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Reviews for Lady and King

By : maldita
  • From ANON - faith4gotn on July 18, 2010
    Chapter 4: Lots of Sex or just a little, keep on writing. The story is strong enough with this that I'll follow it in between, and in truth, I don't think it has to command every chapter either. The lulls are interesting to read and build a craving or hunger in anticipation of the next scene for when it does happen. Keep doing what you are doing and follow your muse.
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  • From TheDeal on June 21, 2010
    Be proud of this piece, friend; it's high quality. 5 stars.
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  • From wanderingaddict on June 20, 2010
    lawlz, I almost forgot. how you handled the whole "Jack" thing? haha, totally baller dude! I mean, I was all sadface :( and stuff when he couldn't be healed and was going to die, and a little resentful of Sylvanas for not appreciating how quickly this youth managed to get in the way of an assassin, but it also totally fits ya know? like, if she'd been any more caring she'd have lost a lotta her hard-ass appeal, and if she'd been colder she'd have just been a bitch. fine line to straddle there dude! masterfully done! haha, also, for a while there I thought she was planning to make the kid her Forsaken servant in the city or something, so that she could have an extra set of loyal help, because she's Sylvanas, ya know? she's CRAFTY

    the quippiness of the "send him to the druids, dumbass" was waaaay too cool though. lawlz, total Horde Pride yo.
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  • From wanderingaddict on June 20, 2010
    the deity thing is hard to overcome. hah, Mal'Ganis Dude is right, most humans do, and it could feel jarring to change it, but it really is also kinda lame for a King to be fucking the shit outta some hot-ass possessed chick and be like "Oh Light! Lightey Light Light! I'm cumming!"

    hah, it just doesn't have quite the same "oomph" ya know? there's a perfectly handy way around it, if ya feel like. in Warcraft I and II the clerics of Northshire Abbey worshipped God and Angels, not the Light. so long as you mention briefly that Wrynn is "true Azerothian" and is against the "Lorderan Light" (i.e. more into the southern Azerothian judeo-christian "God" figure instead of the northern Lorderan sect the refugees brought with them) then I can't see how any readers could find fault with you, and you could use "God," etc. all you want! win-win!

    or not. haha, w/e's good with me! just offering suggestions, if you want. totally your choice and all that jazz.

    story-wise, I think the awesomest thing of all is all the snide remarks Sylvannas has about everything. none of the humans have the will, the strength, or ability of the Forsaken, and all their buildings are crude and barely passable compared to the elves, etc- yeah, all that stuff. haha, lawlz, that makes me grin like nothing else man! haha, totally cool 'cause it's so true. Horde Pride!
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  • From ANON - Dude from Mal'Ganis on June 19, 2010
    You've managed to make me leave a review for the first time since aff.net was created. Probably the best story in the WoW section, and hot too. The only thing I wanted to note is that I'm fairly certain (though I've never played Alliance so I can't be 100% sure) most humans would tend to swear on the Light instead of invoking deities, which seems to be a more troll/nelf kinda thing in the Warcraft verse.

    Also you slipped tenses a few times, and also flipped back and forth between third person and first in one of the early scenes as well. Overall quite nice though. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
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  • From ANON - faith4gotn on June 18, 2010
    Great stuff. Loved it. The writing was on point and it had an excellent flow to it. The point of view and perspective of the narration was great. Quite often sex can be just sex and you don't really care to see where it goes and you just follow, but you keep it interesting with the people involved. I look forward to the entire scene and the character of the participants within. As for the sex itself, the timing of it was well done. Things weren't glossed over, and you put in a good amount. I don't think its too much. Honestly, I don't come here to read non-erotica.



    Keep it up. I'm eager to see how this plays out.
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  • From ANON - Ecchi Baka Kon on June 18, 2010
    ooooo now this is a interesting read =D sylvanas inhibits the body of emma eh =P i'd like to see how this goes, and is it possible if variaan will fuck sylvanas while she's in her own original body =D but that would sooooo epic =D any ways keep up the good work and update soon V^_^
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  • From wanderingaddict on June 17, 2010
    haha, wow dude, wow. woooooooow. this seemed so cheesey from the description, but then I clicked, and you have the beginning set up so well that I just kept reading straight through to the end, and I have to say that- holy balls- I never about just how awesome Wrynn/Sylvanas could be.

    Badass, dude. Totally badass. 5 stars.
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