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By : Lukylady123
  • From ANON - James on August 24, 2008
    Probably one of the better post-RE4 fics I've encountered. Nicely emotive, although it can get a bit bogged down in places. One little nitpick - RE4 takes place over a single night. Leon comes to the village in the afternoon, and he's leaving the island with Ashley the following morning. Just a small quibble.
    Nice work so far, keep it up!
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  • From ANON - Max on August 22, 2008
    Nice to see another chapter up. Good plot development, I'm looking forward to them meeting, I assume the wait'll be worth it.

    Couple editing things you might wanna consider:
    In the beginning you have a few spelling and punctuation errors. Not many but one is all it takes to break me out of the story a little anyways.
    Seems like you overuse the term "ordeal" in Ashley's bit.
    lastly, it's tabasco sauce, not tobacco sauce :P

    Keep up the good work :)
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  • From ANON - Max on July 31, 2008
    Good chapter, keep it up!

    Quick note: actually after a mission, while giving a report on its success/failure, it's a debriefing, not a briefing. :D

    I look forward to moar.
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  • From ANON - DST on July 29, 2008
    The story is coming along quite nicely. I like the way you're building up the feelings between Leon/Ashley without them being in each others presence. Very well done!
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  • From ANON - Max on July 26, 2008
    Good story here, nice emotions.

    Beyond a few minor spelling and grammatical glitches the new chapter looks good. Can't wait to see where it goes.
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  • From ANON - Palmbi on July 14, 2008
    You seem to have uploaded Chapter three again, was it an accident or is it just a revised version? I have only read the first few paragraphs so it might be my mistake.
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  • From ANON - D on July 05, 2008
    PS: For the record your story is a very well written, minues that one problem I mentioned.
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  • From ANON - D on July 05, 2008
    Ummm I have only one MAJOR problem with your story. There is no way a Jetski can travel from Spain to the USA. There is an ocean between those 2 places! You may want to reassess that part of your story.
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  • From ANON - Anonymous on July 05, 2008
    Great story. Loved the game and your writing does it justice, as well as give plentiful and accurate anecdotes that go back to the inspiration. Hope you continue the story, I'd love to keep reading it.
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  • From Atomica_Syndrome on July 05, 2008
    Nice writing! The characters are very deeply portrayed, and the description is very thoughtful. Totally enjoyed reading it through.
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  • From ANON - Palmbi on July 04, 2008
    Great story, I love it and can't wait for future chapters. I came across the first two chapters a few days ago, and am ashamed to admit I was to lazy to review (I'm making up for it now though) despite the fact that I very much enjoyed reading them. I can't wait to see where the story goes from here.


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  • From ANON - Operculum on June 27, 2008
    This is really good, the emotional entanglements between the two are brought out very well indeed. Please continue!
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  • From USWeasil on June 25, 2008
    aaahhhh, it was good! loved ashley's thought process!
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