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Reviews for Devil May...Moan?

By : adoniskontos
  • From frostbite02 on June 22, 2008
    Awesome story I'm so happy you took on my challenge. I would have commented sooner but I haven't been on the site in a while (lack of internet) but honestly thanks for taking up the challenge I can't wait for more!
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  • From Duvainna on April 26, 2008
    Wow, I take back what I said about Dante. I just hate his DMC4 personality and yet you managed to combine his DMC1, DMC3 and DMC4 traits into one more or less solid character, coherent and logical. I've been kinda lazy in DMC section lately, but - it's fresh and impressive.
    Meh, I can stand such Dante. ^_^
    The bit about fears sounded weird at first (Dementors! XD). I like the idea though - especially Dante being able to be afraid - and how the story is progressing. ^^

    As for CBT and B-Mod, uh, I'm not really fond of B-Mod, but it's okay as long as it's not too hardcore. ^^ Glad you're taking your time and not rushing into M-rated action!
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  • From ANON - Moiranna on March 24, 2008
    Hmm... not too bad. I like your style of writing, and you're quite good at portraying both Dante and R.B. Riddick. The only thing that really irks me is the change of perspective and that you occasionally seem to shift from writing in present tense to past tense.
    Other than that I think that you've really got something, and this could turn into a really good story. Dante getting turned on by pizza humored me greatly, it strikes me as something that only Dante could be.
    A mild question, however, is whether Dante ever got to relieve himself of his problem or if it just went down? From what I have learned it's nothing that just goes 'poof gone' and that if he didn't get to jerk off would have been quite uncomfortable for quite some time; not to mention it being difficult to sleep.
    Oh well, this is just me, and I look forwards to seeing more.

    Good luck - M
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  • From ANON - Trozi on March 23, 2008
    hmm, i like where this is going... a bit jolty in terms of literary style but i see improvement as you go along.
    i love the riddick/dante combo, thats pretty cool.
    and all in all... hott
    well done
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  • From dkf on March 20, 2008
    Man, I want more now. Nicely done. I don't know Riddick but I feel like I do from the way you're writing.
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  • From SavannahMarie on March 18, 2008
    Hey! I really like this! Awesome job. I wouldn't worry too much about your keeping everyone IC, as far as I've seen, I haven't read anything that made me flinch in disbelief.
    There's some serious sexiness goin' on here!
    Looking forward to your next update.
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  • From ANON - atro on March 15, 2008
    Great work thus far! Why aren't you updating?! Do it. Seriously. Good for the health.
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  • From ValeriaHarumi on March 11, 2008
    Niiiiiiiiiice! ^__^ I hope this one gets continued.
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  • From Navitska on February 27, 2008
    Oh! More please! It's getting good!! I can't wait for more!
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  • From ANON - Windkaizer on February 24, 2008
    This story rocks my socks, and it is much better than the other Riddick/DMC crossover on this site. Please keep on writing!
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  • From chronoofdarkness on February 12, 2008
    very nice. i love how u keep them in character. i would love to see more of this.
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  • From NekoDemon on February 08, 2008
    wow. me like this. hope you update soon. i so want to find out what happens.

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  • From Duvainna on February 07, 2008
    Ha, you got rid of that prologue. To be honest, I didn't make it through the thing, that incessant rambling killed me in second sentence. LOL. But then I saw you posted first chapter and thought I'd skip the prologue... and I'm glad I did! ^_^ Your style is much nicer than the prologue suggested, grammar is OK and you have good story-pacing skills. You actually managed to draw the reader (me) into the story, and I can't say I disagree with anything in the layout so far ^_^
    The only thing that irks me is characterisation of Dante... but it's only because I generally dislike him in his younger years. He looks 22-25 here to me. Still cocky as hell but able to feel intimidated by someone and back off. I guess he's in character then ^_^
    I could totally picture him getting turned on by danger. Somehow it suits him well. He just looks like the type to get charged up by adrenaline and fear. But developing a hard-on over pizza? That was kinky! XD
    I can't say anything about Riddick and thus I won't comment on plot development. Yeah, my knowledge about Riddick is pretty... negligible (it may be summed up to 'he exists', LOL). I hope you're not offended by crazy people poking crossovers they have no idea about ^^; I just got interested when I saw this challenge and wondered what type of guy could Riddick be to top Dante... and then you got me even more intrigued by that CBT warning. I don't think I've ever seen it in DMC section. Wonder how hardcore it would get. XD
    Either way, it looks like a good read.
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