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Reviews for Affinity [Devil May Cry 4]

By : Wandrous
  • From Toto on March 12, 2008
    Okay seriously, this is one of my far more favorite pieces from this site. Simple and satisfying! I enjoyed the chemistry between the characters, you had a great flow to it, and it was a smooth read. Also the transition from Dante's memory to the present with Nero was quite fluid and there was little (If any confusion)Confusion. You are a strong writer and hope you keep on going with this fic, because I can see this really going somewhere if you so choose to take it past a simple one-shot.... Which I personally would like to see!!!!

    Aside from this, I did see a few minor slip-ups: Groan and grown.... But nothing too glaring aside from that, though I must admit I was hardly looking for typos, and I am far from a seasoned BETA.

    And I don't really want to take pot-shots to Larnya, but really was it necessary to bump this rather well-written fic down to decent because the author, Gloria (Might I call you Gloria?) didn't refer to the novels or manga that you read? I myself have only touched the games, therefore I knew nothing of what you mentioned. All I saw was a very rude and uncalled for rant. From where I stand you took this story, one which was not written for you as Gloria states ^^, and threw it in the author's face. I honestly believe you need to calm down, there are plenty of other fics out there which involve this pairing.
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  • From Wandrous on March 12, 2008
    Why thank-you so much for the review, it was most appreciated! Though I must say this fic was in no way a response to your 'challenge' which I only recently read about. 'Affinity' was merely a small something-or-other that I used as a creative outlet, nothing more - And I do hope that someone posts something that will strike closer to your interests.

    Once again thank-you for the review.

    -Gloria
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  • From Laryna6 on March 11, 2008
    *sighs* It's a decent sex scene, but while it has a DMC4 frame story it's not a DMC4 era-sex scene, just pre-DMC3 timeline-wise. Hence, it's not DMC4 porn. Although I'm not sure where that relationship dynamic would be present except during the first novel, and "Tony's" not calling him Gilver so that's out. They're fucking, but they're not fucked up enough for it to be post-novel/manga era. You sort of should have an AU tag or at least have Dante think about that fact that this is the person who killed his friends or, if you're leaving novel out as many do, is being an irritating cryptic bastard/outright enemy. He's not thinking much besides sex! yay! and they don't ever get that comfortable with each other in canon post-childhood. Not to mention that it's a little odd that "rebel with a cause that he's trying to avoid controlling him Dante" is getting off on being dominated by thatprick!Vergil. I mean, I can see it, given Dante's craving for Vergil to stick around and for family, but you need to establish why he's acting this way or it makes the reader think you're being OOC.

    It's quite well-written, and I myself write AU and have no problem with it (as opposed to OOC), but this wouldn't qualify as a challenge response as it's not in the game's time/character dynamic versions so I wouldn't give you a request fic for it, sorry. Expansion on the frame story, though, I'd very much like to see.
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