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By : RedLinesKrutch
  • From ANON - Excalibur on April 08, 2011
    Awesome. Wrec is sexay! Lol
    Your the best make more!!!!
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  • From Rockinmuffin on February 17, 2010
    You know, this is probably the best-written Mass Effect smut on the site. And the pairing is so interesting too. I'd never really considered Wrex and Shepard together before reading this fic, but now I can actually kind of see it. And Wrex is awesome and badass so he deserves all the smut he can get.

    I'd love it if you decided to post the backstory that started all this. Don't make me beg!
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  • From JustS on February 04, 2010
    Now that Mass Effect 2 is here a would love to see another one like this by you, or anyone willing to have a crack at some more Krogan lovin'.

    I had the idea for a particular fic, but once again I probably don't have time to write it myself. Grunt, as part of his Krogan 'puberty', begins to get rather horny onboard the Normandy. Ultimatley, he'd end up boning Miranda, Female Shepherd or Kelly, either way it would be hot stuff.

    Just thought I'd throw that out there if anyone would like to pick it up. Maybe if the games section on the forums isn't still completley dead I'll post this there too.
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  • From GLCW2 on January 09, 2010
    Very good story! I hope there's more coming. I thought the more clinical terms worked well for this story. Sometimes, one can go to far with synonyms for body parts.
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  • From ANON - Anon on April 28, 2009
    I always thought of myself as a hardcore fan of Alenko or Garrus, but this was really, really good. I'd love an update, if this isn't a one shot.
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  • From Anyataka on March 19, 2009
    I'd love the back story to this. It's probably my favorite Mass Effect pairing and sorely underrepresented if you ask me. Also one of the reasons I love this fic so much. I did have a comment about the wording of something but now I can't remember it. When I read it again -'cause I will- I'll keep an eye out for it. If I could fav this, I would. ^..^ Many many times over.
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  • From PandoraMasters on February 24, 2009
    I'm at loss for words. I went searching for mass effect sexy fics and I saw this.
    I am....in shock. My jaw needs to be lifted from the floor. Jesus-effing-christ. That was, disturbingly kind of freakishly hot? I love Wrex and all, but since this is fiction and we go beyond our imagination, you have definitely pulled it off magnificiently.
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  • From SonfotheAtomicBiscuithead on February 08, 2009
    JustS hit it right on the money as far as Enigma's comments. Keep your mix as it is and don't try to make everyone sound sleazy-- some people aren't. If you make everyone sound sleazy, it's harder to take a story in context of the original environment (much like the overly "lovey-dovey" fics are)-- and it starts to be one of those things where character ceases to matter. You've read stories like that, I'm sure, where the outrageous sex acts are the real characters lingered over and the people in them are just shadows. These shadows could be anyone, as interchangeable and disposable as Kleenex. Not to say you can't whip out the sleaze for appropriate characters. You should- IE: Cock works here because it's Wrex and it sounds like something the old mercenary might call his formidable junk. I don't imagine Kaidan would use that word-- his personality would somewhat forbid it. Garrus, being the rogue cop he is, might even have even dirtier words for his penis depending on the situation. It's all about personality, character and situation-- something you've got a firm handle on. Good job.
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  • From SonfotheAtomicBiscuithead on February 08, 2009
    It was entertaining, and I think the semi-technical style fit the universe Mass Effect happens in and was still hot. I do think you might need to linger over Shepard's responses a bit more, as the transitions between her and Wrex's experiences were shaky--- but otherwise I'd certainly like to see how this event managed to take place.
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  • From JustS on February 06, 2009
    After reader Engima's comments I must say I disagree with him/her. The 'scientific' approach works here because you need to establish certain things about Krogan mating and biology in a matter-of-fact way. It wouldn't make sense to do that and then in the next paragrah break out the cunt/dick/etc words. Personally I try to avoid the more dirtier words unless it is a sleazy or disgusting scene, so here it wouldn't make much sense.

    Once again, I love this fic n_n
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  • From JustS on February 06, 2009
    Oh my god! This is one of the hottest fics I've ever read on AFF! Pretty much the perfect Mass Effect fic; containing interespecies sex with a human female getting boned by a larger species. You took creative license with Krogan biology and you made it pay off everytime you mentioned it. I love it when brilliant fics are written so they are contained in the canon, and you did it with characterisation that makes sense in the universe. That, and so many other great details that push this fic from great to near perfection. One thing that did bug me was the locking together part for over half an hour, I thought that was too long an amount of time to go without any movement for the reader's imagination, but otherwise this is flawless.

    One of my new favourites, keep up the great work!
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  • From elegyenigma on February 04, 2009
    The only thing I can think of to change, well, two things really, is if you're gonna get descriptive, get descriptive for BOTH. It seemed like everything was from Wrex's POV and then there was random snippets from hers, which kinda threw in a bit of confusion into the mix. Second thing; technical terms have no place in smut. :D Things like "cervix" and "womb" etc, are kind of superfluous detail; we know what sex technically involves, most of us are over the age of 18 and either have had sex or at least know the mechanics. The absolute mechanics are not needed, and honestly, they make the entire story seem too...stiff-lipped, too formal. If you're gonna write porn, write PORN, not a scientific description. XD And there's no need to be reserved in the detail, either. Words like "manhood" are to be used only to throw variety into the mix, not as a flagship word to describe a dick/cock/wang/schlong/shaft. Yeah that's right, I said it! And so can you.

    My point is, if your story is going to have dirty content, then by all means, make it sound DIRTY! Don't be clean about it; nobody but prudes like "immaculate sex," and clearly, by the core that you're going for with this story [rough sex between two alien races], you aren't one who is trying to write it like that. Don't get me wrong, it's well written! VERY well-written, actually, I rather like it, but, at the same time, you need to spice it up a bit. It's like vanilla: tastes good, but it's kinda boring, too. You gotta give it some zest.

    Might I recommend peppermint?
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  • From BrightShadow on February 01, 2009
    Hmmm... well, as far as getting character right goes, you seemed to nail Wrex pretty much head-on. The method and pace you used fit perfectly, though I can't quite say why. It just works, y'know? No real complaints here, other than my nit-picky-ness wondering if you know about Krogan having four testicles... which is probably a yes, but still. Anyway, solid work!
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