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Reviews for KotOR I: Orin Dakall

By : Banter
  • From ShadowsRun on July 12, 2008
    Kyoot. Carth is sleeping on the floor like a dog hehe. Bastila wouldn't have thrown him a blanket. When Orin said she had more battle experience than either of them, and Bastila just stared, I almost wet myself. I like Carth attempting to be paternal with the "eat your veggies" heh. Mission and Big Z are cute too.
    And I almost felt sorry for Carth venturing out alone with Bastila. Almost. I always thought it was weird that the outcasts just left...
    And Carth wishes he'd just left with Orin when she asked hm? Starting to come around.
    Awesome chappie. I wish your lappy luck, altho, I know laptops. They die. It's not fun.
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  • From yoshidoce on July 11, 2008
    Well I have read bits and pieces of this a few times but never as a whole. Well I did. Keep up the good work.
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  • From ShadowsRun on July 09, 2008
    I almost died a little with laughter and happiness hehe. I liked the hormone line where she put it in a straight jacket and threw it to kath hounds. And how she's edging towards recovery. The bump on the noggin isn't good. And I'm glad she's not at all impressed by Asstila, mwa ha, and I'm hoping Carth with continue to chew her out heh. OMG. I can't wait for Canderous.

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  • From ShadowsRun on July 08, 2008
    Big Z put his paw on her forehead? Lols, more like her entire face. Cute. Another good chapter. I'm excited to see Carth and Bastila have it out. I'm rooting for Carth heh. Thanks for updating so often, you rock.
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  • From ShadowsRun on July 08, 2008
    Omg. Omg. Sorry I didn't review sooner. I'm just so confused. Because she has memories, but are they real? Because she was Revan, could she have been a smuggler too? Or are the memories false? And if they are, why would the council give her those memories? So many questions.
    Btw, I approve of the Bastila meeting. She's such a bitch. And Orin totally owned her.
    How did you think of her name? Or was a random one the game gave you?
    Also, I have trouble displacing images of the rape days later. It was terrible (in the well written way, you know?) and somehow worse since Carth somehow saw it.
    Awesome chappies.
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  • From ShadowsRun on July 02, 2008
    Awesome. I know a fic is good when I can barely keep my reviews up with the chapters, and I'm still left wanting more chappies. Ek, sharing a bed. I have a feeling even the characters want to get laid (mebbe almost as much as I want them to) but I dunno if it's time yet. I'm super excited about the next chapter.
    Also, Carth would totally have monogrammed pjs. It's an interesting turn to have MIssion run those errands. I always wondered how the hell you were supposed to do it all by yourself... And I'm wondering what those scars are, or if I know what they are. Hmm. Interesting.
    Very good chappies. Take your time, and as always, rock on.
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  • From ShadowsRun on June 30, 2008
    Very good chappies. I love that even when they're not fighting, they're still sizing each other up. And Mission said the awkward silence was better, and toward the end I was wondering whether she was right hehehe. And yeah, I always wondered why carth wasn't the one piloting the swoop...
    And when the Twi'leks came in, with the last line, ahh. Very well done. It always seemed like more people needed a sense of humor in this game heh.
    Awesome chappies.
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  • From ShadowsRun on June 25, 2008
    Oh my. I never thought about where the loot would be on one of the pig men. *shudder* Carth would take offense at that, snicker. Eww. Did I mention eww?
    I laughed out loud when Carth *poked* her head wound heh. I'd use the last of the water if I had blood in my hair too. The dewlap analogy was nice too.
    As always, a steller chapter. I loved the subtext once more, and how it's not just all the game dialogue. There was a line that struck me as very sexual too. This one: “Hey, you inflict pain on me, then I figure I deserve to inflict some in return.”
    But then Carth goes all emo and I was like, eh so close...
    But yes, solid chapter. Can't wait for more.
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  • From AletaRois on June 24, 2008
    I do think you've been doing wonderfully so far. :)
    Just don't rush it if you aren't ready.
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  • From ShadowsRun on June 24, 2008
    I like how it's a slow process. A few comments here and there that aren't insulting and more of like, shocked revealations. The one about blue eyes, like that. Awesome. And this last chapter was a beautiful insight into her character. And Carth's. How easy his worry about Mission being a kid would mean, ef that, leave um here under the right influence.
    Also, I enjoy it when Orin smacks Carth for touching, and makes me wonder whether she's the one with real trust issues, despite her lack of bitching it.
    Very good. I'm uber hooked. I just reread your fic the day you couldn't update heh. Anyway, yes, rock on. Can't wait for more chapters, but don't rush yourself or your story.

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  • From AletaRois on June 23, 2008
    Take as long as you like! I'd rather the chapters are quality rather than rushed.
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  • From ShadowsRun on June 20, 2008
    Hi again. I like that Mission compared Carth and Orin to her and Big Z. And Orin's response is pretty funny and well phrased heh.
    And also, I'm glad there wasn't a lot of "Oh, my dashing soldier is well again" business. Slap a medpac on him and go. It's how it should be. Good scene.
    It's interesting Orin remembers but doesn't remember Canderous. I like the "who is he and why doesn't he remember me" bit.
    Solid chapter. Can't wait for the next one. And I think it's masterful how you've woven the in game dialogue into action sequences that make sense, since you don't really stop mid game for a chat without reason.
    I agree that you can't rush the sex scenes, and am glad you haven't sacrificed telling your story for rushing to the naughty bits.
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  • From ShadowsRun on June 19, 2008
    I approve of the righteous angry on Orin's part, aka when she says "oh that's fucking it". Lol. A little anger is good in a battle, right? I like how she goes crazy when Carth gets hurt, despite some serious tension between them. She does care. And also, how you explain there's a case of vials, versus the games kind of explaination of, well, there might be one on the corpse, is good. You explain the subtext of the game very well.
    Looking forward to your next chapter.
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  • From ShadowsRun on June 18, 2008
    Hi there. I read all of your ficcie last night, and bam, today, a new chapter. You rock. I like that there's more subtext to what they're saying to each other than in the actual game. I'm interested in Carth and Orin's relationship. I'm anticipating Orin just smacking him down at some point, and them mebbe hot smex? But I'm not rushing you. This is by far the best walk through I've seen. I especially liked the last line.
    Anyway, I hope you keep updating. If I can do anything to help you, if you even get writers block (which doesn't seem like a problem), I'd be happy to help. Anything to keep the chappies coming.
    Thanks for posting.
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