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Reviews for Knights of the Old Republic: The Sith Empire

By : klick2000
  • From ANON - JustAGuy on January 15, 2017

    Pretty decent, sexy time parts are written well. I really like the corruption bits, but I do wish some of them would last longer. But I think there's just some odd flaws here and there with the story. 

    I suppose it is just fanfiction, but its a huge retcon to go from Mission the Spunky teenage Twi'Lek tinkerer to Mission/Ominisis the sex dominatrix/Sith Lord. Plus, I have a feeling that I think you didn't think of that idea until the Peragus part considering the first appearence of Mission in the story is more true to how her character is. The latter chapters also kind of make it unclear that some things are a flashback or not, it makes the story a little bit hard to follow. Kris/Darth Jouir's importance also dropped off in favor of Carmella/Darth Chienne, despite being the first Jedi corrupted by Revan. Espscially since apparently The Exile was brainwashed by Mission even before the events of Revan turning to the Dark Side. 

    There's some spelling errors or missing words here and there, (proofreading is a thing), also randomly one nitpick is that I believe in chapter 7 you referred to Bastila/Troia as "Sith Queen" even though that's just the name of her ship, she's still subordinate to Revan who I guess is the "Empress" i'm guessing you just got confused and slipped up. Some of the dialogue is just too "Modern" for Star Wars, I suppose its hard to avoid it when it comes to Erotica but hear "Fuckin and Go to Hell, and Dyke" it's just too our world and kind of breaks the immersion of Star Wars, that sometimes I forget this is Star Wars. Besides spelling errors, some words are just written in 1337talk like "cuz" or such. 

    Some more clothing descriptions would be nice, they were there in the early chapters which helped visualize the scene but later on they kind of disappeared. Plot is advancing kind of slowly as well, I suppose that's not the worst thing in an Adult Fanfic but its been 7 chapters and the "Resistance" has barely done much, the Sith did some corrupting but otherwise are just waiting for The Exile to make moves. More spotlight on Chienne, Louccia, and Jouir would be nice, Bastila is taking up a lot of Sith screen time. 

    Also some of the plot is kind of just retelling KOTOR 2 (Peragus II prisoners, TSL restoration, Atris's hidden academy, Malachor Academy) I understand that there are twists on these events but it would be nice to see some fresh locations. 

    But alas, my words may fell on deaf ears as this hasn't been updated in some time, but if you do ever come back maybe this will help imrpove a possible Chapter 8
     


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  • From Yumberduddle on April 25, 2015
    im so sad this story is dead, it was great and only getting better with every chapter
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  • From ANON - Tokeria on December 29, 2014
    Quick question.... Why dose it always end up that the good ones are always left unfinished...???
    No seriously......
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  • From ANON - ZeoUnit on December 29, 2014
    Epic story. To bad that there are no more updates.... Would be nice to see more of it. If author is still around would you consider continuing this story?
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  • From ANON - Bemused Peanut on February 22, 2014
    Even tho I discovered this story in 2014 and noticed last update was in 2011 I'm hoping u haven't forgotten bout it bullpens loving this story and the twists hope u hope u update at some point. :)
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  • From mev186 on August 09, 2013
    This story is one of my favorites, even though it may never be continued, it is still highly recommended and always keeps me coming back. I hope it is finished one day.
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 05, 2012
    Y U NO UPDATE!?
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  • From ANON - mev186 on March 24, 2012
    This is a great story, I hope you update it soon :)
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  • From ShadowRaider on January 31, 2012
    an outstanding fic.
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  • From ANON - a reviewer on July 04, 2011
    woah, that was a damn good chapter and damn good twist a the end. hope you update soon
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  • From ANON - Anon on April 13, 2011
    THAT was a helluva twist! And here I didnt think you could make Mission any sexier.
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  • From ANON - Anon on April 01, 2011
    Mission is EVIL!!!!????

    .......

    ...Oh what the hell, I'm still rooting for her. It's fucking Mission. You can try to make her as bad as you want, but she'll still always be the spunky, nice little street rat we all love.

    I really did like the idea of a non-Force-sensitive teen from a race that's almost a second-class citizen becoming Mistress of a whole galaxy and its Jedi/Sith overlords, though.
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  • From ANON - Anon on February 05, 2011
    Nice preview, you couldn't have picked a better teaser to get my attention back...Mission and the Exile are easily the hottest part of this fic and it's way better without guys involved. can't wait to see the chapter this teaser is from. I'm so totally hoping for an ending with a single spunky, sexy twilek teen becoming the Mistress of the entire known galaxy!
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  • From ANON - Mev on December 05, 2010
    *Sigh* It's been so long since a new chapter has been posted. I hope Vulpes is still around. This story is too good to let die :(
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  • From mev186 on October 23, 2009
    *Hopes for a New Chapter soon*
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