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Reviews for Marly's Restaurant

By : jhonenfreek9000
  • From ANON - akaku on June 29, 2009
    not as funny but still enjoyable. *glomps* i love ur writing.
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  • From ANON - akaku on June 29, 2009
    XD omg i was laughing so hard as imagined Axel beating Reno with a spatula. Omg. I love the way you write. Must read more. *continues to read*
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  • From ANON - Akaku on March 29, 2009
    write more pls??/? I want to see how evil Seifer can be to Hayner. And Are there any other Organization Members working there 2 (other then the ones that you have already stated)? I cant wait for the next chapter!! *squeal*
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  • From on September 01, 2008
    -pant-
    moree!
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  • From on August 08, 2008
    I think you should make Seifer pay for it, but take something from hayner in return >w< yaoi!!
    like, a one nighter or something...
    or a kiss...
    either way, but it should be hott.
    GOOD JOB
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  • From ANON - Micky on August 07, 2008
    X3 ohmaigawd -gigglefit- Little Zexyyy~ so adorable xD I can't explain how happy that made me. Him and his emo drag x3 -squees- and Axel cooking steaks reminded me of the one I have in the freezer D: but I can't eat it! Wanna know why? CAUSE I HAVE NO A-1 SAUCE. DDDD: do you know how impossible it is to eat steak without A-1? It's like... eating soup without crackers. Sure, it's filling, but it's very unsatisfying .__. ANYWHO, I love this story :D and all the little drag men~ I've come to the conclusion that if I was a man, id be extremely flamboyant, and a drag queen. id just... have to xD keep it up though! I love reading this :3
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  • From ANON - Selena on August 05, 2008
    Wow...this fic is awesome! I love it :)

    To answer your questions, I think that it would be cool if Seifer offered to pay for the meal, but it would probably be more true to his character if he made Hayner work off the bill...either way its your decision. Can't wait to see what you decide! I can't wait till Hayner and Seifer get together...I love them! Unfortunately there are not nearly enough fics about them.
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  • From emudii on August 02, 2008
    Um, wow. *chuckles* I noticed the new opening blurb. It's very much appreciated (and informative) ♥ I figured that that job must pay pretty good for Seifer to jump on it (—though, between us? His canon outfit is a little... yeah. But in his defense, his abs are HOT.) I can only imagine how many people recognize him and try to second-guess whether or not his reputation is legit. XD

    In that case, Seifer should definitely remain spit-fire with the customers. Civil, sure. Nice? No. For Hayner... business is business and he has to make up the difference. It's more like Roxas to look the other way, even if it's obvious what just happened isn't fair. I vote Seifer shoves Hayner in a dress and drags him around, pretending that he's a new hire he's training. XD He can pay off the rest of the bill with his tips, instead of getting management involved with an hourly service.

    Maybe the crowd/staff will like him well enough to ask him to think about working there. XD;

    Okay, being quiet now. *HYUCK*
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  • From ANON - Micky on August 02, 2008
    I think Seifer should be kind of... bi-polar xD he likes screwing with people, so maybe he should explain some extremely difficult or embarassing task Hayner has to complete to get out of paying it, watch him freak the hell out, then tease him for being an over-reactive drama queen and toss the money on the table. It seems to just... fit him ^^ and my my, isn't Axel the little sadist x3 He's such a prick. I love it xD I like how this is going though. Can't wait to read more :D
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  • From emudii on August 01, 2008
    I have to be honest. The lack of detail in your setting makes this hard to read. Even if all you wrote was that it was that the restaurant that panders to the tran scene the way Hooters panders to dudes who like 'em young and half naked, it would make the reader feel more comfortable. Of course, I am ASSUMING that that is the case, since two waiters have appeared in skirts, but there seems to be nothing else different about it. But I needed to read this TWICE just to be sure I hadn't missed anything, before coming to that conclusion. Is it just a restaurant? Is it a bar? Is it a gay strip club with a restaurant area on the outskirts? Something as small as being unsure of the exact setting kept me... waiting. Waiting for that last piece in the puzzle that makes it all come together and create a picture that makes sense.

    Normally, it wouldn't matter so much. But when the big emphasis is on "that" place, "this" place, and you don't clarify... unless this is meant to be a thriller or mystery, you've kinda left me feeling unsatisfied at the end of the chapter. Again, not usually a big deal, but when you set up an AU where people are doing things that would be normally OOC, you sort of want to hint at motivation. Roxas is paying his way through college. Seifer lost a bet. One of them has hospital bills to pay and this restaurant is a niche for rich perverts. These are things we can infer just from the setting and just the right hints, even if they aren't being said yet.

    Now. That being said, I'm a big fan of S/H. And it made me giggle inside when Seifer was intentionally provocative (read: being "mean") to get Hayner's attention. Even with the humiliation of serving your old nemesis in a WAITRESS outfit, he's still got it. Thank god he seems to know what sort of effect he has on people, or otherwise I could have seen that as getting nasty.

    Good luck with the next chapter!
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  • From on July 31, 2008
    awesome
    very original!
    keeper going
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