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Reviews for Son of Mar

By : LucienLene
  • From Anesor on February 02, 2011
    The backstory pieces (the accusation and man in shadow) seems to break the sequence of such a short segment. I would have preferred more about why he was here or why he didn't know his own past to a combat. A few things could still be cleaned up, even if late, like a double period or a homonym used, but it is an interesting start.
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  • From JayDee on January 22, 2011
    Good use of the prompt - there's a lot of sand, it's relevant to the story and parts of it have pretty good desert atmospherics. Hope he proves his innocence!
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  • From ApolloImperium on January 21, 2011
    Welcome to the prompts! Thanks for sharing :D
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  • From pittwitch on January 21, 2011
    Welcome to the Weekly prompts! Very interesting story, dear. I have no clue who these characters are but very much want to read more about them, and you've left the door open quite nicely to continue this. Good job! Thanks for sharing, PW
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