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Reviews for God Hand - Joker

By : salarta
  • From salarta on May 03, 2009
    Hey there scalon!

    Lateness is no problem, we all get busy. I'm working on something tonight myself (not writing sadly). I want to focus on my Valkyria Chronicles story a bit more next because it's been sitting there for more than two months now, but it'll take some time for me to think of some new tricks Olivia can perform to make a slutty fool of herself. I definitely wanted to give Conchita a little more time, but I was kind of obsessed with getting it done in time for April Fool's Day since I was in love with having something new done on a day pretty much made for the new jester slut Olivia. I'm not normally one for sappy and mush writing, but if that's where the writing goes then I absolutely won't fight it.

    By the way, it seems I've pretty much convinced Anonelbe to consider writing something with God Hand in the future if you're interested with his stuff! He has a description of his plan in his Author's area, and he's waiting to get his copy of God Hand in the mail.
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  • From ANON - scalon on May 03, 2009
    This works pretty well, my friend. In Chapter 2, Olivia was bent into a joker's role, Shannon was high as the queen...and Gene was looking to "bump her rump with his trump" (taken from an old "The Cosby Show" episode around a game of pinochle).

    Chapter 3 showed Olivia nice and demented, although she's not fully out of her role yet. I wonder if she should tease Gene more--the joker is wild, and she got Gene to trump Queen Shannon and her whip- wielding "other joker", Conchita.

    You almost wonder what the "little devil" might give Olivia in terms of other tricks she could do, especially if Olivia knew what Gene got turned on by too.

    Or in an "afterwards" piece, a little bit where Olivia admits that when she was in Shannon's clutches, she became the "joker slut," hoping she could either adapt or buy time for Gene to get to her. Gene could also admit in a way he'd gotten used to Olivia being there, and if she'd gotten lost for good, then he was going to let Shannon, Belze and the others "get buried" as he'd take them out.

    "You once said I 'turned tricks' after I gave you some G," Olivia might go, "but how about I show you a few tricks you'll like?" And we could have a few Gene-Olivia scenes as the God Hand's brace funnels power to Gene's "flesh wand", finally getting Olivia the relief she craves. That's the "sap and mush" route though. But it would be nice to see the joker slut trump the Ace God Hand.

    And once all the Devas are done for, she might tell Gene, "I hope you're able to support a family... because I think I heard and felt something inside me." Olivia would put Gene's God Hand to her belly and Gene could hear the jingle of bells...

    ...little joker bells as a twinge of fear comes through him.

    "Looks like I have new challenge," he says nervously.

    "Actually," Olivia might smile mischeviously, "you'll have...two."

    Gene faints, and Olivia humorously pouts, "Aw...he fainted, go poomp!":P

    (Sorry it's so late, but I have had to deal with sick parents lately, and I tried to remember the last bit of the recent Hellboy movie.)

    scalon
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  • From salarta on March 19, 2009
    Hi scalon! I've been wanting to do more with this fic because I think I can do better in a new chapter. I've been a little hung up on what acts to include, and more importantly if anyone really wanted me to continue with what I've done. I've been given a few great ideas from someone I know online that I want to incorporate, so if there's any other thoughts you have then please don't hesitate to share (your last review already gave me more of an idea for a direction to take it in).
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  • From ANON - scalon on March 19, 2009
    As a God Hand fan, I ask you don't leave us hanging. It's about time Gene made his stand after hunting Shannon down.

    Nobody would enslave the girl who gave him an arm as it were without getting through him first. And it would be a heinous crime to just leave us like that at just two chapters wanting more.
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