinating, this concept. ^__^)
*purrs* I couldn't contain myself and just had to drop a line or two. I'm off to further chapters.
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From Valiant on April 07, 2008
Aww poor Seth! At least Dante is going to save him...right?

I wish I had a banana guitar.
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From Valiant on April 03, 2008
ABOUT DAMN TIME!!! I've been waiting for this chapter like a Buddhist monk waiting for enlightenment.
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From ANON - kellie on February 23, 2008
I think this story is great. why haven't you updated it. I mean really, I love it. I really wish you would finish it.
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From Duvainna on February 03, 2008
Er. o_o
*hides in shame* I've never been so late. x_x

Regular demon huh? ;D Absolutely no pointing in your direction, just random note: why Dante has to get stabbed, cut, ran through etc. in most of his encounters with demons? If he hadn't got his extra healing, he'd be one crappy hunter. ;P I can buy it as showing off when he was younger, but there's no excuse for a sane adult.
I also like to think it hurts him when he receives damage, and despise authors who make Lady shoot him just for fun. >.> (Or anyone shooting him just because 'he's gonna heal anyway' >..>
I miss you ._.
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From LainGaara on January 15, 2008
Radius: "Ah, Seth. I don't know what to say about him without giving the game away. But let's just say he's going to be rather interesting later on, toward the midpoint of the story. There's a major theme in here underlining this story that I haven't mentioned. It's the backbone of the story, in fact. Still, I'm leaving it to you and the rest to read between the lines and figure it out."

I'm confused, who is Seth? and what does SMTN mean? Sorry, I don't know who Seth is and that he was in the game, is he from the DMC4? If not and he's in the earlier games, then boy, it's been awhile and I forgot the characters and plot. LOL >.< Which makes me hate myself, cause now I find myself not a true DMC fan. -__-; And uhm, I'm not sure who the couples will be in the story, I'm guessing Seth, probably wrong, but could you tell me who is coupling with who now; I know it says that there will be M/M and M/F but wasn't specific.... such a teaser! X3 Sorry, just a confused reader, not sure what's going on, but I shall read on to the other chapters. >.< Just not sure if this story is suppose to be basing off the game or not >.> From what people's comments are I don't know now. XD;
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From Valiant on December 03, 2007
Wow Seth knew a little too much about werewolves. I wonder what's wrong with him. I hope he isn't taking that goth kid into the fun house to kill him or whatever. And those Dobermans...Seth had a little too much control over them. I think he might be a descendant of Helene. He even mentions how his father went on and on about it being an honour and what not. I can't wait for the hot man loving that's coming up! w00t!! I never say that, lol! What have you done to me! Also I'm glad you like my fic Love Planet. The next chapter is coming up in a bit so stay tuned! ^_^

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From Duvainna on October 25, 2007
Wow, that was one hell of a chapter o.o

Dante felt attracted to only one of his partners. XD Always a jerk, huh? XD
Ha, I hope he won't do anything stupid. Fortunately, he seems to be too deep into relationship...

Not really surprised Seth vanished. It's full moon after all. ^^ And you just confirmed he's got one of his furry days. ^^ However, it would be a great shock if he didn't return... Seth seems too kind to be a serial killer, but one never knows.
I don't expect Dante to get a brainwave soon, he has too little data. No creepy factories, no videogames, just the moon and the funny fact that most of the evil stuff happens in Seth's district. ^^ It will be so much fun to watch him struggle to process all these.
By the way, what about his vacations? He doesn't stick to his word does he XD And how can he care about dry-cleaning when he already has a huge hole in the fabric right over his belly? XD

The fight scene could be more dynamic. I think the descriptions were too complex and too detailed. Also, the last part of the chapter was too long to have great impact. After three paraghraphs reader already knows something wrong is going to happen, so the following massacre is not a shock. I wonder though what attacked these guys... Claws on pavement don't exactly make clicking noise. Huh. O.o The plot's getting thicker ^^

Damsel is the only female character so far. Females are very important as they are more observant when it comes to psychological affairs ^^ Dante may muse about Seth's anxieties, but he's more likely to get irritated than to try to help the poor guy. Or rather he could not identify the problem at all, given his limited interactions with humans. Anyway, Damsel sounds very mature here. Not quite the crazy attention seeker ;)
Her mother is scary though. I can't help but wonder whether her madness may be tied with the main plot or is just a nice addition...

Some action is always nice. Developing characters can be interesting as hell, but after 100 pages - yawn XD
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From ANON - wanderingaddict on October 23, 2007
Oh, and I forgot to ask, are there more "others" out there? You know, ones like Lady and Trish, or are there "powerful" humans out there (ones like Lady's mother Magda, or w/e the hell her name was)? What kind of role do they play? Seth doesn't seemed that perturbed by the fact that Dante's an other, do they often meet others on the streets in this city? Heh, it's something that I've been wondering about for a while now.
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From ANON - wanderingaddict on October 23, 2007
Haha, I think I've got it all figured out, but I don't want to say anything and discourage you from whatever plot you've chose. I do have two requests though.

First request: At the end of the story, Seth cannot be dead. I don't care if Dante has to go to Hell and drag the guy back, but I think I like him too much to appreciate a death ending. I mean, I know there are times when death/lovers breaking up/other sad endings are the only real way to end a story, and it can be good still. In this case though, I think I'd just frown at my monitor and ignore that ending in favor of whatever I made up in my mind, because I think I've grown too attached to Seth/Dante (heh, this also has made it *really* tough to read any other DMC fics because I keep looking around, hoping to find Seth somewhere).

Second request (not as important as the first but something I'd still like to see): Dante fuck Seth in Devil Mode >:P
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From Valiant on October 18, 2007
Let's get this straight. I don't like yaoi. I especially do not like yaoi involving Dante and Devil May Cry.

I fucking love this story. I love Seth, I love the Paranormal 5, and I love Dante being so open the way he is. He's bi. So what? It made me not care that he was having hot man sex with Seth. Seth is so awesome. I want to hug him and sing Duran Duran songs with him all night. I just hope he doesn't have anything with the demons that are attacking the city. It seems as if when he showed up...that's when the attacks started.

This story is a yaoi...but it's not. I can't get over how hot this fic is.It is so compelling and it definetly grabs onto you and forces you to want to see what happens next. If I could favorite you...I would. But since I can't all I can do is seriously recommend your fic to anyone with an open mind. You definetly changed my mind on yaoi.

I can't wait for the next chapter! Yay!

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