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Reviews for A Tekken Story: Through the Years - Volume I

By : DarkRomancer
  • From ANON - Seto Takahashi on January 15, 2014
    So I've finished chapter 27. I like the direction somewhat. Lol I dislike Sakura and Jin together they DONT work in my mind. I also think that the pace can still be faster without giving up too much, however it's a vast improvement from the beginning. I honestly wonder how everything will turn out as it seems fate has Akira with Jin. Anyways update soon. P.S. I would always be pleased with more lemons.
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  • From ANON - Seto Takahashi on January 11, 2014
    Okay I officially hate my computer I attempted to write two reviews and it erased both of them. Okay, looks like I am the first person to review. First of all I would like to congratulate you on writing as much as you have without praises or constructive criticisms, that takes conviction. Now I have equal share of praise and criticism which I hope may assist you. First I feel that the story may be too long. I have read up to chapter 5 thus far and from what I gather on authors notes, that's somewhere around 70 pages. The main conflict should have been exposed by now which should happen somewhere around the fourth tournament yet the third has yet to happen. In addition with a story like this which I think is rightfully called Mary Sues the story lends to being less creative by nature. I would have liked to see more hooks in order to grapple the reader from chapter one. Now even with this criticism I am enjoying the work. Here is what I have to praise. Although the story is technically a Mary Sue it does have some creativity behind it and exposes different elements in the tekken universe not seen in current production works which is what fanfic is for. Number two, your writing capability surpasses about 70 to 75 percent of other works of fanfiction I have read. Their are minimal mistakes and the story is written in such as way as one is able to see a story happening as opposed to being told it. That is rare especially know a days. Also I like the feel of the story as Akira is supposed to be knowledgeable in martial arts yet has truly shown it yet, this makes her more realistic and not an over hyped character. Also I love the Shinjuku Incident, that is my favorite movie of all time. And before reading this I thought I was the only one who knew about it's existence well in the states at least. Well as stated earlier I give my hat to you. Your writing in adult fanfiction in which their is guaranteed lemons later in the story while having the integrity of an actual story. The two main fanfiction forums I know of Fanfiction.net has banned all lemons and adultfanfiction is full of word porn. Thank you for generously erasing these two flaws.
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