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Reviews for Persona 4 FYL

By : sanyilma
  • From Platinumsabr on January 15, 2009
    Did it feel great to see another chapter so soon after I discovered this story. Once again, well done, and your writing is very impressive.

    Again, only one complaint. In the Persona series', this one in particular where they actually went into some kind of detail with the deity references, why would Izanami be a goddess in the real world when she was in fact something born from the minds of humans, hence her connection to the myth? That's what I got out of the group's talk before the Izanami maze anyways. I thought the whole reason so many of the persona's were connected to myths and legends was because they were created by humans and thus likely to take their forms. The eternal aspect of her is something I would doubt then. Sorry for raining on your story with my cynicism once again, but it's just a thought. I like where you've taken the story though, don't doubt that.

    Still...I thought Igor's role was that of the guide/helper in the Protagonist's journey. This new guy seems kinda...unneeded, to be blunt.

    Oh well, keep up the good work, and wonderful descriptions. You're a talented writer!
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  • From Platinumsabr on January 15, 2009
    Ah, the much underused games section. Personally, for the amount of people I know of that have played the game and love fanfiction, I'm surprised you haven't gotten more hits. I'll admit, the Naoto SL is my favorite in the game and I'm currently playing through my second cycle waiting anxiously to be able to enter a serious relationship with her, something that isn't possible apparently in the first playthrough, which bites.

    Very good idea and writing so far, though my only question/possible-complaint would be that why, when Naoto threatens/offers to go on the train with you at the end of the game, and on top of that she's a freelance detective with free use of her working area, would they not have seen each other very much over the duration of five whole years!? That doesn't seem very plausible to me, especially considering how tight they all were. Just my commenting, take no offense please.

    Otherwise, very good so far. Since you've reintegrated Izanami back into the story--which is something I won't get into even though the group does vanquish her seemingly permanently in the true ending--I'm assuming the Protagonist's main Persona would be Izanagi-no-Okami then? I'm waiting impatiently for my opportunity to fuse him in my second playthrough, he looked sweet!

    Anyways, I hope you keep writing this and I look forward to the next chapter!
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  • From 2FD2 on January 14, 2009
    Still highly enjoyable. You've characterized an older Nanako pretty well, she's kind of on the border between kid and teenager here so your combination of her childish mannerisms and more matured speech(influenced somewhat by Souji's friends, obviously) works quite well. Kanji's main source of pain getting a happy resolution was nice, as well.

    Everyone's in character here. The romantic undertones are mainly gone from Souji's relationship with Chie/Yukiko/Rise, but that makes perfect sense if his relationship with Naoto is public(or at least known to the group) and everyone's accepted it. Naoto, of course, takes the lead by being the same detective we all know and love, but with a few more feminine touches(perfume(even if just for Souji), longer hair, warmer speech, etc) that show how far she's come in accepting herself. It's rather sweet how they both carry the watches everywhere, too.

    Interesting ending. I've always wanted to see Souji and Izanami talk on civil terms. It seems possible considering he literally blasted the blight out of her.

    Good stuff.
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  • From 2FD2 on January 13, 2009
    But-but-but you can't cut off there. That's quite mean. The tarot reading was a nice touch, though. I honestly forgot all about that.

    It's likely a good thing when the only complaint I really have about this is that I want to see more of it. There can never be enough P4 fluff, and you write it quite well.
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