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Reviews for Crossed Paths

By : ILikeCake
  • From saint_sentiment on June 09, 2012
    I loved it. But shit, now I'm sad.

    I just wrote you a long-ass review, a very detailed one, but I lost it for some odd reason, and now I'm pissed. ANYWAY -

    I'm impressed that you wrote James/Heather. When James is paired up with anyone but Pyramid Head, it's star-worthy in my book. This pair is extremely rare, but I love it all the same. I lamented that there weren't more fics written featuring these two. The only ones I've seen were these two horribly written crack/smut fics on FF. But finally, someone did the pair justice. It's a shame they're not paired together more often. It's either because people don't have much of an imagination or they're wary about the age difference (eye roll). I'm glad that you pushed that to the wayside. You were even so audacious as to imply that Heather and Douglas once had a sexual relationship. I laud how daring this was. The sex scenes between Heather and James were hot, as well.

    On the crit side, there were a fair amount of grammatical errors - misspellings, run-ons, ect. It gives the impression of it being written without first being meticulously looked over before posting. The section breaks were also unnecessarily large. It proved a little daunting for me - I had the impression the fic was way longer than it was. Some sentences could also have been removed due to redundancy (repetition).

    I also have a love/hate relationship with the ending. It's practically begging to be multi-chapter. But since you wrote this months ago, I don't expect to see an extension of this story. Though I'd be happy if you wrote another James/Heather. That'd definitely make my day. I just felt this had so much to build upon - a lot of angst heavy material to work with. And I think they could have a happy and fruitful life together. Heather, more than anyone, would be able to understand his past and accept him for who he is. Heather's past is even bloodier and darker than his is. She'd be more apt to understand him than say, Laura, years later.

    If you like me to look over your stuff sometime I'd be happy to beta.

    I'm sorry - I said SO much more in my first draft of this review, which was regretfully lost, but suffice it to sy I'm glad you wrote this. Despite its flaws it was thoroughly enjoyable.

    Saint
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  • From Moonchild10 on March 16, 2012
    This was beautiful. Brilliantly written, and it was amazing to see a story featuring this couple. I didn't think anyone else enkoy it, and reading your beautiful portrayal made me remember just how much I enjoy it. I always love your writing.

    I'd love to see more of this, especially because I'm crying so much about him leaving right now and I'm just trying to imagine ways that it could turn out alright XD It would be awesome to see how it all turns out.
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  • From Hushabye on January 07, 2012
    Awesome! :3 Made me reconsider this pairing. :)
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