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By : Sione

From Ringmaster on May 13, 2008
Loved this chapter, wish it was longer but I can wait till the next one. Please let that be soon though!
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From ANON - AlphaOmegaPsi on May 10, 2008
Awesome chapter! I understand what you mean by taking it slow with the sex to make it more realistic. In a story like this, putting everything up front will just ruin it. Gotta draw things out. I am looking forward to every chapter of this story, smutty or not.
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From sillyneko345 on May 09, 2008
I completely, totally, and truly forgot about green eco. *slaps self in the head* Well DUH, Robin. I'm glad Jak was able to use it to get Daxter healed so quickly. Poor little guy went through a lot last chapter. He deserved the boon of discovering how to control his form changes. I'm so glad he mastered that skill! Orange Lightning is fuzzy luv incarnate, but it would be sad if he couldn't also resume his humanity when he wants to. Especially after, as you said, "getting a taste" of it again. Taking it away again after taunting him with it for such a short time would just be cruelty to cuties. And I know you aren't that kind of author, are you, dear...? ;)

But uh-oh... now the romantic tension starts! I can totally sypathize with Jak, wanting Dax to remain ottsel at least part of the time and help him to control the temptation. Keeping your hands to yourself 24-7 would not be easy! Then again, I can also sympathize with Dax, beginning to feel that he'd like more than the casual patting and petting. He'll just have to be a bit bolder and seek it out, now, won't he? >:3 And I wonder what Tess will say when she figures it out... The anticipation!

Oooh, the next chapters are going to be sooo good! I look forward to them immensely! Great job, keep it up
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From yeahjesse on May 09, 2008
Waaaah Jak, give him more than just a pat on the head. Go for it!! It's going to be so adorable!

This chapter is very good. It's awesome that he can transform by thinking of it. Daxter's POV was scary at first, because it almost seemed like he was about to say he didn't want the Jak attention because he wasn't gay. ;_; That would be impossible. Never gonna happen. Nope. Na-uh!

I wuv you! Good job. You also update way more than I do. O.O Very nice.
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From ANON - Anon on April 20, 2008
Let's see some Lovin'!!!
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From yeahjesse on April 10, 2008
Ah... Okay, I will start from the top. I like how you started with Daxter missing things about being an ottsel. The ones about holding his liquor and how it was nice to never sweat were very cute and surreal. The ones about being unable to accompany Jak on missions or even hide himself in some boxes were a little more sad... Poor Dax. I'm so worried for him! I wonder how Tess reacted to those situations if they ever came up and she was alone... I guess she does have a bit of a thing for guns, so she could always deal with people if she *really* had to.

And although this is a little bit like angst, it's a different sort from what we're used to, and I kinda like it. I like the survival intuition transformation, too. It's kindof interesting to see him keeping himself from talking when he's so used to it. That part also made me realize that they probably would have had NO chance of recognizing him as Jak's partner in his new human form, but that it would still be bad because they're Krimzon guards and that's how they are.

And I love the little bits of cuteness among the tension. When I read "He knew Tess was just as excited over shopping as he was," I thought, "man, for many women, Dax would be a great boyfriend." Or maybe I'm just echoing my own thoughts. *Sej REALLY needs to stop imagining her boyfriend with blue eyes and red hair*

Okay! This was very emotional. I really love it! I'm dying for updates now more than ever! Bah, first I had imagined funny cute things like Dax following Jak around in human form on missions, but changing his hairstyle and color and clothes and accent every other day (lol). Then I started wondering more obvious things like "is this the last transformation?" and "will he ever be able to control when and where he can change forms?" I'm really really really looking forward to anything you write in the future. *snuggle* Sorry for waiting this long to read and review! I've been gaming too hard a bit lately (RPGs...).
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From sillyneko345 on April 06, 2008
I'll admit I was getting really, really worried when the KG busted in! I'm so glad Dax was lucky enough to transform and get off the hook, even if he did get hurt. Poor little guy... Hopefully he'll be able to become human again somehow? Well, at least he is small enough to be held and taken care of by Tess and Jak until then! Hurt ottsels need double the lovin' to heal correctly, you see :3

