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Reviews for Tales of the Tenkai Star: On The Feitas

By : Cross838
  • From ANON - Anon on September 13, 2010
    Lun is hot, and well written in this story. Your portrayal of Lyon is intriguing, as sort of an underplayed siren. Not a bad story at all.
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  • From Streti on September 12, 2010
    Ahah. While I would prefer the Prince with more normal-sized equipment, it's another great story from you. The great details and observations are almost too many to pick from, from Faroush's troubles and the simultaneous reference of "he really let loose [in] Rainwall and Luserina", and Sialeeds distracting Logg.

    The action starts a little abruptly, perhaps, specifically "The prince and I were just discussing what a beautiful body you seemed to have. Perhaps you’d like to show it to us?" and seeing Lun refer to herself as "What this old thing?" is a little strange. I was also expecting some more interaction between Lyon and Lun, and there are a number of small typoes, but nothing jarring.

    One wonders whatever could have happened during that Dragonhorse event that Miakis organized, and then there's the amusing Falenan Culture Promotion thing and what a big slut the Prince is, followed by "Lyon was rubbing Faroush’s thick length along her face"... great stuff.

    And of course, it's a nice big finish with Lun getting totally glazed with protein pudding. I'm not sure if she's meant to be standing up or sitting down against the railing but the image of her kneeling naked on the deck in front of Prince and Lyon, dripping with cum and getting covered with more is quite appealing. Nice to see Lun get such attention...
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  • From ANON - Green Baron on September 07, 2010
    A very interesting concept, and well executed for the most part. I especially appreciate the way in which you depicted Lyon's personality throughout. Please continue with this story, it has the potential to be extremely good.
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  • From bonemaster on September 01, 2010
    Yet again, flattered! ;)
    Another well-written lemon! I like how it's based on events from the game because it gives the story some extra credibility. Since it's Lun's first encounter with the royalty her somewhat confused and shy behavior works well. Nice build up towards the messy finish. Well done!

    I certainly don't mind the returning characters as long as it doesn't get boring or repetitive. Sure, the members in your stories are large but the exaggeration isn't more extreme than how boobs are presented in hentai.

    If you have more fics in stores based on my drawings *fingers crossed* may I shamelessly suggest that you point to my gallery at the hentai-foundry rather than rule34?

    Hope to see more!
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  • From ANON - Anon on September 01, 2010
    You're great at this. Keep writing stories.
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