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By : Uilleand
  • From phoenike on February 02, 2010
    I have to admit, I registered at AFF.net just to review this story, because it was so damn good. Your writing has saved me from having to try to write this scene myself. This is how it should have happened in the game! Alistair is so hard to write but you do it perfectly. I laughed out loud at his line 'This is my serious face. Serious face means I'm serious.' That's something he could really say.

    BTW, I also got a bit confused at the same spot that some other reviewer mentioned -- I didn't notice that they switched positions. But that's a minor gripe.

    Definitely something to re-read when the mood strikes. Thank you for sharing! :-)
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  • From BalthiersGurl on January 08, 2010
    I LOVE this story! Very well written and sweet.
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  • From iamthetv on December 28, 2009
    Absolutely wonderful. I enjoyed every moment of reading that! It was so sweet and steamy.
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  • From jadedragon83 on December 13, 2009
    I can't believe you've only gotten one review for this so far D:

    This was pretty much exactly what I felt should have been the "love" scene while ingame - and while Bioware did a good job, and the scene made me squee, I really don't think they did it justice for the depth of Alistair's character. You, however, basically skunked them all. There were so many subtle erotic undertones to it, like the way Alistair reacted to having his armor removed and your Elf not noticing at first that really made his virginity believable. His nervousness, his timidness... aaah, it was all so beautiful and believable! I've noticed that most writers have a hard time writing a believable virgin, but you did a great job :P

    The only, ONLY bit that I had some trouble with was transition of position (hey, did that rhyme? hurhur). There was one small part there where they switched their positions, but I don't remember there being any exposition of such a switch. It was a little confusing at first, but easily picked up a paragraph later. Nothing to sweat over, really!

    Again, you did a great job with this. Even in the ending, where most writers rush after being tapped out from writing a heavy sex scene, you really pulled through and brought it all together. I would love to see a second part to this! *hinthint**nudgenudge*
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  • From brainfear on December 11, 2009
    Yeah...that was pretty much perfect. :)
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