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By : sillyneko345

From ANON - Chibichibi on January 02, 2010
Bweheheheheheee! First i mujst say I've read all your fics, and I am always highly amused by the outtakes. I've laughed so hard I've fallen out of my computer chair.

The next thing, you're writing is wonderful. Yeah there are some errors but everyone makes little mistakes. It's 6AM for me and I've just finished all of them finally. I couldn't sleep without it. Absolutely wonderful. Now I think It's time to go to bed lol. Update soon please!
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From TaintedEmerald on November 20, 2009
I know, I'm more than a bit late this time around (you can blame work, school, and Fallout 3 for that). This is quite the chapter you've got here though. A little different from your usual writing, but still very impressive.

First off, very nice segue between chapters. Going from Jak standing at the balcony panicking to Jak taking out that panic on some hapless recruits was refreshing.

Second, this chapter was just amazing when it came to plot development. You did a good job showing and not telling; your dialogue continues to be top-notch.

Lastly, another cliffhanger ending! Really? Just joking, ending was quite...enticing, and the outtakes were, as per your usual, hilarious. Good luck on your finals, and hope to see more from you soon!
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From ANON - Kuromei on November 12, 2009
lol I knew he was going to come back. X3 But I can only imagine the look on Jak's face when Daxter transformed for him at the end. XD Priceless. X3 *giggle*

What I want to know is why did Samos capture Daxter? And, if the kid was important enough to bring him back to Spargus from such a distance, why would he let Damas just toss him to the traders?

... Meh, my brain hurts. XP Still, I'm looking forward to the next chapter, whenever that's posted. =3
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From ANON - Pyro on November 11, 2009
I love you so much!
O-o
Write more please :3
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From ANON - Csi Forsythe on November 09, 2009
"Uh-oh. Looks like Jak�s troubles are far from over, with an enemy force massing just outside the palace walls and a teasing shape-shifter in his bed who seems to raise more mysteries than answers."

That's not the only thing Daxter's raising . . .

MORE PLEASE. ASAP. . . . PLEASE.
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From ANON - Csi Forsythe on October 08, 2009
Sig: (salutes) I�ve asked the prince to report for duty, sir.

Torn: Very good, soldier. Now, as I was saying� (glances randomly toward the palace) Jak, what the hell are you doing?! Get off the damn balcony, boy, you�re naked!!

Spargus Army: (stares in awe and wonder)

Torn: *face-palm* They don�t pay me enough to deal with this�

You flabbergast me sometimes. Looking forward to the next, mischievous chapter!
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From TaintedEmerald on October 06, 2009
I was wondering when we'd get the next installment of this. You've been working overtime haven't you?

Well, it was awfully nice of Jak to give Dax a rest, especially considering that he knew they'd have to separate for a while. And how handy of Jak to keep a bottle of oil close by with which to entertain his guest. You continue to amaze me with your writing Robin, the descriptions and, most importantly, the characterization is consistently incredible. Still, I...I hate to admit it (really, this is just me nitpicking again), but I was kinda surprised when you told us what Jak said to Daxter instead of writing out the dialogue. I know that with your amazing dialogue skills it would probably had sounded a bit better that way. Just a thought really.

All in all though, it was a great chapter. I can't wait to see where the plot goes from here!

P.S.: By the way, I'm very impressed with your grammar and spelling abilities. You've written so much, and I haven't spotted a single mistake to date. I know you said that you were really strict with the subject in one of your profiles, and you really weren't kidding!
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From ANON - Kuromei on October 03, 2009
"I turned my best friend into a weasel!" roflmao XD I'd feel sorry for Jak if I wasn't so busy rolling on the floor. X3 As sweet and hot as the preceeding events were, you still get me with your humor. ;3

Case in point, the outtakes. lol XD Still gold, still lovin' em'. ^w^

See you next time! =D
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From TaintedEmerald on August 14, 2009
Sorry it's a bit late, but I've been a little busy due to work.

Anyways, this chapter really delivered! Definitely worth the wait and build-up of the last two installments. I'm so glad poor Daxter finally got over his anxieties (for the most part), and I have to admit that you really did a great job working with Jak's perspective of things. Furthermore, despite this being the 5th story you've written, the lemons and fluff never seems to get old. It must be hard coming up with a different scene each time, not to mention avoiding using the same descriptions or passages. I really give you credit for that.

As always, the descriptions and narrative were excellent, no flaws in spelling or grammar, wonderful pacing, and believable dialogue (or would that be monologue?); I'd tell you to attempt writing a novel, but that would take away from your fanfic time.

I know school is going to be starting up again soon (or has it already started for you?), but I'm really looking forward to the next part of this story. Don't put aside the more important things just to please your fans though.
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From yeahjesse on August 09, 2009
;_; This is so sexy (and dare I say it--grown up!). Where did you learn to write things like that?! I never considered how adorable a sex scene could be when Dax is the quiet one. Physically, he's the more expressive of the two.

The little comment about Torn actually almost made my jaw drop. What a terrifying image! But I think it really works for this kind of playful, princely Jak.

:3 As always, I love your work.
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From Kuromei on August 07, 2009
OMG *drool* I've been waiting so long for this. X3 Bathtup hand jobs are always yummy. ^/////^

But wait, there's more! XD lol I can't wait for the next chapter. ^w^ In fact, I'm still wondering why Samos doesn't want that collar removed. =/ *waits*
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From Kuromei on June 30, 2009
I think this is the first time I've left you a review, even though I've read every single Jak and Daxter fic you've got. XP Sorry I'm usually such a lurker, but I felt compelled to comment, this time. X3

Even though Daxter is the mute in this fic, his personality is still perfectly intact. In fact, making him express himself via his actions is even better, I think. lol X3 I mean, who else would throw an urn full of pebbles at Jak? No one, that's who. ^w^ Well, maybe Torn, but I doubt Jak would let him into his room. XP

Moving on, I'm really looking forward to seeing what happens in that bathroom. *evil giggle* Btw, your outtakes are all comedy gold. I love 'em. ^////^

See you next time! ^w^
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From Kaybrianna on June 26, 2009
Woot! Update! It's nice to know that Jak isn't a raping pervert... though by the looks of the end of this chapter, Dax might be, haha... Anywho, another wonderful chapter and I can't wait for your next one! And do you know how many chapters this is gonna be about? Till next time!
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From TaintedEmerald on June 26, 2009
Ouch, I wasn't expecting Daxter to be that violent. Then again, considering what he just went through along with being chained up, I can see how the trust between him and Jak could use a little fixing.

Anyways, another great chapter! I absolutely adored the way Jak went about wooing Daxter, and was grateful for the bit of fluff you added near the end. Still eagerly awaiting a bit more action though. And the amount of detail you've been putting in this series is incredible; it made me feel as though I was in the room looking in on the scene itself. The descriptions of the action was exceptionally good.

The pacing is rather smooth so far, although you were right about the chapter flying by. Hope we won't have to wait too long for the next one.

Also, I understand your thoughts towards anonymous reviews now. Even if you only replied to the notable ones, that could still turn out to be a lot in the end. Especially considering how good your work is :). Another small question though, would you rather I post a review on both sites, or stick to just one? It probably seems redundant seeing the same review twice doesn't it?
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From Kaybrianna on June 10, 2009
Just thought I'd tell you how amazing you are here, too. Keep up the good work!
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