Very nice chapter!
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From ANON - AlphaOmegaPsi on April 06, 2008
He'll be able to change back, right? All he has to do is wish he was human and presto he'll be back. Right? Right?! I hope so. I'm not a fan of beastiality and I wanna see some Jak and Daxter action, I won't lie.
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From purpleismagic on March 27, 2008
This is such a CUTE story!
I wonder, does Daxter miss his ottsel self because he gets to go with Jak on missions?
And it's hysterical how no one is making a huge deal about Dax being human. It's like they know he just wants the attention.
PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Much Love
Dee
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From ANON - AlphaOmegaPsi on March 08, 2008
Aw, this is adorable so far. Great writing as well, very realistic. I eagerly await your next chapter and will frequently be checking in for it.
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From sillyneko345 on March 06, 2008
I just love this chapter :3 It's so cute! Poor Dax is getting no love or congrats whatsoever on finally getting back to normal until... wait for it... here comes Tess with the flying leap o' luv! XD Jak should be SO jealous over that. But then again, he did get to carry Dax some there at the end. That should balance out. And as for the end, it was beyond sweet. I loved Dax all unknowingly doing what he's done for years and snuggling up with his partner in crime. Sooooo so so so cute!!!

Keep it up, you're on a roll with the quick updates!
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From yeahjesse on February 26, 2008
Wahh!! It's adorable. I loved the way Jak stared at Daxter while he was sleeping! And the fact that Daxter got rid of an erection by imagining Torn in a g-string. Not the mention the fact that both of them were aroused to begin with. O.O I want to know what happens! I'm glad that you update as often as you do.

I wonder what kinds of clothes you'll have him pick. I hate to admit it, but the thought of Jak going on missions without Daxter drives me crazy. Of course, the thought of Daxter being in harm's way ALSO drives me crazy, so I just wish they could find some other way of making money for themselves... I suppose that depending on the timeline, there is always something. Dax has the Naughty Ottsel, after all, and he could always open a body shop next dooooooor (I'm getting ideas from writing this, lol).

Imagine Jak returning from a mission where he was preoccupied thinking about Daxter and got a wound. Then Daxter would have to tend to his wounds and they'd have another excuse to be close.

And on my last serious note, I liked the way you described Dax. Not a classic beauty, but there's something about him. I wholeheartedly agree. I'm glad you and Robin are both writing at the same time I am, because I always have three or four scenarios to think about when I'm showering or trying to fall asleep. Sej = such a hornball :O

P.S.

Your chapters aren't too short! Don't be self-conscious.
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From MasterJak on February 22, 2008
Heheh. "Cliffhanger." Sorry, my bad. Ahem, I'm lovin' your fic, dear! Truly, I am! I got a real kick out of the action scenes in the first chapter! If only I could steal your writing talent... I'm excited to see it continue! This seems a bit useless, but I love it, as if you couldn't tell. :)
~MJ
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From dac720 on February 19, 2008
I really enjoyed this chapter all the way through, from Jak�s reaction to Daxters good fortune to Dax�s observations of his hot goateed best buds chest, you really expressed the emotional mindset for them both. Keep �em coming, I can hardly stand the wait for Dax�s chance to �enjoy his body�.

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From sillyneko345 on February 18, 2008
I just love Jak's reaction! It seemed very real, somehow. Just that quick hug and admittance that he was afraid he had lost his little friend, and then he was straight back to business. Even though it's clear by the rest of his actions that Daxter and Daxter's safety is still the one and only thing he's thinking about here. There was no bubbly, gushy declaration of immediate romantic love the moment Daxter returned to normal--just an honest guy reaction. But on that note... I can't wait to see where the romance starts to filter in! I see that Dax is already starting to notice Jak's good looks just a little more than when he was two feet tall and furry.

Perhaps the most important comment I can make on this chapter... blushing Dax awkwardly pulling at the hem of Jak's tunic is absolutely adorable. I swear, I fall more and more in love with that little squirt whenever someone writes something cute like that.

Nice chapter all the way around. It'll be interesting to see what everyone else thinks of Daxter's new look! Keep it up :)
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