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Reviews for Dragon Quest V - Bathtime with Bianca

By : Streti
  • From Lunarsilver on June 24, 2017

    Could the next chapter be with Bianca still naked and covered in her husband's cum as she walks out of the bath house to sneak in her dad's house to change but while Bianca was on her way to her dad's, she gets turned on more by the second from the thought of being seen naked and covered in her husband's cum, it just makes her want to have sex out in public by her husband and cover her body in his cum more and more before they get to her dad's house.


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  • From ANON - John on March 02, 2010
    Hey I just read your story thanks for responding to my request on the forums. I like both chapters but I'm sort of partial to chapter two simply because it's longer but both chapters are great!
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  • From Jocko on January 01, 2010

    This story is a lot of fun. I hope to see more of it. More DQ married naughtiness! I've been thinking of writing some myself.
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  • From ExponentialD on December 10, 2009
    Not bad. As others have said, short and sweet, but I enjoyed it. I have to say I cringed at the use of some words you chose, but it didn't do much to hurt the overall story.
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  • From Watcher on December 09, 2009
    Nice. Very nice. How much?

    Sorry no one else is reviewing. I liked this story at first, but it did feel a tad unfinished. Still kinda does. But hey, I'm not complaining. A wonderful mixture of your usual style with some sweeter, fluffier moments. Two thumbs up.
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  • From ANON - V on November 27, 2009
    Ack! Accidentally filled out the captcha, thinking both doing that and hitting the review button were required to submit.

    The Good: it's a recurring theme in your works, but normally the heavy volume sperm play (bukkake, snowballing, etc.) is one of those things that only appears in works (in H-doujin and manga especially) where the girl is being degraded, raped, broken, or otherwise abused. I'm very appreciative that you take 'hard' content and use it in the context of affectionate or loving relationships. BAD ENDS never really did much for me, and I'm much happier seeing characters I enjoy being happy. Thank you very much for that.

    Given the length of the piece, I don't have a lot to say about the technical side of things (not long enough for repetitiveness to set in on common words for sexual elements i.e. the penis, vagina, clitoris, testicles, breasts, nipples, semen, etc., and therefore also no flow-breaking ridiculous synonyms for those things- then again, I don't generally see that in your work anyway). I only found one spelling error, "aggressive enough that he was kept of his toes...", where 'of' should be 'off', but that was so minor I had to read the story in 'editor mode' to catch it.

    Miscellany:

    1)Unlike other games, I don't know that there is a 'common consensus name' for the DQ protagonists (although I've frequently seen 'Eight' used as the DQ VII protagonist's name), so 'John' wasn't a problem. I am curious, though: did you just pick it because of its commonness, or what?

    2)Thank you for writing a DQ V story, as it's one of those games that I really feel needs more love on AFF. I've always found Bianca incredibly sweet, so I'm always happy to see her in a story. I liked the buildup in their relationship through their prior adventures, and the 'party talk' command helps that an awful lot, as I was genuinely interested to see how she'd react to all sorts of things and people that I found throughout my adventure.

    3)I never was a fan of Flora/Nera fiction, since picking her instead of Bianca always felt super skeezy to me, especially when she already has a better suitor, but I did make a separate save file for Deborah, who is far more interesting than she first appears. While initially she is basically a rich bitch, she does have a very large number of intelligent or insightful things to say through party talk, and she warms up to the main character quite endearingly over time. I don't like her as much as Bianca, but if you'd like to try something different, she's prime fodder for it. (Personally, I see the main character taking the lead in bed so that he can make her come her brains out rather than the reverse, were she dominant, but a)I kind of have a female orgasm fetish, and b)it seems sweet to me. Equally interesting in my mind is the idea that they trade dominance, whether by spoken agreement or one or the other just letting their partner do it from time to time.)

    Huh. I'm aware that I wrote more here on related elements of the game rather than the work, but I'll try again soon with one of your other stories, and attempt to avoid the rambling next time.
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  • From ANON - V on November 27, 2009
    Hey there. Quickie, but a goodie, here. Given the length, there's not a heck of a lot I can write, but I'll try and make some constructive points.

    First, a quibble: I'm glad you rendered Bianca's localized accent (although it may annoy some people), but there was one point, that bothered me: "Mm... feels so good to have your cock between my tits, darlin'. We haven't dun this in a while." If I recall correctly, the localization has her use 'dun' as a rendering of "doesn't" in her cockney accent (at least, I think it's a cockney accent). It's a very minor error, but for me it served to break the flow of the scene somewhat via its jarring effect.

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  • From Watcher on November 26, 2009
    Well, that was nice. Really, REALLY short, but nice, and even a little romantic. I would have liked for it to be a little longer, as I like the couple, but I'll take what I can get. Thanks for sharing it.
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